Naruto's chapter two

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Naruto's loss and gain
Chapter 2
Naruto runs quickly towards the Hokage without a second thought in mind. However, before he could attack his friends got in his way.
Naruto: I see so you guys decided to take his side huh….

Sakura: Naruto!!! We are doing….
Before Sakura could finish, Naruto screamed with anger.

Naruto: Summoning Jutsu!!!!!!
Naruto and the three toads went to attack the Hokage. Naruto hid behind a tree to enter sage mode

Sasuke: susano'o!!

Hokage: wood style: Wood Prison Jutsu!

Sasuke attacked all the toads with susano’o and knocked them out. While the Hokage imprisoned them in his jutsu

Naruto: How?!? I thought the first Hokage and Captain Yamato were the only ones able to use wood style jutsu!!

Hokage: hahaha, yes those two were capable of these jutsu however, I was implanted with the First Hokage’s DNA.

Naruto: WHAT?!?

Hokage: That’s not all. I’m also an Uchiha Surviver
Everyone: what?!?

Hokage: That’s right. Every one capture Naruto Uzumaki
Naruto wasn’t able to reach sage mode quickly enough, so he went into kyuubi mode instead. From Naruto's yellow cloak a dozen hands came out and formed balls of spinning wind.

Naruto: Rasenrengan!!!!!

Hokage: Susano’o!!!

Everyone besides Sasuke and the Hokage were hit by the Rasenrengan and were knocked out.
Naruto: tch!
All of a sudden Naruto starts feeling some extreme pain a little lower than his chest
Naruto: ugh!

Hokage: are you starting to feel it Naruto Uzumaki?

Naruto: what did you do to me?!?

Hokage: Nothing much, I just placed a seal on you the first time we met too keep you in check

Naruto: you bastard!!!

Hokage: be careful, use too much chakra and I can’t guaranty you’ll survive

Naruto: I rather die than give in to you

Sasuke: Naruto if you don’t stop, you’ll die a pathetic death

Naruto:*in a deep voice* I should have killed you Sasuke

Sasuke: what.... did you say?
Naruto creates two rasenshuriken in both of his hands and on two chakra arms.

Naruto: I’m gonna kill you both, even if it’s the last thing I do!
Naruto throws all four rasenshuriken and they hit the Hokage and Sasuke; but before Naruto could see if they were dead his vision went blurry and Naruto felt tremendous pain, he couldn’t take it, so he collapsed.
*in Naruto’s head*

Kuruma: Naruto, hey Naruto

Naruto: what is it Kuruma

Kuruma: I got good news and bad news


Naruto: well what is it?

Kuruma: Ok the good news is you killed the Hokage. I don’t know why but his Susano’o vanished and you hit him dead on.

Naruto: so what’s the bad news

Kurama: First, the seal the Hokage placed on you is killing me, and second, Sasuke survived. Naruto you should know the only way I can survive is by getting out of your body; but you on the other hand will die no matter what.
Naruto: I see….. (He has with a depresed look in his face) It looks like we’re gonna have to part ways Kurama
Naruto starts to do some hand signs.

Kurama: Naruto, what are you doing?!?!
Naruto’s tears start too run down his cheek…

Naruto: If I’m gonna die no matter what I do then I’ll die alone. I’m not gonna take you with me, and no buts either. Kurama you have been a great friend the last year, and the time I spent on my own and when I was just a child. You were there and for that, and I thank you. Please don’t argue with me either, this is my last wish.

Kurama: ok kid I’ll do as you say
Naruto's jutsu releases kurama into the forest of death. Couple of minutes passes, and Naruto passes away. After long period of time Naruto woke up and looked around. He saw a man with the same eyes as Nagato and had a neckalece with similar markings to Naruto’s neck when he's in bijuu mode.

Naruto: ar..are....you..th..the

So6p: yes I’m the sage of six paths. Naruto Uzumaki, I’m gonna take you as my student and train you.

Naruto: what?!?!?!!?!?!
 

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*Yo yo without a doubt its a good chapter
i'm just a little confused, one important factor
whose the hokage, that's what i need to know
the one naruto deems as his only foe*
yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!
 

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Well Sage of Six Paths TOOK LONG ENOUGH TO SHOW UP :rage:

They were fighting Juubi and you never appeared, and NOW you appear :rage:!

Nvm... Anyway, your chapters goes way to fast in my opinion. Feels like you're are missing the communications details and as well the more action parts.
I want you to describe stuffs/actions little bit more so we (readers) can actually image us the fighting scenes better, otherwise it sounds like you have a good idea of story :)
 

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*Yo yo without a doubt its a good chapter
i'm just a little confused, one important factor
whose the hokage, that's what i need to know
the one naruto deems as his only foe*
yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!

Hey Killer Bee, nice rap
 

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Well that got interesting so did Naruto survive and what happened to kyuubi after the seal. This was what was confusing be other than that great chapter
 

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Very good written i just read the last part in ur profile.
 

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Well Sage of Six Paths TOOK LONG ENOUGH TO SHOW UP :rage:

They were fighting Juubi and you never appeared, and NOW you appear :rage:!

Nvm... Anyway, your chapters goes way to fast in my opinion. Feels like you're are missing the communications details and as well the more action parts.
I want you to describe stuffs/actions little bit more so we (readers) can actually image us the fighting scenes better, otherwise it sounds like you have a good idea of story :)
Actioly it's going fast because that's not were the main fight takes place and by the way I'm just gonna mention that naruto and the sage of six paths are at the place people go after they die
 

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For all of you're qouistions they will be awnsered in the nex chapter
 

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*Yo yo without a doubt its a good chapter
i'm just a little confused, one important factor
whose the hokage, that's what i need to know
the one naruto deems as his only foe*
yeeeeeeeeeeeeeeaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaahhhhhhhhhhhhhhh!
LMFAO! Best Bee impersonation ever!!!!!
I think the "Hokage" is supposed to be Madara.
 

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Woah, sicker than the first whose the hokage?
I'm thinkin it's obito,
but not sure since I haven't seen his susanoo..
I think it's Madara, susano+wood
But he died pretty easily to be he.
This chapter is really good.
 

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Cool chap.
 
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