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(Hakke Ryu no Oyadama) 8 Trigrams Dragon Head
Type: Offensive/Defensive
Rank: S
Range: Short-mid
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: This jutsu is a similair to the gentle step twin lion fists jutsu but more advanced, the user emits chakra from all the tenketsu in their body, using the released chakra the user manipulates it to form the head of a dragon which he is able to control freely by using both hands and is able to attack an enemy upto mid-range, while the dragon head is active the user keeps gradually releasing chakra shrouding themself, providing a small protective aura due to the inability to use handseals while this jutsu is active. When the dragon is directed for an attack it spins towards the opponent, confusing them and throwing off the opponent's aim before striking.
  • The user can freely manipulate the movements of the dragon
  • Manipulating the dragon's movement counts as one out of the three moves per turn
  • This jutsu stays active for upto two turns
  • This jutsu can only be used once per battle
  • The user has to keep both hands focused on controlling the dragon, disabling the ability to use handseals or anything else which requires the user's hands while this technique is active
  • The chakra used to shroud the user is able to provide protection from jutsu upto B-Rank
  • Restricted to Hyuga clan members
  • Can only be used/taught by Tybone
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-Declined. While controlling the dragon you can't be releasing chakra shrouding yourself your rank. You don't have perfect chakra control yet. Resubmit when you reach Kage rank-

(Fūton: Tenryū no Yokugeki) Wind Release: Sky Dragon’s Wing Attack
Type: Offensive
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description:
The user extends both arms sideways and generates a large whirlwind around each of them which violently twists and rotates, the user can freely manipulate the direction of the whirlwinds after they have been released in order to ensnare the opponent, violently cutting them before throwing them away. Simply dodging this jutsu won’t be possible and it forces the opponent to come up with a counter.
  • This jutsu can only be used twice per battle
  • Cannot use another S-Rank during the same turn
  • This jutsu can only be used/taught by Tybone
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-Declined. By extending your arms you create whirlwinds? Impossible, not to mention dangerous for you and also, similar jutsus already exist-

(Reppuu Tsurugi) Gale Sword
Type:Weapon
Range:Short
Rank:S
Chakra Cost:40
Chakra Damage:80
Description:
The Gale Sword is a double edged sword forged with chakra infused steel by a blacksmith specialized in fuuton, this granted the sword a special trait useable by those who also specialize themselves in wind. The special trait the Gale Sword grants to those specialized in wind is that when they use the blade to initiate a fuuton jutsu which requires a sword the power of that jutsu will be raised by one rank. The Gale Sword is extremly loyal to it's owner, therefore when anyone unauthorized wields it, it will send tiny sharp crescents of wind from it's hilt causing minor cuts, similair to those pesky papercuts.

  • The Gale Sword's ability is only useable by those who have wind as their specialty and have mastery over it aswell.
  • The Gale Sword's ability only works on fuuton jutsu of B-Rank and below.
  • The Gale Sword's ability is only useable with fuuton jutsu which require a sword.
  • The Gale Sword's ability is useable four times per battle.
  • Can only be wielded by Tybone/anyone with permission.
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~feel free to edit anything to have it meet the requirements~

~Dropping my Mushi Jizo CW if approved~

-Declined. -

(Mushi Jizõ) Bug Buddha
Type:Weapon
Range:Short
Rank:S
Chakra Cost:40
Chakra Damage:80
Description:
The Mushi Jizõ was forged by Kurotsuchi Mayuri during his absence, it's a specially made sword with the blade shaped in a trident-form with a buddha face at the bottom, the Mushi Jizõ has several openings in the blade, there are tiny holes on each of the three tips and small gaps in both eyes of the buddha's face. This sword is primarily used to store Kikaichu bugs inside of it, allowing the wielder to release the bugs at will for a special attack. Once the wielder stabs his opponent he releases several A-Rank bugs from the tips which enter the opponents body as they begin sucking them dry of chakra from the inside, damaging their organs. Also, if the opponent narrowly evades a slash from the Mushi Jizõ, but the sword comes in such a short distance that the bugs can jump to the opponent, the wielder can release several B-Rank bugs from the eyes of the blade which then cling onto the opponent's skin, sucking out their chakra. If bugs are stored in the sword they will attack anyone other then the owner who wields the Mushi Jizõ.
*Note: The Mushi Jizõ can only be wielded by Tybone/anyone with permission.
*Note: The ability is only useable by Aburame clan members.
*Note: The wielder is only able to release bugs from the sword two times per battle.
*Note: When either ability of the sword is used, it counts as a move of the user.

-Approved, I added the red part-
 
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Suna Botsuraku - Sand Fall
Type: Offense/Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: User opens a very big portal in the sky from which the sand in very huge ammount drops down, enveloping the targets completely.
Note: -Can only be used 4 times per battle.
-Can only be taught by Proteus.

-Declined.-
 
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(Jishaku Ninpō:go-ruden shourai) Magnetic Ninja Arts: A Golden Future
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Attack/Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40 (- 10 to user)
Damage Points: 80
Description: This technique releases two big Gold Dust spheres in to the air of opposite polaritys causing great resistance and heat between the two they begin to build magnetic force, This happens as the magnetic forces collide repelling both spheres causing gold dust to scatter across the field in huge spikes and spirals that are very random and hard to dodge. The spikes and spiral fall randomly down towards the battle field and the opponent needs to run around to avoid being hit. It lasts until the concentration of the user is broken by the opponent.

-Using this technique causes a great strain on the user limiting them to only 2 moves in the next turn-
-This technique uses all of the users magnetic chakra causing them to be unable to manipulate Gold Dust for two turns-
-Usable only once per match-
-Can only be used by a fourth kazekage bio, May only be taught by ReXii-


(Jishaku Ninpō:go-rudo bunshin)-Magnetic Ninja Arts: Gold dust clone
Type:Supplementary
Rank:B
RangeShort
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:N/A
Description: The user first makes a single handseal causing a clone of gold dust to form from the ground around them, The clone is unable to use any element but may manipulate gold dust throwing tools of gold dust up to mid range with a maximum of C rank force E.G gold dust shuriken/kunai.

-May only be taught by ReXii and The Fifth Kazekage-
-Usable only 3 times per battle-


(Jishaku Ninpō:kinchiri joutomurai)-Magnetic Ninja Arts: Gold dust imperial funeral
Type:Offense/Supplemental
Rank:S
RangeShort-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description: The user first forms handseals to create a tremendous amount of gold dust to spill forth from the earth in a wave that surrounds the opponent and begins compacting itself very tightly trapping them. Once trapped the gold dust continues forming itself to be thicker ending up in a large sphere. The sphere is then raised from the ground with golds diagmagnetic properties and caused to violently collapse in on itself.

-May only be taught by ReXii-
-Usable only once per battle-

Feel free to edit these by the way Izuna :)

-All edited and approved-
 
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Lake Toya-Hoshikudaki
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 5 each turn is in play
Damage Points: N/A (+10 ken, +10 tai)
Description: Lake Toya is a katana with a wooden scabbard. The legend goes that the first hokage, after growing a fascination for kenjutsu, created a katana with his wood release, but the weapon was lost in time after his death. The wood used is of the highest caliber, being able to resist huge amount of strain, and highly reistant against sharp edged objects, these not being able to lay a single scratch in the wood.
The user is able to use the katana as a bokuto, landing strong blunt attacks at the opponent, or unsheat it in order to use a sharp edge. The user is also able to use both the scabbard and the sword in order to make blash-slash combinations.
The sword has some strange power up though. After being with the current user for a long time, the katana and the user will grow an unorthodox bond with each other, as many kenjutsu masters believe that swords have their own souls. The user, by channeling chakra into the sword (regardless of being sheated or not), he/she gains +10 boost in kenjutsu and taijutsu, but the user most maintain adding chakra into the sword in order to work. The reason of this strange boost, is becuase when the chakra channelizes into the sword, the sword makes the chakra richer and transmits it into the user's muscles and other areas in the body, making the user stronger and faster
-This sword can only be used by Gin-San
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~Pending~ I'll need you to restrict the ability to boost your speed and strength. Do whatever you judge right, but it must be restricted.
Resubmitting:

Lake Toya-Hoshikudaki
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 5 each turn is in play
Damage Points: N/A (+10 ken, +10 tai)
Description: Lake Toya is a katana with a wooden scabbard. The legend goes that the first hokage, after growing a fascination for kenjutsu, created a katana with his wood release, but the weapon was lost in time after his death. The wood used is of the highest caliber, being able to resist huge amount of strain, and highly reistant against sharp edged objects, these not being able to lay a single scratch in the wood.
The user is able to use the katana as a bokuto, landing strong blunt attacks at the opponent, or unsheat it in order to use a sharp edge. The user is also able to use both the scabbard and the sword in order to make blash-slash combinations.
The sword has some strange power up though. After being with the current user for a long time, the katana and the user will grow an unorthodox bond with each other, as many kenjutsu masters believe that swords have their own souls. The user, by channeling chakra into the sword (regardless of being sheated or not), he/she gains +10 boost in kenjutsu and taijutsu, but the user most maintain adding chakra into the sword in order to work. The reason of this strange boost, is becuase when the chakra channelizes into the sword, the sword makes the chakra richer and transmits it into the user's muscles and other areas in the body, making the user stronger and faster in his swings.
-The user's speed is only applicable when striking. This means strikes with this sword are faster and stronger than normal, thus the enhancement of +10 kenjutsu.
-The user's taijutsu skills improved in strength (not neccesarily in speed, as the muscles are solidely enhanced for sword strikes), thus increasing the power of taijutsu techniques by +10
-The user's base speed does not improve whatseover, as the enriched chakra isn't mainly channeled to the muscles in charge of walking, running and jumping
-This sword can only be used by a samurai bio

-This sword can only be used by Gin-San
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Took the part out of sharpening reflexes.
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-Approved-

New submission:

(Hijutsu: Ningen no Rikigaku Ichi-ji keishiki) - Secret Technique: The art of Human Anatomy Secondary Form
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: N/A (+20 through power increase)
Description: After years of study and hard work, martial artists were able to determinate that the human body is a magnificent weapon with incalculable potential. By working in general and specific areas of the human anatomy, the martial artists were able to dominate their own bodies, pushing them to the maximum potential. This strenuous exercises helped the marital artist to recognize every muscle and bone from their body, thus giving extra support to their normal movements and making them much more deadly. Every movement of their body is packed with much more power and speed, becoming the ultimate human being. This technique increases the speed in which the user attacks, meaning taijutsu and kenjutsu attacks speed are increased. The user's initial acceleration in a jump or sprint are increased dramatically also. This cannot increased the constant velocity of the user, as all the muscles from the area doing the activity only activate in spurts of time. The speed of strikes are tripled; the acceleration of leaps and jumps is tripled also, comparable to the the leaps of the Third Raikage. The user channels chakra into the muscles that are about to be used in order to decrease the damage of overuse.
-Can only be used once per battle
-Can only be active for three turns
-This technique can be activated at any time regardless of being the second phase of Secret Technique: The art of Human Mechanics Primary Form.
-At the end of the technique, the user is unable to use Taijutsu A-rank or higher for three turns.


-Declined. This should be an ability of a Custom Clan not a jutsu-

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(Kenjutsu: Kibikibi Shindo) Swords Arts: Energetic Vibrance
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The origin of this technique is the derivative of a simple stab and lunge. Swordsman, after noticing that stab movements left them open for an interval of a second to be attacked, designed the idea of an effective way to make the stab motion much more deadly. The user, holding the sword, will begin to channel chakra in it's sword, though the chakra by the normal eye will be invisible. Then, as the user stabs, the user will slighly channel chakra in it's feet to impulse him forward in order to cut distance between the user and the enemy. At the same time, the user will cause the chakra in the sword to vibrate rapidly, making it hard for any opponent to see the final trajectory of the sword and it's tip. The difficulty of defending against this technique isn't the sudden burst toward the opponent, but the sword motion itself.
-Because of the high movement of the vibrations, it requires a 2 tome sharingan or higher or enhanced senses in order to predict the motion of the sword and counter accordingly.
-This technique can only be used twice per battle.
-Can only be taught by Gin-San

If you think the burst of movement forward is too much, you can take it out.

-Declined. Similar jutsus already exist-
 
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Fire release : Exploding Flame Blade | Katon :Bakuretsu Honoo Katana No Jutsu
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short- Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description : User ignites his/her arms and generates long torrents of flames from them, which move to hit the enemy in a spiraling formation. Each connecting strike seems to generate a powerful, the user can or attack the opponent with it so it milts his skin , or he can uses it as ropes to tide the opponent with it , melting all of his body
- Can only be used 3 times
- Can't use any katon jutsu at the same turn
- Can't use higher than A rank katon technique on the next turn
- Must be Sannin ranked or above
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~Declined~ Your technique seemed ok up until I read the bold part. I don't usually pick on grammar and syntax, but I honestly couldn't understand what you wrote. Re-submit with proper description.
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(Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Raikou ) Summoning No Jutsu: Pikachu
Rank: S
Type: Summoning
Range: Short range
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A [ + 10 to any lightning attack ]
Description: Pikachu has short, yellow fur with brown stripes on the back, red cheeks that can produce small jolts of electricity, a mouth that looks like a sideways three, black-tipped ears, along with an unusually shaped tail, Pikachu has acute senses of hearing, thanks to its large ears. Most domestic Pikachu are able to understand and interpret human speech at levels far surpassing those of any pet dog , long time ago when he was a little kitten , his owner tough him how to control the bolts that comes from his cheeks so he can't make any lightning attack without technique , however he is capable to give the user 10 boost to every lightning attack , and the user as long as pikachu stands on his head , the user may make lightning attack with less 4 hand seals , also due to his ears and his hearing strength , he is able to hear any thing that walks on the ground which helps the user to know where is his opponent , also Pikachu can stand on the user's head even if the user move or fly .
- Lasts on the battle 5 turns
- Can't use any lightning attack without a technique
- Can only be taught by -Kamishiro-
- Can't hear/sense the opponent while the opponent merged with the ground or flying
- Must sign the cats summoning contract .
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~Declined~ First of all, you're overextending your summons ability to hear. He's not a sound specialist so take it all out. You're allowed to have a summon with good hearing, but this one is actually ripping off Mugi's inner sonar skills. Your summon can only use up to S-rank. Make it +5 when standing on top of you and only for jutsu up to S-rank.
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Water Release : Cutting Water | Suiton : Sashiki Mizu No Jutsu
Type: Attack
Rank: A
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user charges his hand with water chakra , forming the water into slicing waves , then the user aim the waves of water towards is opponent . slicing the opponent . This techniques capable to slice solid rocks too.
- Can only be used 4 time per turn
- Can't use any water technique at the same turn
- Must be Sannin ranked or above
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~Declined~ Similar technique already exist.
~ Resubmitting

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Katon :Bakuretsu Honoo Katana No Jutsu
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short- Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: 80
Description : User ignites his/her arms and generates long torrents of flames from them, which move to hit the enemy in a spiraling formation. Each connecting strike seems to generate a powerful burning explosion, It has two different uses , one the user can use it as a normal s ranked katon attack so the flame go directly towards the opponent , two the user can create a several ropes made of flame ,tiding the opponent and melting his skin
- Can only be used 3 times
- Can't use any katon jutsu at the same turn
- Can't use higher than A rank katon technique on the next turn
- Must be Sannin ranked or above
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removed what you said and added the bolded


-Approved-


(Kuchiyose No Jutsu: Raikou ) Summoning No Jutsu: Pikachu
Rank: S
Type: Summoning
Range: Short range
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A [ + 5 to any lightning attack S rank or below ]
Description: Pikachu has short, yellow fur with brown stripes on the back, red cheeks that can produce small jolts of electricity, a mouth that looks like a sideways three, black-tipped ears, along with an unusually shaped tail, Pikachu has acute senses of hearing, thanks to its large ears. Most domestic Pikachu are able to understand and interpret human speech at levels far surpassing those of any pet dog , long time ago when he was a little kitten , his owner tough him how to control the bolts that comes from his cheeks so he can use up to S rank lightning attacks , also he is capable to give the user 5 boost to every lightning attack S rank or below , and the user as long as pikachu stands on his head , the user may make lightning attack with less 4 hand seals , also due to his ears and his hearing strength , he has good hearing ability , also Pikachu can stand on the user's head even if the user move or fly .
- Lasts on the battle 5 turns
- Can't use any lightning attack without a technique
- Can only be taught by -Kamishiro-
- Can't hear/sense the opponent while the opponent merged with the ground or flying
- Must sign the cats summoning contract .
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-Approved-


New Submission
[ Meiton : Biggu Bangou Hirameki No Jutsu ] - Dark Release : The Big Bang Flash
Rank: A
Type:
Range: Short - Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user channel his dark chakra into his dominant hand , creating a normal sized bomb made of dark chakra with purple color [ the size of normal Rasengan ], then he throws it at near spot to the opponent , and as the bomb touches the ground , it create dark flash at sudden time , causing the opponent to be blind temporary , and creating huge explosion .
- Can only be used 3 times per battle
- Must be Sage or below
- Can't use any Fire / lightning technique in the same turn
- can't use any Dark release technique in the same turn
- Can't use any Dark release above A rank at the next turn
- Can only use up to A rank technique [ lightning and fire ] in the next turn .

-Declined. There is no reason for this jutsu the way you have written this. You can use a smoke bomb and it has the same effects. Edit your description and mention exactly your intentions for this jutsu-
 
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Link to contract

Kyuouise No Justu: Raikou Oni
Type: Offensive
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user smears blood on his Otter Tatoo and then they slam their hand on the ground which summons Raikou the otter. Raikou is 4ft tall and is 10ft long and is very strong. But do to his length and strength his speed is not that good. His tail is the source of his strength and can knock a grown man out cold when it is swung. He has an affinity to the lightning element and can preform Lightning C-rank and below if the user creates the hand seals needed.
Once every two turns Raikou can Fire a lightning bolt from his tail that is equivilant to a B-rank Lightning attack.

~Only signers of the Otter contract may use him
~Every technique used by Raikou counts to the user 3 moves a turn
~Raikou stays on the field for 4 turns before returning to the secret palace in the seas of Amegakure
~Can only be used twice a match

Feel free to edit for approval :D and If the name Raikou has already been taking please notify me so I can change it.

-Approved-
 
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(Kikaichuu: Regoburokku) Destruction Bugs: Lego Blocks
Type: Offensive
Rank: D
Range: Short - Mid
Chakra Cost: 10
Damage Points: 20
Description: The user of this technique will release a specific amount of bugs out of his/her body and make the bugs form 4 squared blocks wich will aim for the legs of the opponent and drain the chakra out of them.
Note: Must have permission from Obvious and have an Aburame biography


-If you have an approved Aburame biography you don't need this jutsu-
 
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(Fuinjutsu: Kaminari Den) = Sealing Techniques: Thunder Palace
Rank: A
Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Range: All
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: The user summons multiple orbs with a special tag on them, filled with enormous amounts of Lightning chakra and suspends them high up in the air in a circular formation around the target. If anyone decides to pass by the orbs, the seal will activate and the one who passed will be immediately zapped by lightning and will be unable to move for 1 turn (pretty much like zapped with chidori nagashi) If the orbs are destroyed by an outside force, lightning bolts will be shot from the orbs and will zap him extremely fast (in a matter of second or so) and he/she will have trouble moving for 1 turn while being disoriented and dizzy.
Note: The orbs can not be placed in short range radius from the opponent (meaning the user can't summone them next to the opponent, hence electrocuting him on the spot)
Note: Can only be used once per battle.
Note: The orbs last for 4 turns.
Note: The orbs can be placed around a whole village.

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This is how the technique looks.

~Approved~ Check the bold part I altered.

(Hyouton: Tsumetai Fuutoni) Ice Release: Icy Wind
Type: Offense
Rank: S
Range: Short/Middle/Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: This is one of the most advanced Ice techniques, the ability to turn wind into ice. The user will begin by concentrating his water and wind chakra but will add an extreme amount of wind chakra making it more like a wind but when mixed with the cold water chakra it makes it freeze. So with the use of one hand seal, the user will create a massive gust of icy wind in front of them that heads toward the opponent rapidly, turning all in its path to ice.
Note: Only twice per battle
Note: Can only be taught by Akisha
Note: No S rank or above Ice, Water or Wind for the following turn.
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This is how it looks

~Declined~ No. I will never accept something as flawed as this. For the air to freeze you'd need to reach several hundreds of degrees below zero, and the air would only turn liquid, not even solid.

Ancient Ice Style: 100 Mirrors Labyrinth = Furui Hyouton: 100 Hyōshō no Meikyuu
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary/Offensive/Defensive
Range: All
Chakra Cost: 40 (+10 for each turn)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user will unroll a scroll with the Ice kanji on it and by slamming his hand on it, he will summon forth 100 mirrors that form a huge labyrinth. The maze is so huge that the enemies can search the way out for hours. The mirrors are 10m tall and even the floor is made of mirrors preventing the enemy to escape from underground. The user can merge with the mirrors and travel at high speeds that only sharingan of 3t can track. The user can use the mirrors to attack from them or use them as a distraction to escape, since his reflection would be all over the place.
Note: The user can channel chakra to repair any damage made on the mirrors but it counts as a single move.
Note: Can only be taught by Akisha
Note: Only once per battle.
Note: Due to the large chakra requiring for this jutsu at the 3rd turn the user’s movements and reactions are quite slow and can be tracked by any normal ninja.
Note: The mirrors last for 4 turns and can only be repaired through chakra twice per battle
Note: While merged, the user can not use any techniques, meaning if he wants to use ninjutsu whatsoever he will have to re-emerge.
Note: No S rank Water Wind or Ice for 3 turns after the mirrors are gone.
Note: No Ice for 1 turn after the mirrors are gone.

~Declined~ I will not approve any variation of Haku's already OP technique. Also, this one is extremely OP lol.
izuna hakus ice mirrors are no where near op anyone could escape them in this rp in the anruto world? not every one but in the rp theres many ways to escape it.

anyway me es try to make an es customs >_>

hyouton: yuki tai ( ice style snow arms)
Type: Supp
Rank: B
Range: short/long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: n/a
Description: The user will make 3 hand seals and focus his water and wind chakra into his arms. the user will then slam his arms/hands ( depends on how deep the snow is) into the snow and focus that chakra. the user useing his chakra will be able to form two or more snow arms where there is snow.
must:there must be snow on the field
note: can only be used 3 times.
note: arms must stay in the snow for jutsu to stay active.
note: as long as arms are in the snow the jutsu will continue.
note: can only have a max of 5 snow arms.
note: can retarct the arms back into the snow and make them some where else as long as there is snow there.

-Declined. Not a good idea for a jutsu. As for the last note, theres a cannon jutsu similar-

hyouton: yuki re forma ( ice style snow reforming)
Type: Supp
Rank: B
Range: short/long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage points: n/a
Description: While it is snowing the user will make five hand seals. the user will then focus his water and wind chakra into the snow falling from the sky, the snow now infused with chakra will reform any ice it touchs, useing the ice in the snow ( plus the chakra giving it that abailty) ( an example i use this jutsu then i use ice spikes the ice spike is melted by useing the ice in the snow the snow will land on the broken ice spike and reform it)
note: only lasts 3 turns
note: can only be used twice.
note: no s rank ice jutsu next turn.
note: must be snowing.

hyouton: doki of the koori kami ( ice style: wrath of the ice god)
Rank: forbidden
Type: Offensive/defenive ( only as a tornado)
Range: Short-long
Chakra Cost: 60
Damage Points: 90
Description: The user will make 15 hand seals and will focus his wind and wtaer chakra into the air while doing so. the user will then clap his hands together in the ram hand seal and will begin to spin his chakra around as fast as he can, the user will really be praying to the ice god useing a sacerfice of his own chakra to call forth the ice god. After one turn of doing this it will begin to become a freezeing blizzard which can give any man frost bite. after 2 turns of doing this the winds will pick up even faster and will form a whilring tonardo of snow which will surround the user until the end of the jutsu, but will not be able to damage anyone. the blizzard will still continue even with the tornado. at the foruth turn the snow tornado will form into a gaint made of ice and snow ( the ice god) it will be infront the user. the gaint will rise its arms to the sky snow will go back upwards untill it gains a thick layer like that of snow hail. the wind god will then spin his arms around making the snow hails spin around aswell into a ring of snow. the gaint will then grab this as a weapon and place it infront of him. finally the ice god ( gaint) will blow a gaint amount of cold wind though the ring and a large wave of snow,ice and cold wind strong enough to level the field and cold enough to be an ice age level of coldness, will come busting out towards mid range leveling everything in its path, finally the wind god will stop the wave with a wave of his arm and force it upwards then the ice god will slam the wave onto the ground making a shockwave of ice ,snow and cold wind go flying in mutiple directions withen long range. the ice god will then return to snow and ice and will fall to the ground.
note: takes a total of 4 turns to use jutsu ( thus it counts as a jutsu for each turn it takes to use it)
note: user cannot seperate hands while useing the jutsu or the jutsu will end.
note: user can move while useing this jutsu but can't do much else.
note: after use user will fall down and won't be able to get up for some amount of time ( 15 seconds) and will be be near death.
note: no water,wind or ice jutsus for the rest of the battle
note: can only be used by haku yuki
note: if jutsu is stoped before it is complated user will just be tired and won't be able to use any ice jutsu for 3 turns
note: can only be used once.
note: snow tonardo is consirded s ranked and can be destroyed by two s rank fire jutsus but this does not stop the jutsu, aslong as the user keeps his hands in the ram hand seal jutsu will continue.
note: incase your wondering i assume the ice god would have control over all ice and snow so he should be able to do what he does in my jutsu.
note: shock wave does not go upwards leaveing that as an escape route


tried to come up with something orginal

-Declined. Do not resubmit-
 
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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

Last submission on the 9th.



(Samurai Gensō Taiken Sekisō Gijutsu)- Samurai Illusionary Experience Layering Technique
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: This ability is based upon the ability of the Samurai to recall past experiences to aid him in battle. Commonly mistaken with the ability of the brain to seemingly slow down time when in a stressful or frightening experience, the Samurai Illusionary Experience Layering Technique calls upon the past experiences, which doesn’t slow time, but produces the same effect. When pressured by an attack or technique of the opponent, the Samurai will forcefully induce this state of the brain. The brain will almost instantly layer thousands upon thousands of similar memories onto the Samurai from past experiences. This application of multiple memories allow the user to select parts and pieces of different memories, and then combine the fragmented parts into a single, complete, and almost duplicate memory of the current situation. By doing this, it produces a false slowed-time effect on the Samurai’s mind, as the Samurai feels he has encountered the incoming technique many times before. In reality, time is not slowed, but the combination of previous, fragmented memories into a whole memory fools the body into a continuous, advanced muscle memory state. This ability allows the Samurai to display an overwhelmingly increased speed, agility, and reflexes when he counters/evades/blocks a physical attack performed by the opponent.
*Note: Can only be taught/used by Selendrile
*Note: Must possess a Samurai biography
*Note: Can only be activated once and remains continuously activated
*Note: The enhanced physical attributes mentioned above allow the user a 1.5x speed boost as well as reflexes able to counter someone of Lee's speed without weights

(Im unsure how to state a speed boost for this technique, if you would be so kind as to provide an appropriate example if the above is incorrect?)

-On hold. Make this a mode instead of a jutsu that lasts up to 5 rounds. You should add as a note that you can't use it before the 3rd round so that the memory recollecting can happen and then you state the speed boost as one of the advantages of the mode-



(Bakuton: Kibaku Shiroi Raion no Kakudai o Hokori )- Explosion Release: Explosive Expanding Pride of the White Lion
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user will put a single hand in his side pouches filled with clay, and begin to mold and shape it. Then, he will release the clay in the shape of 3 miniature male lions. After being thrown into/onto the battlefield, the user can expand the miniature lions into full size animals. The lions are able to individually controlled until they are destroyed. They function similar to clones in that respect, but cannot use any techniques except for physical attacks. At any time they have been released, the lions are able to be individually detonated by performing the Tiger hand seal, and by yelling, "Katsu!". Each lion explodes with the force of three C1 bombs.
*Note: Must have a Deidara biography
*Note: Can only be taught/used by Selendrile
*Note: Can be used once per battle
*Note: No Clay techniques for the next two turns
*Note: Lions are able to travel as fast a regular lions

-Approved, I edited the red part. If you don't like it like this, then just drop it-


(Ōku to Naegi)- The Oak and the Sapling
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The Oak and the Sapling are the signature swords of Tokugawa Ieyasu. The Oak, a longsword, and The Sapling, a short sword, are wielded simultaneously, one in each hand. The Oak is a three and a half foot longsword, while The Sapling is a two foot short-sword. At the beginning of a battle, Tokugawa places The Oak straight ahead, and then wipes The Sapling over the flat of the blade. This sharpens the blade, giving it +10 damage to Kenjutsu attacks, as well as increased sharpness and speed. The process can also be done in reverse. The Oak and The Sapling have the special ability to have chakra channeled through them as well. When the user does this, both The Oak and The Sapling grows two visible yoku (prongs), similar to the shape of a sai, except the prongs extend to the tip of a blade. These chakra prongs last for four turns. This can be used to defend against basic weapons, such as kunai, shuriken, swords, etc, and can also be utilized in close combat. The strength of the chakra yoku are incredible, capable of breaking a normal katana after five repeated strikes on the blade. The chakra yoku are also very sharp, having the ability to cut through wires and ropes.
*Note: Can only be wielded/allowed by Selendrile
*Note: Swords are basically indestructable
*Note: Must have a Samurai Biography
*Note: The user can choose whether to channel chakra into The Oak, The Sapling, or both; Channeling chakra into the swords count as a move of the user.
*Note: Channeling of chakra into the blades can be used twice per battle

-Approved-
 
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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

(Tsuki Manako) - Moon Eye
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Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 60
Damage: 80 (-10 to user)
Description: The Moon-Eye is a spiritual and a mythical sword lost in the History and very special due to its unique ability.It has a layer of wind around it, when charged with chakra and can destroy trees by in a sword slash. The fuuton layer around the sword can create tornadoes and swipe out the opponents flying in the air without even requiring the sword to touch it. Since it conducts all elemental nature, when an opponents even attacks with fire nature to destroy the native wind, the sword takes the form of a fire sword.
Note: Can only create tornadoes twice
Summoning the sword counts as a move
Once summoned, the sword cannot be returned and does -10 to user per turn
Can only be used by pradattauchiha or those worthy enough

~Declined~ Swords shooting elemental blast (or tornadoes for that matters) are banned from this thread. Too many were made already. Also, destroying trees in a sword slash while not touching them falls in the category I've mentioned above.

(Mashin Tougyo) - Unholy control
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Type: Supplementary/Weapon
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Damage: N/A (-30 to user)
Description: Among the most unholy techniques, the Devil control or Unholy control was a result of the sealing of the most unholy people and techniques. The remains of the people/techniques resulted of gathering of strong yet dark chakra and started gathering force till it was deducted in the form of this mask. The mask can be wore by the user to increase the power of (+20)Ninjutsu and (+20)Taijutsu to the next level. Most A-Rank techs become S-Rank due to this mask. This mask acts much like a curse mark but causes greater damage and pain to user.(-30 from activation)
Note: ~Summoning the mask counts as a turn~
~The mask lasts for 5 turns~
~ After the mask is dissummoned, the user can peform only 2 moves per turn~
~Can only be wore by pradattauchiha~

~Declined do not resubmit~ 3 things. It was done before. Bleach techniques were submitted so many times I can't even remember them all. This technique is a variation of a curse mark and is hence forbidden (also the ability given are OP).

(Katon: Toko Itami)- Endless Pain
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user will focus katon chakra in the hand and then turns them into ash while making physical contact with the opponent so that the ash sticks in certain part of the body that can be burned as per the user's wish. This technique is similar to Hidan's ritual but this technique is elemental and only causes burns
Note: ~Can be used twice~
~only used by pradattauchiha~

Feel Free To Edit

~Pending~ I really don't see how this technique is similar to Hidan's ritual, and in general, the description is sketchy. Re-submit with proper description (please don't come to my profile to clarify your technique, do so in your resubmission).
Resubmitting:

(Tsuki Manako) - Moon Eye
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Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 60
Damage: 80 (-10 to user)
Description: The Moon-Eye is a spiritual and a mythical sword lost in the History and very special due to its unique ability.It has a thin and sharp layer of fuuton chakra around it that has the ability to cut through solid metal and rocks.The sword shines bright on the moon light from which it got its name. The sword is also light and easy to handle
Note: ~Can only be summoned once~
~Does -10 to user once summoned~
~Can only be used by pradattauchiha~
-Approved-

(Katon: Toko Itami)- Endless Pain
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user focuses Katon chakra in the hands and then forms a layer of dense ash around the palm, that once in contact with the opponent, can be ignited as per the user's wish.The part of the body gets a third degree burn and cannot be removed easily
Note: ~lasts for 3 turns~
~can only be used once~

-Declined. You can't expect the ash to stay there on your hand while you are in battle. Not to mention that you can't just form ash out of nothing-
 
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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦


New weeks submittion

(Gyaku Iai Kata) - Reverse Quickdraw Form
Rank: A
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: A variant form of Iaido where the user takes a reverse hand to draw their katana at quick speeds. The form doesnt have quite the reach as standard Iaido but its perfect for close and tight situations. The user when using the reverse quick draw form they will bend their knees and they draw the katana with their back hand facing down and when fully unsheaved switched to the back hand facing up and by finishing the attack the user springs up to add extra speed to the deliverance of the attack. (Note on the difference of the two: standard Iaido is a wide draw method with the elbow facing outwards so the range is also longer, where as reverse hand iaido has a shorter draw arc as the elbow is closer to the body and facing down giving the draw a almost parallel line to the body allowing for better use in close range however the reach is short).
Note: Must have first been taught Iaido and have a samurai biography.

(Undō no hōhō: Mizu no Mai) - Way Of Movement: Water Dance
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 15
Damage points: N/A
Description: This technique is a fast movement that relies on the users ability to utilize their lower body. By combining the movement of bending the knees, the movement of the ankles and some swift footwork the user will dodge a attack successfully and swiftly. The initial movement requires the user to first bend their knees lowering their stance and by swiviling their left foot forwards and then rotating on the heel they then turn into a swirling motion where they move onto the right foot's heel repeating the same movement and thus they move under an attack effectively evading. This technique can be used to dodge out the range of specific ninjutsu but wide scaled ninjutsu would still make contact. This techniques primary use is for close combat against weapon or taijutsu users.

-Both approved-

Replacing this old technique:
(Kekkai: Enchou Seichi no Ranpu): Barrier Method: Dome of Holy Light
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Long
Chakra cost: 40 (+10 per turn to keep active)
Damage points: N/A
Description: After the user makes 3 shadow clones they will surround the target/s and make a few hand seals then release chakra to create a dome surrounding the target/s. With chakra manipulation and chakra control the user is then able to make the chakra dome absorb natural light and create the target/s to see a white enclosed room surrounding them 10 meters wide and high. The user may see inside the dome though inside the dome the trapped target/s only see a white room and cant properly judge the exact size of the room because of the light giving off a misjudgement of bigger space. The only way to break out of the dome is to use a large scaled attack covering all the walls. (Barrier Lasts for 3 turns costing +10 chakra each turn to keep active)
Note: Can only be used once per battle
Note: Co-produced by HellsBadass.

and replacing for the following

(Sempai Oshi: Kami Shidō no Zen) - Elder Teachings: Divine Guidance of Meditative State
Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 40 (+10 per turn activated)
Damage points: N/A
Description: One of the final techniques of the sixth sense in which the user has attained mastery of the martial way. The user gains the state in which they have reached beyond the zen state of mushin (no mind) and an feel the "spiritual" presence of other people through their minds eye. The ability to sense the spirit of all things allows the user to differ between different spiritual wavelengths, discerning between the living and the unliving, the balanced and the chaotic; one in this state has truely reached a state of enlightenment, and a sense of spiritual ascension and thus their reactions being grately enhanced beyond that of the sixth sense technique. This can only sense the opponent directly meaning it only allows the user to fully react to physical based techniques such as taijutsu and kenjutsu and but cannot allow the user to feel elemental ninjutsu.
Note: Must have learnt Elder Teachings: Sixth Sense
Note: Can only be activated once and remains continously activated.
Note: The level of reaction is faster dependant on level of rank
Note: Must have activated sixth sense then have active for three turns before activating this technique.
 
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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

Last submission on the 9th.

Kenjutsu: Kakou Kagidume) -Sword Technique: Descending Claw
Rank: C
Type: Attack
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 10
Damage points: 20
Description: This technique combines the forces of momentum and speed in order to increase the cutting strength of a weapon strike. The faster the user's speed is, the deadlier the cutting attack will do.

-Approved-

(Gaigou Resshin) - Thundering Cover of the Great Earthquake
Rank: B
Type: Attack
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user focuses all of their body weight into one point thus producing overwhelming destructive force, So it can be used with a katana or Naginata or spear or even bo staff.

-On hold. Wrong rank for something with 'destructive force'. Also, explain how it will be used 'with a katana or Naginata or spearor even bo staff'-


(Hitoshirezu Surasshu Waza) - Hidden Slash Technique
Rank: B
Type: Attack
Range: Short
Chakra cost: 20
Damage points: 40
Description: The user stands in a way where his right shoulder is facing the opponents face/chest, so when the user draws his katana (if its already not out) his opponent will not be able to see due to the fact that the user is at a certain angle, and because of this his opponent can't see his katana, the user takes this oppourtunity to swiftly spins his body to the right and swinging his katana as he spins his body cutting the opponents chest as he does so.
Note: Can only be used by a samurai bio.

-Declined. Not plausible in a battle, where people move constantly to attack or defend-
 
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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

New weeks submission.

(Hibi no Kansai)Fissure Esnarement

Rank:S
Chakra:40
Damage:80
Range:Mid
Descritpion:The user slams their hand onto the ground causing a large gap in the earth(Fissure) to open up beneath the opponent.The user then makes one handseal and Five large vine like Trendrils of earth sprout from the hole and race towards the opponent; if he managed to evade the initial opening of the fissure.When the Earth trenrilds reach the opponent they will wrap around parts of theyre body such as arms and abdomen and drag them into the fissure. These Trendrils can go up to mid range,and since the user controls the trendrils they will continue to follow the opponent on the users command and direction. The Trendrils also move quite fast.Once the trendrils have dragged the opponent into the fissure,the fissure snaps shut tight crushing the opponent.
~Can only be used Once
~No earth justu's above B rank that turn
~Can only be used by -Scaze-

-Declined. OP. Also very creepy.-

(Raikou Sakujou)Lightning Vines
Rank:A
Chakra:30
Damage:60
Range:Long
Description: The user builds their raiton chakra up in their palms, they then slam both their palms onto the grounds,sending lightning racing through the ground,the enemy will be unawre of the lightning approaching him from underground unless he has a doujustu.The user can then split the lightning into trendrils,the user controls each and every one of these trendrils,and on command the trendrils will sprout from the ground with great force,once the trendrils are above the surface the user can control them making them race to wherever the opponent is;wrap around the enemies body violently shocking and paralyzing them.The trendrils do not have to be sent through the ground,Air or Water can be used as a medium for the trendrils.
This justu serves well as a suprise attack,channeling the justu through the ground and making the trendrils rise from behind the opponent and ensare them,or combining it with a water justu,and at the last moment disengaging some of the trendrils from the water making them reach the opponent faster or slower or form a different angle than anticipated.
~Can only be used by -Scaze- and those who he allows
~Can only be used 3x per match
~+10 Damage when water is used as a medium.
~No fuuton justu's above A rank that turn
~Due to the fact,that the user is still harnessing their raiton chakra while controlling the trendrils,no elements over than lightning can be used while the trendrils are still being manipulated,unless th person has Ying/Yang Training.

-Declined. OP and similar abilities in other jutsus already exist-
 
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Re: ♦ Custom Jutsu Submission ♦

I submitted on the 9th, so new week!

Re-submitting:

it's been a week.

(Juho Tsuin Raino no Ashi) Gentle Step Twin Rhino Feet
Rank: S
Type: Defensive/Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Similar to (Jūho Sōshiken) – Gentle Step Twin Lion Fists, the user forms two large rhino head-shaped shrouds of chakra around their leg, enabling the user to kick through even against Doton techniques.
Note:
~Can be used 4x
~Must be taught by Dr. House
~Must master and have a great control over Jyuuken
~Only may sannin use this.

~Declined~ "through even against Doton techniques", to what extent can this be applied? Can you break through S-rank Doton? I'd like to remember you (and anyone reading this), that raw chakra is weaker than elemental chakra. If you'd like some clarification on that, come to my profile.

(Hakke Chakurasutorīmu Gijutsu ) 8 Trigrams Chakra Stream Techniques
Rank: S
Type: Defensive/Offensive
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40 (+5 See Notes)
Damage Points: 80 (-10 to user)
Description: This jutsu is basically the same concept as "Protection of the Eight Trigrams Sixty-Four Palms" as it is made up of the same ability, but it for example could take shape of a Lion, or even a wall made of constant excertion of chakra stream. From years of training, the user had came to master the flexibility of the arms and as the user is emiting a constant stream of chakra from his palm, as because of the hyuuga's hand movement is extremely fast (his movements becomes a blur), with extreme precise, the user will be able to create a figure like lion, or even a simple wall.
Note:
~Can be used 3x
~This is an extremely difficult technique, and only sannin, and master of Jyuuken may perform this, who had their bio for over 3 months as of the mastery of Gentle fist with it.
~ The +5 is because of the extreme/precise chakra maneuvering.
~ No Gentle fist may be performed for the same and next turn.
~ The user takes -10 Health because of the extreme shaping of figures.

Note for checker: Basically the texture of the jutsu will look like this. As you see a barrier here, imagine this barrier to be shaped of a wall or a head of a lion, made of that texture.



Note to checker: I was thinking to made this a style of gentle fist, and then branch off different techniques out of it, like a dome or a wall. What do you think?

~Pending~ I like the general concept, though I wouldn't extend it to a taijutsu style. First of all, why does this technique do 80 damages? It's originally meant to be a defensive technique and can push back an enemy when he hit it directly, but it shouldn't be considered as strong as an offensive jutsu. I'm ready to accept the 80 damage if you explain why in the resubmission.

(Juho Tsuin Raino no Ashi) Gentle Step Twin Rhino Feet
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Similar to (Jūho Sōshiken) – Gentle Step Twin Lion Fists, the user forms two large rhino head-shaped shrouds of chakra around their leg, and as the user strikes his feet onto the opponent, crushing him into the ground. As where the user kicks, it causes great internal bleeding/damage to the opponent.
Note:
~Can be used 4x
~Must be taught by Dr. House
~Must master and have a great control over Jyuuken
~Only may sannin use this.

-Approved-

Custom style:

(Chakurasutorīmu) Chakra Stream Techniques

Description: This jutsu is basically the same concept as "Protection of the Eight Trigrams Sixty-Four Palms" as it is made up of the same ability, but it for example could take shape of a Lion, or even a wall made of constant excertion of chakra stream. From years of training, the user had came to master the flexibility of the arms and as the user is emiting a constant stream of chakra from his palm, the user is able to reach at any point around himself. As because of the user's hand movement is extremely fast (his movements becomes a blur), with extreme precise, the user will be able to create a figure like lion, or even a simple wall in a matter of seconds. The creation of techniques are extremely fast, and the technique itself may be extremely fast, as we can see how fast hinata is able to move with the technique, in order to accomplish her goals. The proof is starting at 1:17 as how fast is really the chakra lines, and how fast is the user is able to maneuver it.



If the opponent comes in contact with any of the techniques from this style, it will tear him apart because of the movements of the chakra streams being extremely fast and accurate. The user will be able to control the size of the chakra beam, allowing her to create larger, arc-shaped chakra beams that may spread out across the user's entire attack range. The proof of how fast are the types of techniques in this style is how Hinata is able to create a huge barrier with just only one chakra line streaming from each hand. The chakra streams that these techniques are made up are extremely sharp, as taking the proof when Hinata is emiting the chakra streams when she's defending herself from the bees, as we notice how easily was he cutting the bees like a knife going through butter. The texture if you haven't seen a technique being made out of chakra streams it will look like that.



~Only may Hyuuga use this style.

Note for checker: Basically the texture of the jutsu will look like this. As you see a barrier here, imagine this barrier to be shaped of a wall or a head of a lion, made of that texture.

Note to checker: I literally changed everything, and made it into a custom style. I took your suggestion, and I won't make it into a taijutsu based style, but more what I had described within the description. I tried to make it as clear as possible that the jutsus that I'm planning to branch off from this can be both offensive, but it was meant for really to be defensive. Thank You Izuna for giving me the idea. <3

-Declined. Way too OP. Invisible, cutting the opponent in half, tremendous speed. Good idea, but you made it way too powerful. And i would like to remind you that fighting styles should be submitted as modes and jutsus-


Submitting an approved jutsu:

(Hakke Eien no) - 8 Trigrams Eternal
Rank: C
Type: Defensive
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 15
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Hyuuga member will channel his crakra onto the tips of his toes, in order to release a series of large amounts of chakras from his chakra points on the tips of toes or excerting from his palms (Incase he is standing on his hands) enabling the user to move at fast speeds when he kicks off the ground each time he lands (pushes off the ground if standing on hands) evaiding an incoming jutsu, or moving into hand-to-hand combat.
Note:
-This jutsu won't deal any damage.
-Can be taught by Dr. House

Changed to this:

(Hakke Eien no) - 8 Trigrams Eternal
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 15
Damage Points: N/A
Description: This technique will enable the user to release a series of large amounts of chakras from his chakra points on the tips of toes or exerting from his palms (incase he is standing on his hands) enabling the user to move at fast speeds when he kicks/pushes off the ground or kicks/pushes onto a direction within mid-air in order to evade an incoming jutsu, or to move into hand-to-hand combat.
Note:
-This jutsu won't deal any damage.
-Can be taught by Dr. House

Note for checker: I added an option where the user may use this within mid-air, and not only when coming in contact with the ground. I've highlighted this in the description. I took out the "Hyuuga member will channel his crakra onto the tips of his toes, in order to" and added this: "This technique will enable the user to". I've also changed the type of technique to be supplementary from defensive.

-Approved-
 
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TSUBAKI(中務 椿, Nakatsukasa Tsubaki)
Type:weapon
Rank:A
RangeShort-Long
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description:
Tsubaki can only assit black star in battle as a weapon. She can not use jutsu or any attacks unless in weapon form. She has the ability to transform into 5 different types of weapons, 1. Shuriken 2.Chain scythe 3. Ninja sword 4.Smoke bomb 5.Uncanny sword CENTER]
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Chain scythe mode gives him the ability to attack from a distance. And multiple angles and postions

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Smoke bomb mode is a distraction to escape from sticky situations

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Shuriken mode is a long range weapon that can be thrown from a distance

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Ninja sword mode is a blade half the size of a regular a sword.

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Uncanny sword mode is a regular length of a sword but its infused with shadow chakra making its apperance black. This mode increases Black Stars ablitiy to manipulate shadows granting him 5 plus damage using a shadow tech but the sword can not manipulate shadows on its own it only grants the user the +5 damage while the mode is active. But this mode drains his chakra and thus can only be used for 5 turns if it is u sed all 5 turns he will only be able to use B rank jutsu and lower for the remainder of the battle.
CHANGING MODES COUNTS AS ONE MOVE
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~Declined~ Check the bold part. We discussed this via PM.

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TSUBAKI(中務 椿, Nakatsukasa Tsubaki)
Type:weapon
Rank:A
RangeShort-Long
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description:
Tsubaki can only assit black star in battle as a weapon. She can not use jutsu or any attacks unless in weapon form. She has the ability to transform into 5 different types of weapons, 1. Shuriken 2.Chain scythe 3. Ninja sword 4.Smoke bomb 5.Uncanny sword CENTER]
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Chain scythe mode gives him the ability to attack from a distance. And multiple angles and postions

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Smoke bomb mode is a distraction to escape from sticky situations

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Shuriken mode is a long range weapon that can be thrown from a distance

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Ninja sword mode is a blade half the size of a regular a sword.

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Uncanny sword mode is a regular length of a sword but its infused with shadow chakra making its apperance black. This mode increases Black Stars shadow jutsu attack power granting him 5 plus damage using a shadow tech but the sword can not manipulate shadows on its own it only grants the user the +5 damage while the mode is active. But this mode drains his chakra and thus can only be used for 5 turns if it is used all 5 turns he will only be able to use B rank jutsu and lower for the remainder of the battle.
CHANGING MODES COUNTS AS ONE MOVE
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Trap☆Star (罠☆星, Torappu☆Sutā)
Type:weapon/trap
Rank:A
Range:Short-mid
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:n/a
Description:
Trap☆Star is a technique used by Black☆Star and Tsubaki in her Chain Scythe Weapon form.Tsubaki's Chain Scythe form coils around Black Star before extending outwards, forming the shape of a five-point star slightly above the ground so that anything that enters the area will be instantly sensed by Black Star and bound in the chains before they can escape. His ability to sense an opponent even extends to the area underground, by using the vibrations traveling on Tsubaki's Weapon form to sense his opponent's movements underground. Lower rank opponents will be trapped regardless of what they do. Same ranking opponents will be trapped but can easily break free. Higher ranking opponents will sense the trap and can easily avoid it or counter it. Once the trap has been set Black star can not move or use any jutsu standing in the center of the star. He can cancel the jutsu and continue fighting though.
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Restrictions
- He can not make any movements inside the star
- Higher ranking opponents can easily sense the trap and counter it
- He's not allowed to use any jutsu inside the circle
- Trap can only be activated for 2 turns
- Can only be used 3 times per battle

-On hold. I see that Izuna discussed something with you about this jutsu. Letting this one for him to check-
 
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I would like to make a reference to the mod that checks these customs: I know it mind look as if it's impossible to have a lot of chakra compressed and then expand (1st and 3rd jutsu), but I just wanted to say that I followed the same logic as with Fuuton: Rasenshuriken when Naruto used it against Kakuzu. It was compact as well, and expanded on impact. Hope this clears it up a little.




(Katon/Raiton: Hitoshirenu Hinote no Raikou) Fire/Lightning Release: Hidden Flames of Lightning)
Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short - Long
Type: Offensive
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 90 (-25 to user)
Description: The user starts by creating 5 lightning bullets, one at the tip of each finger. The user compresses them, so that they have a high amount of energy in a small place. Once they are made, they stay at the tip of the fingers. The user then channels fire chakra around them, coating the bullets in fire. He also compresses the fire so that the energy is tightly packed. Once this is done, the user shoots of the bullets at the enemy. Due to the combination of the fire and the lightning, and both being highly compressed, the bullets travel at an enormously rapid speed (only a 3 Tomoe sharingan or Byakugan can follow this speed, though it would be hard to react accordingly if they are distracted by something else). Once they reach the opponent, the user does a hand seal that lets the packed lightning loose, causing a massive explosion of lightning, covered with the fire around it.
Note: Can only be taught by Wesobi
Note: Can only be used once, but can not be used in the first turn.
Note: Can't use lightning/fire in the same round.
Note: Can not use lightning or fire for the next round, and can only use up to A-rank jutsus in the next round.
Note: Can only use 1 jutsu in the same round as this one.
Note: Burn wounds appear on the users hands (if not wearing any protective gear), so hand seals made after this jutsu would be slower than usual.

I talked with Xylon about the fact that you might need yin-yang, but he said it doesn't break any rules.

(Saishuu Teisei) Last Whisper
Rank: S
Range: Short
Type: Weapon
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Last whisper is a bow made of special Chakra Wood, and is strengthened by Chakra-Titanium. It has several gems put onto it as decoration. This Bow is can not be destroyed by any means, and if someone else than the use touches it or tries to steal it, it weighs over 10 000kg. There is also an arrow holster that remains on the users back at all time, packed with a high amount of arrows. These arrows are special Chakra arrows, which allows the user to insert any kind of chakra in them. Last, this attack has two special attack, that can be used twice. The user focuses a big amount of chakra into the arrow he will shoot, and will then shoot off the arrow with the said "pure chakra", increasing it's speed enormously (two times the normal speed). the second special ability to this bow, is that the bow can absorb 2 attack up to S rank. The first attack will be absorbed in the upper gems, and the second attack in the lower gems. The user can choose to launch the chakra from both absorbed attacks at once, or separately.
Note: Can only be wielded by Wesobi
Note: Can only use the first special attack twice.
Note: The special arrow (increased speed) counts as one of three moves.
Note: the absorbing of an attack counts as one of the three moves and sending it back does too.
Note: The absorbed attack can not be sent back in the same turn.
Note: The bow can absorb up to 4 attacks (but only 2 can be hold in the gem at the same time). After that, the gems will be crushed due to the extensive chakra that has gone through them.

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I gave my previous custom weapon to Akisha, so I have none atm.

(Sogeki Geijutsu: Shouten no Kabe) - Sniper Arts: Curse of the Wall
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user takes out one of his chakra arrows, and starts to focus chakra in it (one of the five elemental chakras). The user then launches the arrow, and when it reaches the area he wants it to reach, does a hand seal, setting off the chakra inside, causing a certain effect.

Water: After doing the hand seal, a huge tsunami rushes on towards the opponent.
Fire: After doing the hand seal, a huge tornado of fire erupts from it, and continues to rush at the enemy.
Lightning: After doing the hand seal, the lightning is released around the arrow, creating a huge thunderbolt that rushes at the opponent.
Earth: The user does the hand seal, and the arrow drops to the ground instantly. The chakra then seeps in the ground, sending the chakra through the ground under the opponent, making spikes appear.
Wind: After doing the hand seal, the arrow explodes, creating a rumbling wall of wind that rages at the opponent (size of earth rampart).

Note: Can only be used by Wesobi and Mathias
Note: Can be used 4 times.
Note: Can not use an element (f.e. Suiton Arrow) and use the same element in the same (thus another Suiton Based move)move again.
Note: Can not use any Sniper Arts in the same move, or one move after this one.
||All Declined|| The first has been done before, and the second and third jutsus are either overpowered or need more restrictions.
It's been 12 days since I submitted these. o-o (Page 360 if needed for reference)


(Saishuu Teisei) Last Whisper
Rank: S
Range: Short
Type: Weapon
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: Last whisper is a bow made of special Chakra Wood, and is strengthened by Chakra-Titanium. It has several gems put onto it as decoration. This Bow is can not be destroyed by any means, and if someone else than the user tries to use it or steal it, the string will me impossible to move due to the chakra of the user that is inherited in hit. There is also an arrow holster that remains on the users back at all time, packed with a high amount of arrows. These arrows are special Chakra arrows, which allows the user to insert any kind of chakra in them, though using these arrows with any kind of elemental chakra requires a separate move. Using them with normal chakra does not. Last, this attack has two special attack, that can be used twice. The user focuses a big amount of chakra into the arrow he will shoot, and will then shoot off the arrow with the said "pure chakra", increasing it's speed enormously (two times the normal speed). the second special ability to this bow, is that the bow can absorb any elemental attack up to B-rank. The first attack will be absorbed in the upper big gem, and the second attack in the lower big gem, meaning that tcan not keep more chakra in the bow than of two attacks. The user can then use the chakra that has been absorbed to enhance his own attacks.
Note: Can only be wielded by Wesobi. If I permit someone else to use it, the user must summon it, but is unable to summon it when I'm using it.
Note: The special arrow (increased speed) counts as one of three moves and can only be used twice.
Note: the absorbing of an attack counts as one of the three.
Note: The absorbed attack can not be sent back in the same turn.
Note: The bow can absorb up to 4 attacks (but only 2 can be hold in the gem at the same time). After that, the gems will be crushed due to the extensive chakra that has gone through them.
Note: The user can not use the chakra in both gems at once to enhance his attacks (so, if the user absorbs two B-rank katon attacks, he can not use both to enhance 1 attack, but can only enhance one attack at a time)
Note: The user can not enhance more than one attack in one turn.
Note: The user can no mingle the absorbed chakra with any other type of chakra, with the exception of adding lightning chakra to already existent water techniques that have been sent out.

Note: When using the absorbed chakra to enhance one's attacks, the user can not use any technique above A-rank of the same element as the absorbed chakra. (meaning I can not infuse S-rank or F-rank with the B-rank absorbed chakra)

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(Sogeki Geijutsu: Shouten no Kabe) - Sniper Arts: Curse of the Wall
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Type: Offensive/Defensive/Supplementary
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user takes out one of his chakra arrows, and starts to focus chakra in it (one of the five elemental chakras). The user then launches the arrow, and when it reaches the area he wants it to reach, does a hand seal, setting off the chakra inside, causing a certain effect.

Water: After doing the hand seal, a wave rushes on towards the opponent. The wave is large enough to stop a wide fire based attack.
Fire: After doing the hand seal, the thip of the arrow explodes and 2 dragon headed fireballs come out of the arrow tip, and continues to rush at the enemy.

Lightning: After doing the hand seal, the lightning is released around the arrow, creating a thunderbolt that rushes at the opponent. The thunderbolt is only slightly bigger than the arrow itself.
Earth: The user does the hand seal, and the arrow drops to the ground instantly. The chakra then seeps in the ground, sending the chakra through the ground under the opponent, making spikes appear.
Wind: After doing the hand seal, the arrow explodes, creating a rumbling wall of wind that continues at the opponent. at the opponent. This wall of wind is about 25m² (5m x 5m).

Note: Can only be used by Wesobi and Mathias
Note: Can be used 3 times.
Note: Can not use an element (f.e. Suiton Arrow) and use the same element in the same (thus another Suiton Based move)move again.
Note: Can not use any Sniper Arts in the same move, or one move after this one.
Note: Can not use the chosen element during the next turn.

-Declined. Chakra arrows are Carlie's jutsu / signature move-
 
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I Have Howard's permission to submit this one. He was told to edit some stuff he did then asked me to submit it for him since I signed his contract and he has already reached his custom limit this week. Hope this is allowed :(

Summoning: Scout Squad Alpha (Kuchiyose: Sekkou Buntai Arufa)
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Scout Squd Alpha is an elite squad of four Kites each are small in size being about 4 feet in height with a wing span of 2 and a half feet. Fast enough to only be tracable by 2t and higher They have a strong sence of sight able to see small prey such as rabbits and small game from heights of 60 ft in the air.They can scan the ground from extreme hights finding the the opponent's location and then releying that location to the summoner. Each of the 4 Kites act and scout differently. Alpha is the leader and he scouts on his own using his sight to find the opponent and rely the message. Beta and Omega work as a team. These two have the best sense sight of the group able to see something as fine as an ant on the ground their range of sight can traverse one range(If in mid they can see to long r short depending on which way they are looking). Lastly is Gamma he is a loner he has a lower sense sight so he usually stays close to the summoner for quick response in short range attacks. They are not to strong when it comes to battle but if they attack an opponent they will most likely go for the eyes pecking and gouging them out and then either returning to their range or returning to the summoner.
~Each can speak english
~Can only be summoned for 5 turns
~Cannot summon a Kite the turn before
~Cannot summon another Kite the same turn
~Gamma can sense an opponent in the same range as him sight usually short
~Beta and Omega can sense someone one range away
~Alpha can only sense what is in his range usually Long using his sight
~This is all dependent on where the Kite's are looking

(Kchuysei: Hane Hitofuki) Summoning: Winged Kuriboh
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A (+40 Senbon)
Description: The user does the nessecary handseals for the summoning (Rabbit-Snake) and summons Winged Kuriboh. It is a relitively small summon being only 2 feet tall and 2 feet wide but he has a massive chakra supply that of a much larger summon. He is covered in thick brown feathers that are dense he is mostly brown except for his Wind which are off white. He looks almost like a puff ball brown puff ball with wings. He can use any Earth jutsu that the user knows up to A rank but has to maintain contact with the ground for the jutsu to work. His feathers have a special property they can be imbued with his Earth chakra and then sent out toward the opponent. The Earth chakra make the feathers much denser and able to stab into the opponent's flesh about 1 to 2 inches deep, doing about the same amount of damage as a thrown Shuriken. As the feathers are a medium Kuriboh doesn't need to be on the ground to use them.
~Can only be in play for 5-turns.
~Can only be Summoned by someone with the Kite Contract.
~Can only be Summoned once per battle.
~Feather attack counts as a Jutsu and can only reach to Mid Range from Kuriboh

-. It's not allowed; this would count as your jutsu so you ask him to resubmit it when its time. And don't try to bypass our rules again or I will have you both banned for a month from submitting customs-
 
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(Xiphos; Kiritsu no Ha) - Xiphos; The Blade of Discipline
Rank: S
Type: Weapon - Offensive / Supplementary
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage: N/A
Description: Xiphos; The Blade of Discipline is a tanto that has the ability to release chakra from the hilt that will improve the user's earth jutsu. The blade allows the user to do earth jutsu in two less handseals (Can't go below 1 handseal). The blade of the tanto allows the user to release their chakra through it to perform jutsu that require a blade to use.
Restrictions:
~Reduction for handseals only works on 3 jutsu.
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~Declined~ I'm done accepting the same swords over and over again. If you feel like arguing, look over the thread and witness for yourself how many swords do the exact same thing as this one.
(Xiphos; Kiritsu no Ha) - Xiphos; The Blade of Discipline
Rank: S
Type: Weapon - Offensive / Supplementary
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: N/A (+40 to activate the blade's abilities)
Damage: N/A
Description: Xiphos; The Blade of Discipline is a tanto and chain that has the ability to release chakra from the hilt that will improve the user's earth and lightning jutsu. The tanto is a small short sword made with indestructible metals with no collar and a chain attached to the end of it that can be quickly detached and held that way. The chain is detached and reattached by the user's chakra so that the weapon can be used with the chain or without it depending on the situation. The tanto is normally worn on the back of the user and the chain wraps around their waist but doesn't restrict their motion due to position of the chain while wrapped around the user. The weapon itself due to the chain can be used much like a kusarigma and used for techniques similar to it. The chain extends to about mid-range, the chain is made up of chakra reactive metal that is the same as the balde itself so it can easily conduct the user's abilities to it allowing the user to use the sword's abilities while they are touching the chain. The blade of the tanto allows the user to release their chakra through it to perform jutsu that require a blade to use. The blade also has the unique ability to allow the user to enhance the power of an Earth Release: Antlion Technique up to S-Rank (Strength) and increase the size of the Antlion's grasp (Ability). It can also increase the abilities of Earth Release: Moving Earth Core up to S-Rank (Strength) and all the user to use the technique without having to touch the ground with their hand while they hold the blade in their hand or through the chain (Ability). (Still have to have some sort of contact with the ground) The blade can also increase the strength of Lightning Release: Lightning Strike Armor up to A-Rank and cause it to also envelop the chain but not the blade.
Restrictions:
~Increasing Earth Release: Antlion Technique and Earth Release: Moving Earth Core's ability is only usable twice for both.
~If the user increases the ability of Earth Release: Antlion Technique, they can't use the increase in strength again.
~If the user increases the ability of Earth Release: Moving Earth Core, they can't use the increase in strength again.
~Increasing the effects and strength of Lightning Release: Lightning Strike Armor's can only be used twice.



-Declined. Like Izuna said there are way too many swords that boost up abilities and elements. As for the chain part, sorry, but lighting chain is one of my signature moves-
 
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(Hyouton: Saihyō-Sen)-Ice Release: Ice Breaker
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user will perform three hand seals and cause ice that they have previously created to separate into two pieces, one larger piece and one smaller piece. The separation is always in a straight line form. (For example, one wouldn't be able to break off a piece of ice so that it has a curved or jagged edge. The user will also use their chakra to propel the smaller piece in away from the larger piece. The direction in which the smaller piece is propelled is dependent on the positioning of the separation line. The smaller piece will always be sent in a direction so that it's movement is perpendicular to that of the separation line. This increases the speed and may change the direction of the smaller piece, but keeps the speed and direction of the larger piece the same.
Note: Can only be used thrice per battle.
Note: Only ice users are capable of using this.
Note: Can only be taught by Inch.

-Declined. Why would the speed of the smaller piece gets higher? And also, I feel you are hiding something about this jutsu so resubmit and describe exactly how you are planning to use it-

(Hyoton: Reitō no Kami no Hari Chiryō)-Ice Release: Acupuncture of the Frozen Gods
Type: Offensive
Rank: S Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user touches his index finger to his thumb and focuses their ice chakra between them, and creates a needle made of ice. The user then focuses a great surge of ice chakra into the needle, and manipulates the shape of the needle to rapidly elongate in a straight direction at a high speed. The tip of the needle is extremely pointy and sharp, thus allowing it to pierce skin/objects quite easily. Because it is a needle and is very thin, if the needle were to be pointed at someone since it was created, they would have no way of knowing it was there, unless they had a doujutsu or some other chakra sensing ability. Because the needle is very thing and made out of ice, it is very brittle. As a result of this, it is weaker when attacked from the side, and thus, when an object of B-Rank or above that has shattering capabilities (IE taijutsu, earth jutsu, anything that can shatter ice, really) hits it from the side, although this does not hold true if the object hits the needle head on.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
Note: Can only be taught by Inch

I removed the first restriction, as I feel like the bolded part at the bottom makes it far less powerful. Feel free to edit any numbers/specifications on this if you think they're off. :\

~Declined~ I have one last problem with this technique...it's basically a one hit K.O if you don't have a doujutsu. It's fast, impossible to see, and let's face it, it won't make a whole lot of sound. You need to either take away that part or alter it (very hard to see, impossible to see when slightly dark outside...etc).
Resubmitting:

(Hyoton: Reitō no Kami no Hari Chiryō)-Ice Release: Acupuncture of the Frozen Gods
Type: Offensive
Rank: S Rank
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user touches his index finger to his thumb and focuses their ice chakra between them, and creates a needle made of ice. The user then focuses a great surge of ice chakra into the needle, and manipulates the shape of the needle to rapidly elongate in a straight direction at a high speed. The tip of the needle is extremely pointy and sharp, thus allowing it to pierce skin/objects quite easily. Because it is a needle and is very thin, if the needle were to be pointed at someone since it was created, it would be very difficult to see;however, if it is slightly dark outside, this needle will be impossible to see. However, if a target possesses a doujutsu, they will be able to see the needle quite easily whether it be night or day. Because the needle is very thin and made out of ice, it is very brittle. As a result of this, it is weaker when attacked from the side, and thus, when an object of B-Rank or above that has shattering capabilities (IE taijutsu, earth jutsu, anything that can shatter ice, really) hits it from the side, although this does not hold true if the object hits the needle head on.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle.
Note: Can only be taught by Inch

-Approved-
 
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