Free forever.

[Shiina..]

Written by my mind.​

Suffering from your hate, suffering from your love..
Swallowing the pain of others. Made me come to this point.
Chasing after my dreams. // I can't do it anymore,

'cause everything is been destroyed.
I acted like no other in order to show you my happiness..

Through everything I did for you.
Nothing meant a single thing to you.
I can't get rid of the past nor can I predict the future,..

However I can change..

~
At last, your sighs and pain made you cold and did your final deed.
No tears is been shed, yet.. There's nothing to cry about, because:

Now,

I can be everyone I ever want to be.
I can do everything because now I am free.
I can be like the sun shining over everyone.
I'm the tree whom can give you oxygen.

I shall build my dreams together and find a way to pleasure.
I will take the route to happiness and share my treasure.

I already feel the spirit that been flowing through my body.
A slight tear rolling down for nobody.
I'm happy, happier than ever.

Because I will be free forever.
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EDITED: ~Thank you guys!

 

[-Punk-]

That bastard

 

[Legendary Broly]

Well at least your're happy

 

[Yo pappy]

That bastard

I swear it was an accident.

 

[Crow.]

Funny: Get the wrong hole did he?
Serious: This is some of the better poetry I've read in a long time. ^.^

 

[Shiina..]

I swear it was an accident.

Shut up!

 

[Paintry4]

Aha kati ramro poem xa yaar- wow how much good poem it is.....

 

[silmarill]

Nice poem, I underestimated your capabilities.

 

[Shiina..]

Thank you both! ^_^

 

[Delta]

Unlike most here I'm going to be blunt
1 fix ya spelling mistakes
2 I have no idea what this poem is about
3 it made no sence regardless
I'm not normally blunt but reading people mistake this or something it int kinda annoyed me, you can do better

 

[Shiina..]

Unlike most here I'm going to be blunt
1 fix ya spelling mistakes
2 I have no idea what this poem is about
3 it made no sence regardless
I'm not normally blunt but reading people mistake this or something it int kinda annoyed me, you can do better

*sense ^_^

1.I just did!
2.You don't have to know nor understand.
3.I don't care, this poem is made by my mind. I only with may a few friends know what this poem is about.
I won't do it "better". Because there's no need for me to write another poem. I did this for a certain person only.
To show that I can live and move on. ^.^

Thanks for your time, anyway.

 

[Gaara]

I thought it was good.

 

[Troyard]

Nice poem

 

[Yuka]

the poem was kind of depressing but nicely written though

 

[Vasto Lordé]

Unlike most here I'm going to be blunt
1 fix ya spelling mistakes
2 I have no idea what this poem is about
3 it made no sence regardless
I'm not normally blunt but reading people mistake this or something it int kinda annoyed me, you can do better

*sense ^_^

1.I just did!
2.You don't have to know nor understand.
3.I don't care, this poem is made by my mind. I only with may a few friends know what this poem is about.
I won't do it "better". Because there's no need for me to write another poem. I did this for a certain person only.
To show that I can live and move on. ^.^

Thanks for your time, anyway.

Looool! Suki!

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I loved it .-. , as you said finally, you're free !

 

[Roby]

Not bad, better than the usual stuff people post. Not the best either though.

 

[Scooby Doo]

Wow this is really great I didn't know you can wirte good poems like this.

 

[Shiina..]

Not bad, better than the usual stuff people post. Not the best either though.

the poem was kind of depressing but nicely written though

Wow this is really great I didn't know you can wirte good poems like this.

Looool! Suki!

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I loved it .-. , as you said finally, you're free !

Thank you, Bader! =DD Thanks again and for everything! :hug:

 

[Shinobi Train]

How are you? :hug:

Here's my "Emperor's new clothes" attempt:

This poem brings out the essence of one's soul and makes them challenge their reality even. First an acknowledgement, then it moves into a solution almost, a completion, no matter how it makes the reader feel at the end. Then again, this is more like a prelude, for what is to come next, now that you (the reader and I'm assuming the author?) are free?

 

[King Cobra]

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You proved me wrong. :ghehe: it's pretty damn good.