Dream Battle #3: Itachi vs Jiraiya (Part 2)

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This story takes place during the time-skip.

Jiraiya engages Itachi in taijutsu, but his kicks and punches fail to make contact.

"Such slow movements..." The legendary Uchiha says as he easily evades the Sannin's assault.

"Tsk. Well, if it's speed you want, then I won't disappoint you!" Jiraiya exclaims, the leaps back several yards.

In the next instant, Jiraiya's nose grows bigger and he gains warts, excess hair, and toad-like eyes. Also, the Two Great Sage Toads, Shima and Fukasaku, sit on either side of Jiraiya's shoulders as they use Sage Art: Amphibian Technique to gather natural energy for him to use.

"Whaaaa-" The two toads yell in unison as they lay eyes upon Jiraiya's opponent.

"Ma. Pa. Lend me your powers. As you can see, I'm in a bit of a pickle."

The male amphibian palms his own face. "A bit of a pickle, Jiraiya-boy? Itachi Uchiha you're up against here! You better grasp the situation you are in!

"Just thirty seconds ago, we were enjoying ourselves to tea and worm soup." The female toad complains and slumps her shoulders.

"Yeah, yeah. You two can give me an earful later, just help me out for now!" Jiraiya pleads.

The toads just nod their heads.

Jiraiya then performs Fire Release: Flame Bullet, but instead of aiming for "Itachi", he launches the gigantic collage of fire towards the eastern side of the field. The attack obliterates the trees upon contact and causes an incredible amount of destruction. Suddenly, a man jumps many feet upward from that area and lands just in front of the burning side of the grassfield. The real Itachi Uchiha stands there surrounded by flames. The clone that Jiraiya had mistaken to be the actual Itachi transforms into a dozen crows and they fly off into the night's sky.

"Toad Sage Mode grants the user quite the enhancements, I see." Itachi remarks, referring the Jiraiya's sensory ability to tell clones apart from original.

"Ha! You bet!" Jiraiya answers, then rushes Itachi. Though this time he is much quicker. Not to mention that his strength, durability, stamina, and reflexes are dramatically increased as well.

As Jiraiya sprints towards Itachi, he uses Sage Art: Hair Needle Senbon. Hardened strands of hair are shot at Itachi with immense speed and power, though they are all deflected by shuriken.

Damn. He sure is talented with shuriken. I didn't even see his hands come out of his cloak. Jiraiya says in thought.

Itachi just stands there like a statue, looking as bored and uninterested as ever, which further irritates Jiraiya.

The Toad Sage speeds up even more. He finally crosses the vast field and reaches his foe. Jiraiya attacks Itachi with a flurry of punches. As the Uchiha dodges them, the sheer force from the assault blows at the huge fire that was caused by the jutsu that Jiraiya used not too long ago. Angered and annoyed, Jiraiya puts all he has into his punches so that they fly so quickly that his arms appear to blur. Itachi is no longer able to dodge Jiraiya's taijutsu with ease; he is forced to defend himself.

Suddenly, Jiraiya is held by a large reddish-orange skeletal hand that extends from a ribcage formed by chakra that manifests around Itachi. Its grip is ridiculiously powerful.

I must make it seem as if I intend to kill him. Itachi internally says as he strengthens the force of his Susano'o's grasp around Jiraiya's body.

"Jiraiaya-boy!" Ma and Pa shout at the same time.

Jiraiya just clenches his teeth as he struggles, being too noble and great of a shinobi to yell in agony.

Itachi then launches Jiraiya upwards and punches him all the way to the other side of the clearing.

Jiraiya tumbles and rolls until a tree stops him. When he manages to rise to his feet after a few moments, he sees something from afar that he wished he didn't: Itachi's full-fledged, complete Susano'o....


Author's Note
This dream battle will be have about four parts because it's too epic to make it only a two-parter. Please give me feedback. It inspires and motivates me! xd
 
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try ITACHI vs MADARA

then i will read it this 1 is just a sick perverse old man against a genius
LMAO Jiraiya is a legend, man. He's worthy of facing Itachi because of his various techniques. Pshh, Itachi is my second favorite character, but he's not messing with Madara. Unless it's alive EMS Madara you speak of.
So far so good. Get writing with the next part. =)
Thanks, man. Alright, I will soon .:D
 

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I mean alive EMS Madara not edo madara + ok i think the winner is going 2 be madara but hm i thing it s gonna be cool

it would be cool 2 see sasuke and oro vs hashi

keep it up
 
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It's good ;)
Thanks, Kages! Though the best parts have yet to be shown :)
oh just 1 thing uchiha vs uchiha is really tricky ok madara has EMS but don't forget izanami & izanagi
I'll include as much as I can. Dammit, using Itachi in these dream battles is hard because he's a genius and I'm obviously not. However, I know his personality well enough to do a decent or better job. Don't worry, I got this.
 

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Aha, you must learn the way of the editing, good job though. ^_^ It's best to go over what you've written several times, checking grammar, making sure things flow well, seeing if certain sentences would be better written another way, etc. Also, while you're doing dialogue, I find it helpful to stand up and act out the part to make it more natural. Treat it like these are actors on camera and you have to get the perfect shot for each little thing. xd

I must be honest for a moment, a lot of stuff seems stiff here. Not sure how to explain it, but there isn't a pulse to this. The words themselves lack life. This is something I have problems with all the time, I often go over my own stuff multiple times and want to just start over because what I wrote was lacking some element that would have allowed the words to breathe and come alive. Also, you need more description. Even though we know these characters and how they fight, we need more visuals so we can watch the action in our minds. You aren't making a movie, that would be easy, writing is hard and at least you can do it without money, but you need to turn each page into a picture. ^^

You have a lot of training to do, I suggest you take every opportunity to practice, every opportunity, even just your posts on NB or something. Check to see how many errors I made in this post. ^_^

Keep it up, great job!
 

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Aha, you must learn the way of the editing, good job though. ^_^ It's best to go over what you've written several times, checking grammar, making sure things flow well, seeing if certain sentences would be better written another way, etc. Also, while you're doing dialogue, I find it helpful to stand up and act out the part to make it more natural. Treat it like these are actors on camera and you have to get the perfect shot for each little thing. xd

I must be honest for a moment, a lot of stuff seems stiff here. Not sure how to explain it, but there isn't a pulse to this. The words themselves lack life. This is something I have problems with all the time, I often go over my own stuff multiple times and want to just start over because what I wrote was lacking some element that would have allowed the words to breathe and come alive. Also, you need more description. Even though we know these characters and how they fight, we need more visuals so we can watch the action in our minds. You aren't making a movie, that would be easy, writing is hard and at least you can do it without money, but you need to turn each page into a picture. ^^

You have a lot of training to do, I suggest you take every opportunity to practice, every opportunity, even just your posts on NB or something. Check to see how many errors I made in this post. ^_^

Keep it up, great job!
Thanks for the honesty, sensei. Yeah, it definitely wouldn't hurt me to check my work, even if it is just on NB. Man oh man, you have no idea how much I hate writing dialogue; it's pretty difficult for me. Practice forsure makes perfect, so I won't be discouraged. We were gifted with the ability to write well, but it's up to us to develop it, right? I put way more effort and time into my novel, but I better do the same with my FFs if I want more fans and such.
Thanks to your guidance, I'll get better. :D
It is such a dull Satuday for me, so I'm writing part 3 right now. I hope you like it more than you did this one.
 

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Thanks for the honesty, sensei. Yeah, it definitely wouldn't hurt me to check my work, even if it is just on NB. Man oh man, you have no idea how much I hate writing dialogue; it's pretty difficult for me. Practice forsure makes perfect, so I won't be discouraged. We were gifted with the ability to write well, but it's up to us to develop it, right? I put way more effort and time into my novel, but I better do the same with my FFs if I want more fans and such.
Thanks to your guidance, I'll get better. :D
It is such a dull Satuday for me, so I'm writing part 3 right now. I hope you like it more than you did this one.
Everyone has something they have problems with. Me, I'm bad at description but great at dialogue, so a lot of times I'll try to lean more on dialogue when i should be developing other things. xd
 
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