[ARCHIVE] Custom Jutsu Submission - I

[Shade Dracova]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kasai rirīsu - tsuinsōrādoragonzu)Fire Release-Twin Solar Dragons Of Dracova

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Type:Attack
Rank: S Rank
Range:Mid-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description:The user will bring their hands together side by side, gather and compress fire chakra in their hands making a small highly powerful and compressed flame in their hand. The user then will clap his hands together and run them together adding friction which causes heat. With his hands still together the user will perform 3 handseals and aim their hands at their target and release big dragon headed blast of fire from each hand.
*The blast dont have to be used simultaneously but one at a time*
*No katon jutsu for the next three turns*
*Can only be used/taught by Shade Dracova*

~Declined do not resubmit~ That's basically a rip off of Gōryūka no jutsu but instead of shooting the fire dragon out of your mouth, you shoot it from your hands.

(Kaze rirīsu - zen'nō no kaze)Wind Release-Sudden Wind

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Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description:The user compress's wind chakra into a small sphere in the palm of their hands. They then throw it at the opponent and with one handseal the ball will explode sending small wind bullets through anything at short range.
*If the user is in short range he will perish also*
*No wind techs the next turn*
*Can only be used three times*
*Can only be used/taught by Shade Dracova*
Note:Can only use twice per battle
Note:No wind Jutsu for 2 turns after used

~Declined~ Similar technique exist

(Kaze/-sui konbo, doragon no maito)Wind/Water Combo-Dragon's Might!

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Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description:The user gathers wind an water charka at the bottom of their stomach molding it carefully. He then will release all of that chakra all at once. As soon as it leaves his mouth it takes the shape of a dragon's head and rips across the ground as it heads toward the opponent killing him/her on contact.
Note: Can be stopped by a jutsu like Fire And Wind Blast Technique
*May only be used once*
*No wind or water the next turn*
*Can only be taught/used by Shade Dracova

~Declined~ I'm pretty sure you didn't received Yin Yang training, meaning you can't mold two different chakra at once. If you have then I'm sorry and please VM me and I'll re-check it.

(Ninja āto - beruseruku!)Ninja Art- Berserk!

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Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: This jutsu is based on the belief that humans are evolved from monkeys. The user will utilize their chakra to activate a hidden nerve near the back of their brain. This will temporarily increase their 5 sense's to the max. The user will also receive a small boost in strength, speed and agility. The setback is by activating this part of your brain you are deactivating the part of your brain that allows you to think logically causing you to have short term memory and to act just as a monkey. The user will not be able to think clear and he will attack anything he spots with blows to the body.

*Last for 5 turns*
*Once activated it cant be deactivated before the 5 turns are up*
*When in this state you are basically incompetent and cant think straight*
*You get a powerful boost with your reflexes and body strength*
*He will also have a burst of anger*

~Feel free to edit in anyway~

~Declined do not resubmit~ This is a mixture of several existing technique (mines and Mugiwara's techniques).

 

[Anduril]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

~Resubmitting~​

(Hyouton:Ryū no tsubasa)-Dragon wings
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description:
In this jutsu the user concentrates his hyouton chakra and then releases all of it along the back of the user and as this happens all this chakra forms ice which stretches into two giant wings made up of pure white ice. These wings resemble to those of a dragon and allows the user of this jutsu to fly in the air. These wings can form and vanish in an instance as the user wants them to.
-These wings allow the user to fly with the agility of an hawk.
-The wings can only be activated thrice in a battle.
-A one turn gap is necessary after deactivation to use it again.
-These wings can only be used by members of the Yuki clan.

Note: Added restriction in bold.

~Declined~ How longs does it last each time you activate it?

~Resubmitting~​

(Hyouton:Ryū no tsubasa)-Dragon wings
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description:
In this jutsu the user concentrates his hyouton chakra and then releases all of it along the back of the user and as this happens all this chakra forms ice which stretches into two giant wings made up of pure white ice. These wings resemble to those of a dragon and allows the user of this jutsu to fly in the air. These wings can form and vanish in an instance as the user wants them to.
-These wings allow the user to fly with the agility of an hawk.
-The wings can only be activated thrice in a battle.
-The wings whence activated remain for 2 turns in a row.
-These wings can only be used by members of the Yuki clan.

Note: Added the time it lasts in bold.

~Approved~ Made it 2 turns.

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~New~​

(Kenjutsu-Furasshu)-Flash step
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description:
This Fighting style is a very advanced kenjutsu and is mostly preferred by the people who have there sword placed on there back instead of on there waist. This is a very obscure kenjutsu style and is known only to a select few who have survived the rigorous training necessary to master this fighting style. Thanks to the extremely hard training and the low number of people able to completely master it this technique is known only to a few elite swordsman. This fighting style is more concentrated on the fluid and faster leg movements of the swordsmen in which case it relies on extremely quick speeds to attack and defend. This fighting style also helps a swordsmen to wield the blade using even his mouth. Whence using this technique the user receives a speed boost and a clarity of perception his speed now would rival Narutos sage mode speed. So basically it will help the user to move at very high speeds for three times in a battle either to attack or defend.
-Can be used thrice in a battle.
-All kenjutsu attacks or sword based attack done in conjunction with this move get +20 Attack/defense.
[Note: It is not an ability that could be kept active it is a one time use jutsu only.]
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~Declined do not resubmit~ Rip off of Caliburn's techniques.

 

[Bhil]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Black Leg Taijutsu - Third Rate Mincemeat - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu - Troisieme Hache )
Type: Offensive
Rank: C
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: 40
Description:his is the strongest attack in the dish washer rank,it compiles most of the attributes on would learn before progressing to a higher rank.The user will first turn their back,then they will begin a series of back flips toward the opponent and will use their hands for one final push towards the enemy,and attempt to hit a flurry of incredibly fast kicks to their face.

Black Leg Taijutsu - Three Point Division Cut - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu - Santen Decoupage )
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: 40
Description:A very fast attack used by a black leg user , they will stand almost calm and will then launch three near simultaneous roundhouse kicks toward the enemy's throat , chest and stomach striking with as much of the leg they possibly can.

Black Leg Taijutsu - Skewer - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu - Brochette)
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: 40
Description:This is an attack primarily targeted towards enemies on the floor,the user will jump high in the air above the opponent and begin to spin rapidly. Once the required amount of momentum has been generated, they will deliver a devastating downwards kick. The spinning portion of this attack is intended to help drive the attack deeper.


Black Leg Taijutsu - Party Table Kick Course - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu - Bien Sur Parti coup Table)
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: 40
Description:This is one of the most useful attacks for a black leg user to learn,it focuses on dealing with multiple threats as opposed to the rest of the techniques. The user will run and jump formard and land in a two handed hand stand,they will then proceed to spin themselves at high speed with their legs outstretched delivering a near constant barrage of kicks.


Black Leg Taijutsu - Sheep Meat Shot - (Kuro-Ashi Taijutsu - Mouton shot)
Type: Offensive
Rank: B
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 25
Damage Points: 40
Description:This is one of the most powerful kicks in this style and commonly used as a finishing blow,the user will begin by either jumping or flipping into an aerial position. They will then channel as much power into the kick that they can,and proceed with a kick aimed at the face or the chest of the enemy with the intention of sending them flying.

~All Approved~ ^_^

 

[Lucifer]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Hyouton: Aisu Sukin) – Ice Release: Ice Skin
Rank:S
Type: Defence/Attack
Range: Short – Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: After the user performs a single handseal he channels his entire body with Ice chakra then,the user coats himself with a Ice(skin) making him impervious to all Water jutsu's of A-rank and below also the user can not be hared by Ice/element.

.Note: You, must be sannin or above to use this jutsu ._.
.Note: Can only be taught by Ichigo Kurosaki.
.Note: Can only be used 2 times in RP battle.
.Note: This jutsu lasts 2 turns.

(Yõton: Maguma Numa) - Lava Release: Lava of the Underworld
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short/Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: This technique creates a Lava pool beneath the target (relative to them) that immobilizes them. If, your opponent is sucked by the lave your opponent will melt. The size of the Lava/pool is proportioned to the amount of chakra of the user.

.Note: The user can only use this jutsu with a kurotsuchi bio.
.Note: The user can only use this jutsu once per battle.
.Note: Can only be taught by Ichigo Kurosaki.
.Note: Can only be used 3 times in RP battle.

Feel free to edit anything to help its approval.
~All Declined~ Do not resubmit Tensa Zangetsu -_- Tensa Zangetsu has nothing to do with Lava, its called Heavenly Chained Slaying Moon. Do not submit another Bleach zanpakutou

Resubmiting~ And Not TENSA ZANGETSU T_T

(Hyouton: Rensei Aisu Tama)–Ice Release: Drilling Ice Bullet
Rank: S
Type: Offensive
Range: Short – Long
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: The User will concentrate on his (ice) chakra and then take a deep breath. Once, the user is ready he will quickly perform 4 handseals and, blow out Max. 5 bullets of Ice/Hyouton and direct it at his opponent
(multiple opponents). This jutsu is strong enough to do major damage to even a Summoning like Gamabunta.(size) It also freezes objects surrounding the ice bullets like gras, kunais, shuriken etc.

.Note: This can be taught by Ichigo.
.Note: Only Yuki Clan members can use this jutsu.
.Note: The user can only use it once per battle.
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(Yõton: Maguma Numa) - Lava Release: Lava of the Underworld
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short/Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: This technique creates a Lava pool beneath the target (relative to them) that immobilizes them. If, your opponent is sucked by the lave your opponent will melt. The size of the Lava/pool is proportioned to the amount of chakra of the user.

.Note: The user can only use this jutsu with a kurotsuchi bio.
.Note: The user can only use this jutsu once per battle.
.Note: Can only be taught by Ichigo Kurosaki.
.Note: Can only be used 3 times in RP battle.

Feel free to edit anything to help its approval.

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[McRazor]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Kesshō yōso burēdo | Crystalline Elemental Blade
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: N/A (Jutsu Range)
Chakra Cost: N/A (Justu Cost)
Damage Points: N/A (Jutsu Damage + 10 boost)
Description: CEB is made of high density crystal which is the reason why it's so firm and sharp. A very old and secret blacksmith technique was used to create this blade. Rumors say that all five previous owners were sealed within it, upon their death, giving it the power to become chakra infused. When it's chakra infused it gets the corresponding elements color and starts glowing. When it's infused, for example, with Fuuton chakra it starts glowing green, adds boost to Fuuton jutsus and allows the user to use its Fuuton effect. Because the user concentrates a large amount of chakra into it, it gets compressed and when he releases the jutsu it gets boosted. Same goes for other chakra natures. Once it's infused with one type of chakra it can't be infused with other, during that battle. CEB is 50 inches long and it can be wielded with one hand.
Note: Once infused it can't be infused again with an other type of chakra during that battle
Note: Once infused, CEB stays infused until the end of the battle
Note: User still has to do handseals for jutsus that do require handseals
Note: Can only be used by McRazor

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Note: Element effects will be added as separate jutsus which count as one of three moves per turn

Feel free to edit something if IMBA.​

~Declined~ Too many sword that have this abilities (boosting an element). From now on I'm restricting it to this:

-3 times per match, the user can use his sword's ability to boost his "insert element" jutsu by +10.

Kesshō yōso burēdo | Crystalline Elemental Blade
Type: Weapon
Rank: S
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage Points: N/A
Description: CEB is made of high density crystal which is the reason why it's so firm and sharp. A very old and secret blacksmith technique was used to create this blade. Rumors say that its previous owner originated from the Yuki clan. Upon his death he sealed a part of himself within it, making the blade chakra infusable and able to react to Fuuton, Suiton and Hyouton chakra. When the user channels his chakra into CEB, it starts glowing in the elements corresponding color and allows the user to use its element effect. Each element has its own effect which, together with chakra infusion, counts as one of three moves per turn. If the user infuses his Fuuton/Suiton chakra into CEB it starts glowing green/blue and allows the user to use its Fuuton/Suiton effect three times per match. If the user infuses both types of chakra, due to his mastery of both and his ability of controlling Ice, his sword starts glowing light blue and allows the user to use its Hyouton effect. When the user infuses Suiton chakra into his sword he can’t change it to Fuuton, but instead he can add Fuuton to get Hyouton, and vice versa. CEB is a very light blade due to its crystal construction and its only 50 inches long so it can be used with one hand. It's also unbreakable because crystal is one of the firmest materials.
Note: Effects can be used only three times per match
Note: Effects count as one of three moves per turn
Note: User can’t use effect two consecutive turns
Note: Chakra infusion lasts four turns
Note: Freezes on touch, unless Hyouton specialist
Note: Can only be used by McRazor

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~Approved~

Kesshō-fū sufia | Crystalline Wind Sphere
Type: Weapon effect
Rank: A
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: When user infuses his Fuuton chakra into his CEB it creates a dense sphere of air around the user which repels Katon jutsus up to B-Rank, Raiton jutsus up to S-Rank and Doton/Suiton jutsus up to A-Rank.
Note: Effect counts as one of three moves per turn
Note: Effect can be used only three times per battle and count towards the 3 usage of the sword's abilities.
Note: User can't use other Fuuton jutsus next turn
Note: Can only be used if holding CEB

~Approved~ Added the bold part

Kesshō-sui burasuto | Crystalline Water Blast
Type: Weapon effect
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: +20
Description: When user infuses his Suiton chakra into his CEB it allows him to expand a water jutsu that he previously used. As he adds chakra into CEB he uses it as an emitter to give a blast of chakra to his jutsu so he can power it up for one rank and extend its range.
Note: Effect counts as one of three moves per turn
Note: Effect can be used only three times per battlees.[/B]
Note: User can't use other Suiton jutsus next turn
Note: Can only be used if holding CEB

~Declined do not resubmit~ Similar to existing technique.

Kesshō kōri no tōketsu | Crystalline Ice Freezing
Type: Weapon effect
Rank: A
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: +10
Description: When user infuses his Hyouton chakra into his CEB it starts slowly releasing Hyouton chakra, freezing the air around the battlefield and boosting Hyouton jutsus. Adding more chakra to jutsus which the user released makes them only do more damage and doesn’t extend their range.
Note: Effect can be used only once per battle and lasts 4 turns
Note: Can only be used if holding CEB

Feel free to edit something if needed.
Weapon is priority, so if effects are not good I can change them later.​

~Approved~ Edited the boost

 

[McKnockout]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

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(Kikaichu Tsukamu Kumite) – Destruction Bug Kata

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Rank: A
Type: Supplementary/Attack
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 30 (+5 each turn it's activated)
Damage Points: 60 (+10 damage to taijutsu)
Description: The use will release many Kikaichū bugs out of his body which coat his limbs (arms, legs, etc. – the user chooses what) with the crowd of insects. The user can use these insects as an extension of their limbs giving them longer reach with taijutsu and can also be used to restrict the opponent.
Note: Must be a member of the Aburame Clan.
Note: The user is capable of performing jutsus and form hand seals while this is active.
Created by DopeyDwarf

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(Kikaichu Tsukamu Kumite: Sumakku-daun!) – Destruction Bug Kata: Smackdown!

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Rank: A
Type: Supplementary/Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: After using “Destruction Bug Kata”, the user coats the crowd of insects around his limb(s) with chakra and slams his limb (most probably his arm) down onto the ground to dissipate any attack up to B-rank e.g. Earth pillars, incoming B-ranked wind/fire/lightning blast, etc. The use of this technique disperses all the bugs that had enveloped the user’s limb by the former jutsu and thus, the “Destruction Bug Kata” ends.
Note: Aerial attack can no be dissipated, the user must slam his limb onto the ground for this jutsu to work.
Note: “Destruction Bug Kata” ends with the usage of this jutsu.
Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
Note: Must be a member of the Aburame Clan.
Created by DopeyDwarf

~Both Approved~

I have permission from DopeyD to submit the following 3 CJs. I am also the co-creator of the above CJs.

(Kikaichu Tsukamu Kumite: Kyousei Sumakku-daun!) – Destruction Bug Kata: Great Smackdown!

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Rank: S
Type: Supplementary/Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: An advanced version of "Destruction Bug Kata: Smackdown!", in which the user also coats the crowd of insects around his limb(s) with chakra. But this time, with much more chakra, coating his Kikaichū bugs with a much denser layer of protective chakra and slams his limb (most probably his arm) down onto the ground to dissipate any attack up to A-rank e.g. Earth pillars, incoming A-ranked wind/fire/lightning blast, etc. The use of this technique disperses all the bugs that had enveloped the user’s limb by the former jutsu and thus, the “Destruction Bug Kata” ends.
Note: Aerial attack can no be dissipated, the user must slam his limb onto the ground for this jutsu to work.
Note: “Destruction Bug Kata” ends with the usage of this jutsu.
Note: Can only be used 3 times per battle.
Note: Must be a member of the Aburame Clan.
Created by DopeyDwarf and McKnockout

~Declined~ Please explain HOW you dispel an incoming attack. Is slamming on the ground a way to cause a shock wave?

(Kikaichu Tsukamu Kumite: Kakukaku Sumakku-daun!) – Destruction Bug Kata: Glorious Smackdown!

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Rank: Forbidden
Type: Supplementary/Defense
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage Points: 60
Description: Noted to be the perfected form of "Destruction Bug Kata: Smackdown!", in which the user coats the crowd of insects around his limb(s) with a considerably larger amount of chakra in comparison to the parent technique. The user creates a very thick and dense chakra coat around his Kikaichū bugs by using chakra pressure to compress the large amount of chakra. After this, the user slams his limb (most probably his arm) down onto the ground to dissipate any attack up to S-rank e.g. Earth pillars, incoming S-ranked wind/fire/lightning blast, etc. The use of this technique disperses all the bugs that had enveloped the user’s limb by the former jutsu and thus, the “Destruction Bug Kata” ends. The Kikaichū bugs used in this technique are also killed due to the sheer amount of chakra pressure used.
Note: Aerial attack can no be dissipated, the user must slam his limb onto the ground for this jutsu to work.
Note: “Destruction Bug Kata” ends with the usage of this jutsu.
Note: The user takes 15 damage because of the physical strain on his body
Note: Can only be used once per battle.
Note: No Aburame jutsus in the same turn.
Note: Must be a member of the Aburame Clan.
Created by DopeyDwarf and McKnockout

~Declined~ Not only is it an exact copy of your precedent jutsu (stronger), but it's not even restricted as a Forbidden technique. You have the same restrictions as the other one, except for that 15 damage to your body, which is ridiculous considering it won't cripple you in any way for the rest of the fight (which is basically what a Forbidden technique do most of the time).

(Hijutsu: Kanchiki Kikaichū) – Secret Technique: Sensory Kikaichū

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Rank: B
Type: Supplementary/Defense
Range: Short-Long
Chakra cost: 20 (+10 each turn it's activated)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user disperses his Kikaichū bugs all around the battlefield which are then used to alert the host about the location and presence of any nearby chakra on the battelfield. This is made possible due to the close relationship that the host has with his bugs and thus, his Kikaichū bugs can communicate to him and relay him information in a number of ways. By simply watching and/or hearing his bug's movements, the user is capable of interpreting their responses and can determine the presence and location of all/any chakra bearing objects on the battlefield. It should also be noted that the bugs inside the host are capable of receiving these messages from their fellow bugs and can relay this to the user - i.e. another method to communicate.
Note: Must be a member of the Aburame Clan.
Created by DopeyDwarf, McKnockout and Faith.

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~Declined~ I'm pretty sure a similar technique exist based on the pheromones the insects release. That's how they'd communicate with the user.

 

[-Naruto Uzumaki-]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kasai rirīsu - tsuinsōrādoragonzu)Fire Release-Twin Solar Dragons Of Dracova

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Type:Attack
Rank: S Rank
Range:Mid-Long
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points:80
Description:The user will bring their hands together side by side, gather and compress fire chakra in their hands making a small highly powerful and compressed flame in their hand. The user then will clap his hands together and run them together adding friction which causes heat. With his hands still together the user will perform 3 handseals and aim their hands at their target and release big dragon headed blast of fire from each hand.
*The blast dont have to be used simultaneously but one at a time*
*No katon jutsu for the next three turns*
*Can only be used/taught by Shade Dracova*

(Kaze rirīsu - zen'nō no kaze)Wind Release-Sudden Wind

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Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description:The user compress's wind chakra into a small sphere in the palm of their hands. They then throw it at the opponent and with one handseal the ball will explode sending small wind bullets through anything at short range.
*If the user is in short range he will perish also*
*No wind techs the next turn*
*Can only be used three times*
*Can only be used/taught by Shade Dracova*
Note:Can only use twice per battle
Note:No wind Jutsu for 2 turns after used

(Kaze/-sui konbo, doragon no maito)Wind/Water Combo-Dragon's Might!

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Rank: S
Type: Attack
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description:The user gathers wind an water charka at the bottom of their stomach molding it carefully. He then will release all of that chakra all at once. As soon as it leaves his mouth it takes the shape of a dragon's head and rips across the ground as it heads toward the opponent killing him/her on contact.
Note: Can be stopped by a jutsu like Fire And Wind Blast Technique
*May only be used once*
*No wind or water the next turn*
*Can only be taught/used by Shade Dracova

(Ninja āto - beruseruku!)Ninja Art- Berserk!

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Rank: S
Type: Supplementary
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: N/A
Description: This jutsu is based on the belief that humans are evolved from monkeys. The user will utilize their chakra to activate a hidden nerve near the back of their brain. This will temporarily increase their 5 sense's to the max. The user will also receive a small boost in strength, speed and agility. The setback is by activating this part of your brain you are deactivating the part of your brain that allows you to think logically causing you to have short term memory and to act just as a monkey. The user will not be able to think clear and he will attack anything he spots with blows to the body.

*Last for 5 turns*
*Once activated it cant be deactivated before the 5 turns are up*
*When in this state you are basically incompetent and cant think straight*
*You get a powerful boost with your reflexes and body strength*

I already have a jutsu like that "Sudden Wind" or yours. And seriously, how many times is someone gonna post a wind jutsu that forms an orb of defense around the user? -_- I've had a jutsu like that for ages, yet I keep seeing people post them. -_- Gettin' really tired of this. Anyway...

Sealing Jutsu: Sealing Formation Method - (Fuuinjutsu: Shi-ru Fo-me-shon Shikata)
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: 0
Description: The user forms a triangle-shaped hand seal, aiming it in the direction of the target. With this technique, the user can form any seal of his or her choosing, making it form on the person or object within the vicinity of the triangle hand seal, which the user must maintain until the seal is complete. This technique is especially useful for marking people or objects with seals without having to make physical contact with them. The downside, however, lies in that this technique requires great chakra control and even greater precision to use, and cannot be used on moving targets unless the user follows them, keeping their view within the triangle hand seal. In addition, the user must maintain the triangle hand seal or the technique will end.
Note: Can only be used three times per battle
Note: Can only form one seal per use
Note: The intended target must stay relatively stationary for this technique to be used most effectively (quickly)
Note: Can only use one Fuuinjutsu the following turn

I apologize in advance if someone has already made a similar jutsu.

~Declined~ This is almost a 1 hit K.O jutsu. Your opponent would never know what's coming with this jutsu and knowing that are some pretty useful (and terrifying) seals that can be placed on someone (restricting their movements, elemental chakras...etc), I can't accept this technique.

Wind Release: Great Wind Return (Fuuton: Kyousei Kaze Saihatsu)
Rank: C
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage Points: 0
Description: The user generates a silent, near-invisible current of wind which forcibly moves the target (or the user himself, if necessary) in any direction they wish. Although no damage is done by this jutsu, it will catch the opponent off guard, and move them with great speed and force.
Note: No hand seals are required to use this jutsu
Note: The wind current can appear anywhere on the field, and is not restricted to only moving the target in a straight line
Note: The current cannot push the target forward if moving at a speed greater than the user's when he isn't using any speed enhancing technique. However, if used while the user is in a mode which increases the strength/speed of ninjutsu, the speed at which this jutsu is used will increase just the same.
Note: Can only be used three times per battle

(^Izuna said this was approvable)

~Approved~ Check bold part

Updating older custom:

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Wind Release: Detection (Fuuton: Kenshutsu)
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user focuses wind chakra within the immediate area, enabling them to feel any disturbances made, including the opponent's movements, jutsus, and weaponry. This jutsu essentially helps the user create a mental map of everything within range.
Note: Can only be used twice per battle
Note: Lasts two turns

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Wind Release: Detection (Fuuton: Kenshutsu)
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: Short-Mid
Chakra Cost: 30 (+5 for every turn active)
Damage Points: 0
Description: The user focuses wind chakra within the immediate area, enabling them to feel any disturbances made, including the opponent's movements, incoming jutsus, and thrown weaponry. This jutsu essentially helps the user create a mental map of everything within range.
Note: This jutsu can only be used twice per battle (lasts three turns).
Note: The user is capable of using other jutsus while this technique remains active.

~Approved~

 

[ZK]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Advanced Inuzuka Senses | Kōdona Inuzuka Kanchi
Rank: A
Type: Supplementary
Range: The whole field
Chakra cost: 30 (+5 every round)
Damage points: N/A
Description: This technique is an advanced form of the heightened Inuzuka senses, and it can only be performed by members of the Inuzuka clan whom have achieved full mastery of the clan techniques. This technique requires physical contact with the users ninken, and it’s based around the principle that Inuzuka clan members are able to mix and share their chakra with their ninken, and the other way around. The user focuses greatly on the bond he and his ninken shares and absorbs almost all its chakra, leaving it completely drained and unable to battle any further. The great presence of canine chakra in the users body, will greatly increase the users sense of smell and hearing to a level that is far more advanced than even the most experienced and talented Inuzuka clan members. This means that the user is able to hear the opponent’s heartbeat and smell the adrenaline coursing through his veins. Because of the massive animal presence in the users chakra network, the user inherits a small part of his ninkens “6th sense” (the sense that allows dogs to foresee storm, for example) which allows him to block out unnecessary sounds like explosions. The user is able to adjust his hearing and smell by controlling the chakra flow to his ears and nose.
-Can only be used by a member of the Inuzuka clan.
-Can only be used once.
-Lasts until deactivated.
-The users ninken cannot move or battle for the rest of the battle after this technique has been used.
-No Inuzuka techniques can be used while this technique is active.
-Can only be taught by Zero Kelvin.

~Declined~ I'll give it to you, this technique is well thought out. Only a few thing to tweet. Why is there 20 damage if it's an A-rank technique? You can take it off. Make it last for a fixed number of turns (4). Lower your abilities a bit, check the bold part. Please mention that you can't use your dog (or any dog) for the rest of the fight as a drawback. Lastly, make it S-rank.

Updating:

Earth release: Burial of sorrow= Doton: Kanashimi no maisō
Type: Offensive/supplementary
Rank: A
Range: Short/Mid
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 50
Description: the user focuses earth chakra into his/her hands, and then slams them unto the ground, this creates a small earth wave, that’ll race against the target. When the wave is close to the opponent, (around short range) it builds up, (like when a wave comes close to shore) and becomes a 5 meter tall wave, which on the front side, looks like a crying face, with an open mouth. Inside the mouth there is a tongue, made of hard earth, that’ll try to grab the target, and pull it into the mouth. Inside the mouth there’s a lot of teeth made of stone, when the target is caught inside the mouth, the wave will sink into the earth and compress itself, crushing the target within it.

Notes:
• Can only be used three times per battle.
• Can only be taught by ZeroGarra

~ Approved. ~

Dai Chijin no Kanashimi | The Earth Gods Sorrow
Rank: Forbidden
Type: Defensive/Supplementary/Offensive
Range: Short/Long
Chakra cost: 60
Damage points: N/A (120 for a direct hit)
Description: The user releases a massive amount of earth chakra into the ground below him and claps his hands together; this causes a gigantic humanoid behemoth to rise from the ground somewhere short range around the user. The behemoth looks like a traditional samurai and it is equipped with a large katana and a big round shield. The behemoth and the user are linked by a chakra bond and therefore the behemoth mimics all the users movements to perfection, it cannot move by itself. The behemoth is made from the strongest minerals and metals in the earth, and it is able to regenerate most non-lethal damage by absorbing the earth around it. The users chakra is constantly coursing through the behemoth and therefore it cannot be used as a base for earth techniques. To function properly the behemoth draws on a small amount of the users life force. Because of the chakra and life force running through the behemoth, it is able to manipulate and fire great amounts of earth with the strength of an S-ranked technique, this counts as one of the three techniques that can be used every turn. Because of the massive chakra drain the user won’t be able to use advanced earth techniques for a while.
-Can maximally last for 4 turns.
-Can only be used once.
-Causes -20 damage to the user.
-No Ninjutsu or Genjutsu techniques can be used while this is in play.
-No A-ranked or above earth techniques 2 turns after this technique ends.
-Can only be taught be Zero Kelvin.

~Pending~ Are you updating the quoted technique to this? If yes, you need to bold the added/changed parts.

 

[Igneel]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

~Resubmitting~

Kyōka Suigetsu

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Type:Weapon
Rank:Forbidden
Range:Short
Chakra:50(-20 per turn as long as the user hold Kyōka Suigetsu in his hands )
Damage:N/A
Description: Kyōka Suigetsu is the ancient sword that was awarded to the uchiha clan by the kage of kumogakure.As Time passed Shisui Uchiha was awarded Kyōka Suigetsu due to his valiant efforts. Kyōka Suigetsu is said to be the Sword made from a thunderbolt and can only be wielded by True warriors.As long as the user holds Kyōka Suigetsu in his hands,Kyōka Suigetsu sucks the users raiton chakra(20 points per turn)and coats herself with this chakra,thereby making the sword much more sharper such that she could slice through anything except diamond hard substances.Kyōka Suigetsu has the ability to absorb raiton jutsu's of S-rank and below and gets coated with lightning chakra such that bolts of lightning could be seen surrounding the sword.The bolts last for 1 turn and if the user uses the sword to cut the opponent now,it will make the opponent numb.

• Can only be wielded by Shisui and if anyone else touches the sword a 1000V current strikes the wielder
• Can cut through all elemental jutsu's of B-rank and Below and can absorb A-rank Lightning
• Cutting through jutsu's and absorbing lightning jutsu's count as a move
• Cannot use any Fuuton jutsu's of A-rank and above as long the user holds Kyōka Suigetsu in his hands.
• Kyōka Suigetsu sucks the user chakra 20 points per turn
• When the sword is unsheathed the user cannot use any jutsu of S-rank in the same turn
• Absorbing opponents jutsu's count towards one of the users turns
• Sword can only be used in battle for a total of 10 turns and after that it just becomes an ordinary sword

Ninja Art:Chakra Sheild |Seishou Tate|
Type:defence
Rank:A
Range:short
Chakra:30
Damage:N/A
Description:The user instantly creates a sheild made of pure chakra that covers the users like a shell(doesn't protect from underground jutsu's) that protects the user from jutsu's of A-rank and below.But If an A-rank jutsu strikes the sheild and after blocking the jutsu the barrier disappears.The chakra sheild is invisible to naked eye and can only be seen by doujutsu users.

• can only be used 3times per battle
• cannot use any ninjutsu(not elemental in the same turn)
• can only be taught by igneel

Kuchiyose:Katon Makai Seken|Summoning:Fire Style Hell World|

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Rank:Forbidden
Range:Long
Type:Supplementary
Chakra:80
Damage:150
Description:The user quickly summons Hell to battle field(as shown in pic).The entire ground will become super hot such that even water in nearby areas would evaporate leaving a barren land.The hell word is so hot and the fire jutsu's performed by the user will get +20 points boost and all suiton jutsu's used in the battle field will get -10 points.The air around the battle field is so hot that if anybody stays in the hell world for more than 3turnsw/o any protection would melt(including the user but the user can use

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to reduce the damage or similar jutsu's) .Water summoned on the battle field of (A-rank) would evaporate in 1 turn.User can make fire shoot from the ground anywhere in the hellworld thereby burning the opponent

• Can only be used once per battle
• Lasts for 4 Turns
• Cannot use any Fire jutsu at all after the the hell world disappears
• Cannot use any suiton jutsu of S-rank and above as long as the hell world is in battle field
• After the jutsu disappears the users speed decreases by 1lvl and the users reflexes also get lowered.
• Shooting of fire from the ground counts as one of the turns.
• User should have mastered Fire completely
• must be atleast Sannin Rank
• Can only be taught by igneel

if you think more restrictions are needed...feel free to add them
~All Declined~ Do not resubmit Kyoka Suigetsu

~This is my last submission for the week~

Kuchiyose:Katon Makai Seken|Summoning:Fire Style Hell World|

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Rank:Forbidden
Range:Long
Type:Supplementary/Attack
Chakra:80
Damage:150
Description:The user quickly summons Hell to battle field(as shown in pic).The entire ground will become super hot such that even water in nearby areas would evaporate leaving a barren land.The hell world is so hot and the fire jutsu's performed by the user will get +20 points boost and all suiton jutsu's used in the battle field will get -10 points.The air around the battle field is so hot that if anybody stays in the hell world for more than 3 turns including the user w/o any protection would melt (but the user can use

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to reduce the damage or similar jutsu's) .Water summoned on the battle field of (A-rank) would evaporate in 1 turn.User can make fire shoot from the ground anywhere in the hellworld thereby burning the opponent.Shooting of fire from ground considered as one of the users turns*

• Can only be used once per battle
• Lasts for 3 Turns
• Cannot use any Fire jutsu at all after the the hell world disappears
• Cannot use any suiton jutsu of S-rank and above as long as the hell world is in battle field
• After the jutsu disappears the users speed decreases by 1lvl and the users reflexes also get lowered.
• Shooting of fire from the ground counts as one of the turns.
• User should have mastered Fire completely
• user must be atleast Sannin Rank
• Can only be taught by igneel

feel free to edit whats needed for the jutsu's approval

~Declined~ Two reasons why I didn't bother reading; the template is wrong. Forbidden techniques don't deal 150 damage. Secondly, if this is a re-submission, where are the changes? Bold the added/changed parts.

 

[Sheldon Cooper]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Fire Release: Inferno Technique
Rank:A
Range: Short-mid
Type:Attack
Chakra:30
Damage:60

Fire Release: Inferno Technique is a fire Jutsu best used when surrounded by a crowd of enemies. After the hand seals are formed, the user brings their hand to their mouth and breathes a stream of fire directly downward. The fire goes flaring up in all directions around the user, burning all enemies in close proximity to the user. It is not very powerful, earning it a mere A-Rank.

Note:Can only be used 3 times per battle.
Note:User can not perform fire Jutsu for the next turn above A-rank.

~Declined~ Add a Japanese name.
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Raiton: Hanran(Lightning Release: Uprising)
Rank:B-rank
Range:Short
Chakra:25
Damage:40
Type:Attack-Defence

In order to the use technique,the user must first place the palms of his hands on the ground beneath him.The user must then transfer large amounts of lightning chakra. The lightning chakra will then erupt into a strong shock wave which will burst out in the area surrounding the user.The lightning will then move in an upward direction as it spreads out.

Note:Can be used 3 times per battle
Note:Can't perform a lightning jutsu for a turn above A-rank

~Declined already exist~
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Raiton: Sui no Nagareru-Lightning Release: Flowing Shock
Type:Attack
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60

A basic lightning release technique, the user must perform two hand seals while gathering chakra either in a concentrated spot or all throughout their body. This part may be performed as much as thirty seconds in advance of the actual attack and held in till released from the users body. Upon release a high voltage shock will either travel through the point of concentration or through the body as a whole, delivering a shock capable of stunning and causing uncontrollable muscle spasms inside the intended victim. To be hit by this technique a person must be either in contact or within three feet of the user under normal conditions. While under water this effect widens substantially to within ten feet of the user. As the effects wear off the opponent may feel a burning or tingling sensation all over their body, though the technique does not physically leave more then first degree burns even when focused. This attack can also be channeled through the ground to increase the range of the attack.

Note:Can only be used twice per battle
Note:If the user is also in the water he/she will get hit causing -10

Feel free to edit anywhere.

~Declined do not resubmit~ This is basically a rip off of Chidori Nagashi (read the official description and you'll see).

 

[KeotsuEclipse]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

For the Week of Sept 11 - Sept 16.
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(Note that when the contract was approved, it was approved saying that the birds where allowed to transform into human forms - I mention this, due to noticing a summon being declined for this reason on a previous page).

Rank: S
Range: N/A
Type: Summon
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage: N/A
Description: Morpheus and Selene are both Bleeding-Heart pigeons of average size, with Selene having a primarily light pink plumage, with blue accent around her head, giving her the appearance of wearing a masquerade mask, and on the tips of her wings as accents – the “wound” on her chest is golden, as is a large arc that extends from the tip of one wing, across her back, and to the edge of the other; Morpheus is covered in stark black feathers that have a very sleek, shiny finish, despite his rather ruffled appearance – his “wound” is snow white, as is the crown on his head. Among the signers of the Columbidae contract, it is widely believed that these two are the next in line for leadership over the contract. These two both specialize in Genjutsu, giving them rather interesting powers. While in Avian form, it’s obvious that Selene is the powerhouse. While she flies around, she rapidly molts, scattering her feathers – which give off a soft glow – all over the battlefield; this causes the opponent(s) to become very relaxed, as they start to fall into a deep, soothing sleep – this is effectively Selene’s own version of the Temple of Nirvana Genjutsu. Due to the constant and continuous nature of the Genjutsu, it makes it not only difficult to avoid, but difficult to resist. Morpheus mainly runs support in this form – he uses a form of the False Surroundings Genjutsu to make it so that neither Selene nor himself can be easily pinpointed, but constantly randomizing their location, or so it appears to the opponent. Once Selene’s Genjutsu takes effect, though, both automatically assume their human forms – and in this form, Morpheus is the one to be reckoned with. Selene starts to sing, ensuring that the opponent stays in a deep, peaceful sleep, which only helps to augment Morpheus’s powers as this allows him to ensnare anyone who hears Selene’s singing in their sleep into his own Genjutsu. He taps into the opponent’s subconscious, and draws forth their deepest fears, allowing their mind to create their own nightmares. He then amplifies them and gives them form while adding a few of his own touches, making them very real to the enemy, as if they are experiencing the most horrific of nightmares – due to the peaceful sleep they came from, the nightmares are more exhausting on the enemy’s mind than they would be normally. After a short while, with the opponent mentally exhausted from the barrage of nightmares, he makes it appear as if a large black portal opens beneath the opponent’s feet, sucking them into a large, bleak nothingness. Nothing is present there, and the opponent’s psyche welcomes this, falling into an extremely deep, comatose like trance. After this, Morpheus and Selene take their leave, and are dismissed.

Spoiler

*Can only be summoned once.
*Counts as two moves in the turn that they are summoned.
*They can remain on the field for up to five turns.
*When the opponent falls under the effect of Selene’s ToN, they automatically transform into their human forms – this takes 20 chakra each, instead of the usual 10, totaling 40.
*The user cannot use any Genjutsu while these two are on the field, as it would effectively negate their effects.
*The user cannot perform another Summoning until three turns after these two have been dismissed.
*No physical damage is done to the opponent, but the psychological damage is severe.
*Neither Morpheus nor Selene can move in Human form, due to having to concentrate to activate their Genjutsu, meaning they are unable to defend themselves.
*Both Morpheus and Selene have 50 Health.

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Morpheus and Selene in their human forms.

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~Declined~

Resubmitting:

Rank: S
Range: N/A
Type: Summon
Chakra Cost: 80
Damage: N/A
Description: Morpheus and Selene are both Bleeding-Heart pigeons of average size, with Selene having a primarily light pink plumage, with blue accent around her head, giving her the appearance of wearing a masquerade mask, and on the tips of her wings as accents – the “wound” on her chest is golden, as is a large arc that extends from the tip of one wing, across her back, and to the edge of the other; Morpheus is covered in stark black feathers that have a very sleek, shiny finish, despite his rather ruffled appearance – his “wound” is snow white, as is the crown on his head. Among the signers of the Columbidae contract, it is widely believed that these two are the next in line for leadership over the contract. These two both specialize in Genjutsu, giving them rather interesting powers. While in Avian form, it’s obvious that Selene is the powerhouse. While she flies around, she rapidly molts, scattering her feathers – which give off a soft glow – all over the battlefield; this causes the opponent(s) to become very relaxed, as they start to fall into a deep, soothing sleep – this is effectively Selene’s own version of the Temple of Nirvana Genjutsu. Due to the constant and continuous nature of the Genjutsu, it makes it not only difficult to avoid, but difficult to resist. Morpheus mainly runs support in this form – he uses a form of the False Surroundings Genjutsu to make it so that neither Selene nor himself can be easily pinpointed, but constantly randomizing their location, or so it appears to the opponent. Once Selene’s Genjutsu takes effect, though, both automatically assume their human forms – and in this form, Morpheus is the one to be reckoned with. Selene starts to sing, ensuring that the opponent stays in a deep, peaceful sleep, which only helps to augment Morpheus’s powers as this allows him to ensnare anyone who hears Selene’s singing in their sleep into his own Genjutsu. He taps into the opponent’s subconscious, and draws forth their deepest fears, allowing their mind to create their own nightmares. He then amplifies them and gives them form while adding a few of his own touches, making them very real to the enemy, as if they are experiencing the most horrific of nightmares – due to the peaceful sleep they came from, the nightmares are more exhausting on the enemy’s mind than they would be normally. After a short while, with the opponent mentally exhausted from the barrage of nightmares, he makes it appear as if a large black portal opens beneath the opponent’s feet, sucking them into a large, bleak nothingness. Nothing is present there, and the opponent’s psyche welcomes this, falling into an extremely deep, comatose like trance. After this, Morpheus and Selene take their leave, and are dismissed.

Spoiler

*Can only be summoned once.
*Counts as two moves in the turn that they are summoned.
*They can remain on the field for up to five turns.
*When the opponent falls under the effect of Selene’s ToN, they automatically transform into their human forms – this takes 20 chakra each, instead of the usual 10, totaling 40.
*The user cannot use any Genjutsu while these two are on the field, as it would effectively negate their effects.
*The user cannot perform another Summoning until five turns after these two have been dismissed.
*No physical damage is done to the opponent, but the psychological damage is severe.
*Neither Morpheus nor Selene can move in Human form, due to having to concentrate to activate their Genjutsu, meaning they are unable to defend themselves.
*Both Morpheus and Selene have 50 Health.

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Morpheus and Selene in their human forms.

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Made it cost 80 chakra instead of 40, since it's two birds. Not really sure what kind of restrictions need to be added - if it's declined again, I'll boost the rank to Forbidden and make it require a blood-sacrifice as well. o.o Also made it so that summons can't be used for five turns after these two are summoned.

~Approved~ Awesome technique ^^

Update:

(Mikomi no Yaiba) Blade of Hope

Rank: Forbidden
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Points: 90
Description: Mikomi was forged by ancient blacksmiths, the founders of the chakra metal weapons. They were the best and this was the last and the most powerful weapon they created. The weapon his comprised by a blade made of a very special chakra metal, Mythril, that is able to change it shape (but not its mass) by responding to our chakra manipulation. To gain full power of the weapon, the user must infuse it with blood. It requires 30 damage points. Once the ritual is done, the blade will acquire a bluish white tone and the user will have the ability to change it shape.
Due to it's material, Mikomi his extremely hard to break, but so sharp that can cut through almost anything.
*Every time the user wants to manipulate it, he must drop 15 health*
*Can only be held by Keotsu. The sword will became so heavy that the user will have it's bones crushed if he gets beneath, if attempted to be used by anyone else*

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Rank: N/A
Type: Weapon
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: N/A
Damage: +20 to Kenjutsu
Description: After using the first Mikomi no Yaiba, this blade’s predecessor, for years, Keotsu decided it was time to forge his own blade. Keotsu took the ancestral Mythril blade and used its shape-shifting ability to transform it into an ore that he could smelt and form his own sword with. Using a process from his home, Keotsu spent three straight days forging the blade, infusing it with his chakra and life-force as he did so. On the dawn of the forth morning, the blade gleamed in the early morning light, and was completed. Infused with the powers of the previous Mikomi no Yaiba, this blade retained the ability to change its shape, but not its mass, by responding to the wielder’s chakra manipulation – and due to this ability to change its shape, the godly edge that the previous blade held was still present after this re-forging, shown when Keotsu plunged the blade into a sheer rock face and withdrew it, the weapon unscathed. Keotsu’s forging had an adverse effect on the blade, though. It created a type of “grain” on the inside of the light blue-white metal, causing energy to flow from it one-way, meaning that if he was running his chakra through it, energy could not be put into it from an opposite direction, as the blade would act as an extreme energy insulator. Keotsu’s re-forging also had one more effect on the blade: it allowed Keotsu to amplify the chakra he used for his Kenjutsu technique, boosting their strength and allowing him to use the chakra he focused into the blade to use a short-range, splash type shockwave; that is, when swung, after charging chakra, the sword can release a mulit-directional “splash-wave” of chakra that has the same cutting capability and force behind it as the blade when swung. Due to the legendary metal from which it is forged, Mikomi no Yaiba: Mythos’s edge will never dull, and the weapon is indestructible.

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*The user can manipulate the blade’s form during battle at any time, but it costs 35 chakra to do so, and also counts towards one of that turn’s three allotted moves.
*The sword can be summoned using the generic summoning technique, but this also counts against a turn’s move, obviously.
*The splash wave requires a charge time, but chakra can be charged while other chakra/jutsu are being used, due to it having a neutral element; thus, it doesn’t create an imbalance within the user’s system. The wave is considered a standard A-rank jutsu, requiring 30 chakra, doing 60 damage, counting against one of the moves in a turn, and it does not receive the +20 power boost that the sword gives to Kenjutsu.
*Can only be wielded by Keotsu. When someone else tries to hold the blade, it will reject their chakra and increase its density exponentially, making it to heavy to be lifted. However, it reverts to its original density when Keotsu is holding it.

It's more of an upgrade than an update, but here are the immediate changes: lowered rank due to forbidden-rank weapons being outlawed; took away the self-damaging nature needed for transforming but increased the required chakra; added a boost to Kenjutsu techniques instead of the sword having an actual damage value; addition of A-ranked chakra wave;added the ability to the sword that it can be summoned to the user.

And just a quick question: if the upgrade is declined, I get to keep the original Mikomi, correct? o.o

~Declined~ There's just too many abilities there, decide which one you want to keep but lower the count. Also, if you keep the bold part, elaborate on it more. Yes you can keep your old sword if this one is declined.

 

[Alucard]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Hanki) ~ Reverse Demon
Rank: A
Type: Defence; Counter; Taijutsu
Range: Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: -
Description: This is a technique meant to cancel and neutralize a physical attack enhanced by chakra. Upon being attacked by the opponent, with a chakra enhanced physical attack (Tsunade's punches, Samurai Sabre Technique), the user will focus chakra on the palm of his hand or on his sword and use it to stop the attack. As soon as the user's hands or sword make contact with the opponent or with the opponent's weapon, the user will release chakra of opposite speed and energy, being able to neutralize the opponent's move immediately and follow up with another attack.
*Usable three times per battle
*Can be used to counter a S-rank technique once.

~Declined~ How would you know the speed and energy being used by your opponent. Unless you restrict it to Doujutsu, I don't see this one getting approved. Even then you should restrict it to 3 B-rank and 1 A-rank.

 

[Gingka Uzumaki]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Kasai no sutābonbādomento-hō)- Fire Style: Fire Star Bombardment Technique
Type:Attack
Rank:A
Range:Short-Mid
Chakra Cost:30
Damage Points:60
Description:User creates six fireballs in his throat. Using shape manipulation as he is spitting out the fire balls, they turn into little stars. The user puts one underground, under the opponent. The user controls the stars and put one behind the opponent, one above, two to the sides, and one in front. The look of this move is kind of like Piccolo's H*llzone Grenade. After the opponent realizes that he is trapped, the one underground raises the opponent up, and at the same time the other stars are coming, they all burst, sending the opponent in a fiery, burning haze.

Note: Can only be used 2 times in a battles
Note: Can only be taught by Gingka Uzumaki

~Declined~ This jutsu doesn't make sense. How would the start get under the opponent and behind him? If you shoot it, it'll be going straight forward.

 

[Riku..]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Houto Tame Keimei) Way to Dawn
Rank: S
Type: Weapon
Range: N/A
Chakra Cost: 40 (if summoned)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Way to Dawn is the name of Riku's most highly favored sword. Riku constantly keeps it in his sheathe, having to often use it in battle, but if not already sheathed, he can call it to the field at any time (this requires no hand seals, so he can do it fluently and quickly in battle, but does require the above chakra amount). It's appearance is quite peculiar, most notably the wing on the inner part of it's blade. The main color of the blade is somewhere between a dark red and black, transitioning in colors from black to dark red from the blade edge to the blade's back respectively. One half of the blade's guard is compromised of what seems to be a demonic wing, whilst the other seems to be an angelic counterpart. Way to Dawn is of fair size for a blade, and Riku most often uses it with one hand, allowing for efficient and quick attacks. The blade's affinity, being that it's Riku's blade, belongs with ice-related techniques and jutsu. First, whenever the blade is in Riku's hand, he is capable of doing all ice jutsu with barely any handseals, but rather simply by swinging the blade or, in some cases such as the ice spike jutsu, stabbing it into the ground and three times per battle, the Riku can use this blade to increase any one of his ice-techniques ranks by one (obviously excluding forbidden-rank techniques). The sword can, at any time, be imbued with ice chakra that will increase it's durability and cutting power, though this, obviously, requires the user to use up more chakra. When the user does this, the blade will also become larger than normally and be covered in what seems to be a light blue coating, giving the sword extra reach, though still leaving it at the same weight and still allowing Riku to hold it the same way and still be balanced. The sword also has several other abilities (to be submitted as customs).
Note: When focusing ice chakra into the sword, the user will lose ten chakra points per turn.
Note: This blade can only be held by Riku. If anyone but Riku so much as touches its hilt, the blade will slowly encase them in ice while at the same time dropping their body's temperature exponentially. The ice will first begin to creep up their hands until it covers their entire body.

~Declined~ Check the bold part. Summon it with a special seal you need to touch, or with hand seals, but not out of thin air. Make it so it lowers your hand seals by 2-3 but change that part. Make it so it can only boost A-rank and lower by one rank.

 

[Drizzy]

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Fuuton:torune-do rasen (Wind Release: Tornado Spiral)
Type:Supplementary
Rank:B
Range:Short- Long
Chakra Cost:25
Damage Points:N/A
Description: The user, focuses their wind chakra, creating rapid rotations around the lower section of the body, this rotation forms a spiralling tornado shaped gust of wind which is used to quickly transport the user [it races across the ground/air].
Note:
~can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

~Declined~ Precise whether you "become" part wind or are simply transported and add restrictions on the speed and usage. Also make it clear whether or not it can be used against your opponent.
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Lightning Release:Lightning Stabilization (Raiton:Raikou Anteika)
Type: Defence
Rank: A
Range:short
CHakra cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user coats himself in a suit of chakra, once the chakra is formed, any Lightning technique B rank and lower will be absorbed and stored in the body. The Lightning when stored, will cause the body to be instantly paralyzed for a period of one full turn. The user is vulneerable for all incomming attacks during this time.The Lightning will then be released in the form of a bolt up into the sky just to release the energy
-Can only be aught by ~Drizzy~
-Requires the mastery of Lightning

~Declined~ Restriction?
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Earth Release: Earth Marbles (Doton:koudo ohajiki)
Type:Attack
Rank:S Rank
Range: Short- Mid
Chakra Cost:40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user performs six handseals, he then stomps his foot onto the ground, channeling his doton chakra throughout the Earth, the chakra is then focused at any point below the opponent, almost instantly, with a single hand gesture made by the user, a great number of holes are formed in the ground, hundreds of small marbles of earth emerge from the holes at rapid speeds, constantly hitting he opponent from below, the heavy force of the rock marbles can cause severe damage to the body.
-Can only be used two times per battle
-Can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

~Approved~ Made it two times per battle

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Chakra Vortex: [kadou]
Rank:A
Type: Defence
Range:Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description:The user clasps his hands together, using his chakra to release a chakra vortex which spins around the user, which is capable of restricting wind circulation around the user.
-Can only be used three times per battle.

~Declined~ Make it a Wind technique. Normal chakra is weaker then elemental chakra so there's no reason for this technique to stop wind. Also, work on the name (follow the template).

~resubmitting~

Fuuton:torune-do rasen (Wind Release: Tornado Spiral)
Type:Supplementary
Rank:A
Range:Short- Long
Chakra Cost:25
Damage Points:N/A
Description: The user, focuses their wind chakra, creating rapid rotations around the lower section of the body, this rotation forms a spiralling tornado shaped gust of wind which is used to quickly transport the user [it races across the ground/air]The wind only rotates around the body, it does not partially transform the lower section. This technique can also be released if preferred by forming a hand gesture, the tornado will continue towards the opponent. If not, the user can also perform the hand gesture to stop the jutsu, the decision must be posted in the move.
Note:
~can only be taught by ~Drizzy~
~can only be created around the user
~usable only three times per battle

~Approved~ Added bold part.

Earth Release:Rise of the Mighty Pillars [Kigen za Tsuyoi Chuuseki]
Rank: Forbidden
Range:Short- Mid
Chakra Cost: 50
Damage Costs: 90
Description: The user performs six handseals, he then stomps the Earth, releasing a very large amount of his doton chakra, as it circulates throughout the Earth, while maintaining the chakra and using chakra and nature manipulation, The user then clasps his hands together, as this is done, at the users Will, up to nine giant pillars can be manipulated to rise from the earth, large in size and mass, these pillars can then be controlled to lock around the tails of any tailed beast, if this is successful, the pillars can keep the tails locked onto the ground for one full turne of the opponent. At he end of this turn, the pillars will crumble. This technique can be controlled, the amount of pillars can be increased or reduced. If this technique is used on a human, the pillar will crush the opponent.
Note
-If used on a tail beast, The pillars only restrict the tails by pinning them down onto the ground, any other part such as the arms and legs can still remain with motion, the pillars only restrict the Creature from running, dodging, jumping etc. While this is in place, the beast still has power to perform jutsu.
-Can only be used once per battle
-Can only be taught by ~Drizzy~
-No Earth Jutsu for the following turn
-No S rank and above jutsu for the next two turns
-Only Sannin Ranked or Higher can use this technique

~Declined~ Why is this even ranked Forbidden? Change the part about crushing humans and being able to manipulate the pillars. Make it so it traps someone/the tails, but no crushing, we've got plenty of those already.
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Genjusu:Tenma sutachu za auta toorimichi [Illusion Technique: Demonic Statue of the Outer Path]
Rank:Forbidden
Range:Short-Mid
Chacra Cost:50
Damage Points:N/A
Description: The user performs six handseals, finishing with a clap of the hands. By doing this, the user releases chakra into the atmosphere. As basic Genjutsu procedures, the chakra is used to disrupt the flow of chakra present in the victim's brain,which can disrupt the senses. As soon as this is done, the user will form another handseal, the seal of the tiger, activating the launch of the jutsu. A demonic statue will rise from the ground, from the Head to the fingers on top of the earth,the statue rises from below the opponent, it is positioned so that the opponent is lifted as it rises in the right hand of the statue, the atmosphere and surroundings change, the sky turns blood red, the clouds black, and the grass and any other vegetation is dull in color. This demonic statue has nine closed eyes, and a scroll in it's mouth. As the opponent is on the right hand of the statue, drenched in fear, the opponent is incapable of moving, leaving te user in reality a chance to attack.On the left hand of the statue, positioned on the palm, is a small human sized replica of the staue, in full body form, this replica has only two eyes, both, blood red, possessing the sharingan.The replica then jumps onto the right hand of which the opponent is located, and slashes his throat with a specially designed kunai. As this is done, the opponent falls out of the genjutsu, traumatized, this causes the opponent to operate in a dizzy/drunken manner for the next two turns, which slows down his movement.
-Can only be used once
-requires the space of two moves
-No Genjutsu for the rest of the match
-Requires the user to have sharingan
-The sharingan loses function for the next turn [no chakra sensing, handseal reading etc, however basic sight is still functionable, and will regain function for the turn after]
-Any level tomoe of Sharingan can be used for this technique
-Can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

~Declined~ Take out the bold parts and reword the last bold section about being dizzy/drunk, it really doesn't fit with the symptoms of getting his throat sliced open.
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~resubmitting~

Fuuton:Tsuyoi kadou [Wind Release: Mighty Vortex]
Rank:A
Type: Defence
Range:Short
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description:The user clasps his hands together, using his chakra to instantly release a chakra vortex which spins around the user, which is capable of restricting wind circulation around the user. Any A rank or lower technique is destroyed if it comes in contact with the vortex.
-Can only be used three times per battle
-Can only be taught by ~Drizzy~

~Declined~ An A-rank wind technique blocking any other A-rank jutsu? Please work on that part.
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~resubmitting~

Lightning Release:Lightning Stabilization (Raiton:Raikou Anteika)
Type: Defence
Rank: S
Range:Short
CHakra cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user coats himself in a suit of chakra, once the chakra is formed, any Lightning technique A rank and lower will be absorbed and stored in the body. The Lightning when stored, will cause the original body to be instantly paralyzed for a period of one full turn. The user is vulneerable for all incomming attacks during this time.The Lightning will then be released in the form of a bolt up into the sky just to release the energy
-Can only be taught by ~Drizzy~
-Requires the mastery of Lightning
-Only usable twice per battle
-Needs to have the mastery of Lightning to have full concentration of absorbing te lightning attack

All changes for the above jutsu which are marked resubmitting are symbolized in bold

~Declined do not resubmit~ After careful consideration, this jutsu is too similar to existing technique while being OP in it's fundamentals.

 

[Bhil]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Fire Release: Inferno Technique
Rank:A
Range: Short-mid
Type:Attack
Chakra:30
Damage:60

Fire Release: Inferno Technique is a fire Jutsu best used when surrounded by a crowd of enemies. After the hand seals are formed, the user brings their hand to their mouth and breathes a stream of fire directly downward. The fire goes flaring up in all directions around the user, burning all enemies in close proximity to the user. It is not very powerful, earning it a mere A-Rank.

Note:Can only be used 3 times per battle.
Note:User can not perform fire Jutsu for the next turn above A-rank.

I have jutsu very similar to this jutsu.

 

[-Naruto-]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Resubmitting

(Fuuton: Hari no kōhai) Wind Release: Needle Devastation
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: 40
Description: The user starts out by preforming handsigns and inhaling some air, followed by the user spitting out hidden needles infused with wind chakra. Due to the wind element, the needles are capable of going clean through the opponent and are very fast. However the user is only capable of shooting 20 needles at a time.
~This Jutsu can only be used every other turn
~Can only be taught by Naruto41698
~Must know Hidden Needles


~Declined: either change the rank or change the description but do something about the bold part~

Resubmitting

(Fuuton: Hari no kōhai) Wind Release: Needle Devastation
Type: Attack
Rank: B
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 20
Damage: 40
Description: The user starts out by preforming handsigns and inhaling some air, followed by the user spitting out hidden needles infused with wind chakra. Due to the wind element, the needles are capable of going 1-3 inches into the opponent and are very fast. However the user is only capable of shooting 20 needles at a time.
~This Jutsu can only be used every other turn
~Can only be taught by -Naruto-
~Must know Hidden Needles
~Can only be used 4 times per battle.

Fixed the bolded

~Approved~ Added the bold part.

 

[black uchiha]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

Resubmitting by Rei's Request/With Her Permission

Turning a captured bio into a human puppet:

Type: Human puppet made by Sasori
Rank: S-Class bio made a A rank puppet and techniques
Range: N/A
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: After capturing Mr. Popo, Sasori turned him into a human puppet, preserving his bloodline limit, swift release, but none of his special techniques and jutsus. The puppet is outfitted with the usual puppet skin and two weapon have been added to it: A sword in his right hand and a spiked whip in his left, both coming forth when the puppet master decides to.
- This was Professor Sarutobi's bio and profile:

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- Battle in which the bio was captured:

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- Can only be used by black uchiha and cannot be taught to anyone else.
~Approved~

Dropping the one above to make this one below:

Turning a captured bio into a human puppet:

(Ningen no ayatsuri ningyō: Akira) Human Puppet: Fai
Type: Human puppet made by Sasori
Rank: S-Class bio made a A rank puppet and techniques
Range: N/A
Chakra cost: 30
Damage points: 60
Description: After capturing Fai D. Flowrite , Sasori turned him into a human puppet, preserving his bloodline limit, Ice release, but none of his special techniques and jutsus. The puppet is outfitted with the usual puppet skin and two weapon have been added to it: A sword in his right hand and a spiked whip in his left, both coming forth when the puppet master decides to.
- This was Heavens Blade bio and profile:

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- Battle in which the bio was captured:

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- Can only be used by Black Uchiha and cannot be taught to anyone else.
This will replace the human puppet above (Mr. Popo)

~Approved~

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(Konchū sutairu: Shamen no tama) Insect Style: Sphere of Absolution
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user sends two massive amounts of insects out (at once). One to blacken the sky of the battlefield, the insects blanket the sky (mid-range from the ground) not letting anything in from the outside (light, rain…etc). The second mass of insects digs 6ft underground, under the user and opponent (unknown by the opponent). The two masses connect making a dense chakra draining sphere of insects around both user and opponent blinding them both (due to the darkness).
- Only last 2 turns
- Can only use 2 times per battle
- Can only use A-rank and below bug techniques the next turn
- Dojutsu users can see the chakra of the underground insects
- Can only be taught by Black Uchiha

~Declined~ Don't know if you realize this but your bugs are coming from inside of you. This mean that you can only hold as much bugs as you weigh (and that is if you completely disintegrate). Knowing this, your jutsu is simple impossible since you'd never have enough bug to achieve a sphere that envelop both of you up to mid range while blocking the light.

(Chikyū no sutairu: Sutikkīshawā) Earth Style: Sticky Shower
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Points: 80
Description: The user, after one handseal launches a large ball of mud, from their mouth. The ball then explodes from the back of the ball (side facing the user) causing it to shower the opponent with sticky mud from all directions, making them immobile. Can be used with a fire jutsu to make it lava.
- Can only use 3 times per battle
- No S-rank earth the next turn
- Can only be taught by Black Uchiha

~Declined~ Why would mud keep them from moving and why does it cause 80 damage to your opponent?

(Chikyū no sutairu: Supurinkurāshisutemu) Earth Style: Sprinkler System
Type: Supplementary
Rank: A
Range Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 30
Damage Points: N/A
Description: The user makes the dragon handseal, to make sprouts of earth rise from the ground throughout the field. The sprouts shoot out wet sticky mud covering the field in this mud, spraying enough to make a four foot deep mud puddle over the ground (this happens quickly). To maintain on top of this mud the user and opponent has to have a constant flow of chakra witch lowers the rank of their jutsu (down 1 rank) used while on the mud. If sunk into the mud the person becomes stuck.
- Can only be used twice per match
- Mud last for 4 turns before seeping back into the ground
- The user can be affected/trapped by this jutsu
- This mud is wet and conducts electricity
- Can only be taught by Black Uchiha

~Declined~ Mud is both a CE and a special element. Unless you make an appropriate bio, don't resubmit such jutsus.

Sesshomaru
Rank: S
Type: Defense/Attack
Range: Short- Long
Chakra: 40
Damage: 80
Description: User summons Sesshomaru, King Shinobu’s head adviser. Sesshomaru is the size of a basketball. Sesshomaru is a master of genjutsu, casting and dispelling them, up to S-rank. He has the ability to fuse with the user’s head in the shape of a helmet with a horn, given him (the user) a constant flow of chakra to break or deflect genjutsu from the user. Upon arrival to the field Sesshomaru can releases a flow of chakra into any single enemy at mid-range from the user, placing them in a genjutsu known as the Rim of Possibilities (A-rank). In this genjutsu the opponent see 4 mirrors of himself dying four different ways, sending fear throughout their body holding them in place. The user can’t use any of Sesshomaru’s abilities for 2 turns if he uses that genjutsu when he comes into the field. Sesshomaru has the nature elements of wind, using it up to A-rank.
- Must have signed the rhinoceros beetle contract
- 2 turn wait time if Sesshomaru uses Rim of possibility upon entry
- Can only fuse with user once per battle
- Fusion last for the duration of the summoning.
- This Summoning can only be in play for 5 turns(my turns).
- This Summoning can only be Summoned 4 times per battle.

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~Declined do not resubmit~ Turning into a helmet, dispelling S-rank genjutsu, fusion with user...I will not accept such a jutsu, whatever change you do.

 

[Dean Kaguya]

Re: Custom Jutsu Submission

(Ninpő: Kurouzu Gijutsu no Tsubasa)Ninja Arts: Wings Of Crows Technique
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 25 (+5 each turn active)
Damage Points: N/A
Description: Itachi summons a flock of crows to him and they take the shape of wings and attach themselves to his back. Once attached, they function they same as actual wings and increase his agility as well as his speed.
~ Technique lasts for 3 turns.
~ Can only be used by Itachi bios.
~ Can only be used 3 times per battle.
~ Can only be taught by Dean Kaguya.
~Declined~
(Ninpô: Mārinsākurutekunikku) Ninja Arts: The Merlin Circle.
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 40 (+10 each turn active)
Damage Points: N/A (+15 to each elemental ninjutsu)
Description: The user forms 1 hand seal and a causes a circle with the elemental inscription of each element on a stone to form around him with as the center. The user then streams his elemental chakra along each stone with the inscription that matches the particular element. Whilst is the circle is active, the speed of performing ninjutsu is greatly increased because the users chakra is already present to the used.
~ Must have had training in all basic 5 elements to use.
~ Whilst active no Gen/Tai/Ken/Fuuin/Kinjutsu of any sort may be used.
~ Lasts for 3 turns.
~ After the 3 turns no Ninjutsu of any sort may be used for 2 turns.
~ Can only be used 2 times per battle.
~ Can only be taught by Dean Kaguya.
~Declined~
(Katon: Chou Hi Jiten) Fire Style: Grand Fire Spin
Type: Attack
Rank: S
Range: Short-Long
Chakra Cost: 40
Damage Poinst: 80 (-10 to user)
Description: The user forms 3 hand seals and spits out a giant spiralling vortex of fire that levels everything in its path.
~ Only usable once per battle.
~ Can only be taught by Dean Kaguya.
~ No fire techniques 2 turns after.
~Declined~ Better description

~Resubmitting first 2
(Ninpő: Kurouzu Gijutsu no
Tsubasa)Ninja Arts: Wings Of Crows
Technique
Type: Supplementary
Rank: B
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 25 (+5 each turn
active)
Damage Points: N/A
Description:Itachi summons a swarm of crows to his back and they attach themselves to his back and using chakra, Itachi forms them into wings. Once attached, they function they same as actual wings and allow him to fly, increase his agility as well as his speed.
~ Technique lasts for 3 turns.
~ Can only be used by Itachi bios.
~ Can only be used 3 times per
battle.
~ Can only be taught by Dean
Kaguya.

~Declined~ been done so many times. The only difference is that the wings are originally crows, but it still is a human/animal fusion (according to your description), which is not accepted anymore.

(Ninpô: Mārinsākurutekunikku)
Ninja Arts: The Merlin Circle.
Type: Supplementary
Rank: S
Range: Self
Chakra Cost: 40 (+10 each turn
active)
Damage Points: N/A (+15 to each elemental ninjutsu)
Description: The user forms 6 hand seal (Boar-ram-tiger-bird-dragon-snake) and a causes a circle with the
elemental inscription of each
element on a stone to form around him with as the center. The user then streams each of his elemental chakra along the correspondent stone. Whilst is the
circle is active, the speed of
performing elemental ninjutsu is greatly increased because the users elemental chakra is already present to the used. If the user wants to use any particular element, he/she draws the chakra from the corresponding stone and using the chakra plus a little of his performs the jutsu.
~ This takes 2 moves out of the users 3 in the turn its activated.
~ In the process of activating, the user must remain stationary.
~ Must have had training in all basic 5 elements to use.
~ Whilst active no Gen/Tai/Ken/
Fuuin/Kinjutsu of any sort may be
used.
~ Lasts for 3 turns.
~ After the 3 turns no Ninjutsu of
any sort may be used for 2 turns.
~ Can only be used 2 times per
battle.
~ Can only be taught by Dean
Kaguya.
*Best used after using a clone jutsu*
Looks sort of like the image in the spoiler below.

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~Declined~ The boost is too great for all elements (make it +5 since it affects the 5) and re-work the description. It needs to be clearer and elaborate on the increased speed for each element.

 

[Yūsuke1]

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, this will be my final submission for the week.

I hope the restrictions are good enough D;

(Furuidou) - Ancestral Body
Rank : S
Range : Short
Type : Offense/Defense/Supplementary
Chakra cost : 40 (+10 for every turn activated)
Damage points : N/A
Description : With this technique, the user is able to conjure up an avatar resembling the user around him with its thin layer made up of purely the user's very own chakra. This is merely nothing more than an ordinary chakra cloak that does basically nothing. The chakra cloak has no special features nor does it have any special abilities other than being able to prepare the user's body to enter an elemental avatar state, hence it does not disturb the user as it remains. Once being in this chakra cloak for a certain amount of time under the right circumstances, the user will then be able to start molding the element of his choice above the layer of the chakra cloak, hence forming an elemental avatar around. The chakra cloak will act as the first layer under the elemental-avatar armored layer, it will disappear once the elemental-avatar state has been destroyed or finished.

Ritual/Requirements/Restrictions/General Ability for all Elemental Avatars

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One of the circumstances being that the chakra cloak will need to obtain at least 50 chakra points which the user won't be able to inject on his own. For every attack launched or used in the battlefield, the chakra cloak will start becoming bigger, as though gaining power from it without having to absorb it, more like feeding from the intensity of attacks. Every S-rank feeds 20 chakra points, A-ranks feeds 15, B-ranks feed 10, C-ranks feed 5 with D-ranks feed 2.5 chakra points. It won't make a difference if the chakra cloak gains more than what it needs to enter elemental avatar state, although if the user does not transform before it gets a 100 chakra points, the user will be incinerated alive inside his own chakra cloak.

Requires at least a turn after activation to enter Avatar state. E.g, the user activates chakra cloak in turn 1 and uses two S-ranks to obtain 50 chakra points, the user will still not be able to enter Avatar state in turn one so with this, the user has to be careful to what he uses in turn 1 unless he wants to be killed when the enemy's turn comes

Each elemental avatar may only be able to use the element that he or she is based off. No exceptions can be made. Elemental avatars can only be destroyed after being hit by any forbidden rank technique two times or an S-rank of its elemental weakness four times with the rest being neutral, five S-ranks. Elemental avatars do not take damage for their respective element below Forbidden Ranked but this is negated once being hit by three S-ranks of its respective elements. Other elements will still be able to hurt the elemental avatar.


This part is unacceptable. You're making yourself invincible as you could run toward your enemy and slay him without any opposition. Everything he would shoot at you would be blocked by your avatar. If you don't HEAVILY restrict it, I will ban this jutsu next time it's submitted.

User's movement speed has decreased a rank, making taijutsu being hard to perform along with the Elemental Avatar not being able to use Genjutsu nor is it vulnerable to it since its a manifestation of the user's elemental chakra in solid form.

No reference to the rank (it's a direct reference to the speed chart).

This technique is only able to be performed once per battle and if the elemental avatar is destroyed in battle, the user may not perform anymore of the element that the user was in for two whole turns. E.g, the earth avatar was destroyed, the user will now not be able to perform earth techniques for two whole turns.

I'll post this here since this seem to be your drawback section. You have waaaay too many abilities for the drawbacks you put there. Please find something else to add.

Two times per battle, the elemental-avatar body is able to release a strong S-rank elemental beam of their respective element that doesn't cover a wide range but pierces badly. After second usage, the user would have to wait a turn to recharge and start shooting again and the cycle goes on. Its full power can only be accessed up to mid-range, it reduces a rank when in long-range.

I don't get it, you say you're able to shoot two beam per match, yet you say after the second turn you have to wait 1 turn before shooting again? Honestly, take all that part off. You have enough abilities already with each of your Avatar. You can make it to something different, but no higher then B-rank.

Once per battle, the elemental avatar is able to concentrate it's entire life-force around it's body and release a humongous elemental wave of their respective element, similar to that of Atsugai leveling the power of a Forbidden rank technique. Once used, the elemental avatar will fade away with effects from paragraph five being in effect. The chakra cloak will also ruin away and cannot be recovered for the entire battle. Its full power can only be accessed up to mid-range, it reduces a rank when in long-range.

Take all of that paragraph away. You could basically use it in the end of your six turns and walk away with a full usage of your avatar. Even if you don't do that, this parts make your avatar OP and is an automatic decline.

Lasts for six turns before it fades away if not destroyed

make it 4

Can only be used or taught by -Yusuke-

Fire

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The fire element allows the user to summon the fire-elemental avatar. With this, the user's fire jutsus have increased a rank and takes one less handseal in order to be performed. The avatar body which the user possesses also wields a javelin and round shield, shown in the picture above, with both tied behind its back with the shield over the spear. The user may not use any other elemental-based techniques other than fire while in this state. Once per battle, this avatar is capable of absorbing a wind technique through his shield in order to increase the damage of a single fire attack, one rank higher than it originally was.​

Make the increase rank for only A-rank and under.
For the second thing I put in bold, same thing, make it an increase for A-rank and under.

Water

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The water element allows the user to summon the water-elemental avatar. With this, the user's water jutsus have increased a rank and takes one less handseal in order to be performed. The avatar body which the user possesses also wields a large hammer which can be strapped onto the avatar's side and kraken shell on its back. The user may not use any other elemental-based techniques other than water while in this state. Once per battle, this avatar is capable of calling forth a single lightning strike onto the users back from the sky conditionally if the whether has been altered to be raining. The Kraken shell will start crackling with electricity and the avatar would be able to merge and enhance the destructive power of a single water attack, one rank higher than it originally was.​

Same as above for your "rank increasing". Also, mixing lightning in this wouldn't make it 1 rank higher, it would simply create an elemental combination.

Earth

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The earth element allows the user to summon the earth-elemental avatar. With this, the user's earth jutsus have increased a rank and takes one less handseal in order to be performed. The avatar body which the user possesses somewhat resembles a body of a mechanical, weapon-loaded robot with a really broad shoulder. The user may not use any other elemental-based techniques other than earth while in this state. Once per battle, this avatar is capable of compressing earth so hard and delicately in its shoulder to form a type of earth, stronger than the unaltered earth in the ground. The avatar would be able to enhance the destructive power of a single launched earth technique, one rank higher than it originally was.​

Same as for the fire.

Lightning

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The lightning element allows the user to summon the lightning-elemental avatar. With this, the user's lightning jutsus have increased a rank and takes one less handseal in order to be performed. The avatar body which the user possesses wields a long yellow staff decorated with magical charms at the top. The user may not use any other elemental-based techniques other than lightning while in this state. Once per battle, this avatar is capable of calling forth a lightning bolt from the sky conditionally if the weather has been altered to be raining. The concept is just like how it is for chidori to control Kirin. The lightning bolt will only be directed into the user's long staff, and with that, the next performed lightning jutsu by the user will have its destructive power enhanced, a rank higher than it originally was.​

Same as above for the ranks.

Wind

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The wind element allows the user to summon the wind-elementl avatar. With this, the user's wind jutsus have increased a rank and takes one less handseal in order to be performed. The avatar body which the user possesses does not have an ordinary right hand but a one that is able to partially disassemble itself to show what it appears to be a cannon. The user may not use any other elemental-based techniques other than wind while in this state. Once per battle, this avatar is capable of sucking up surrounding wind into its hand cannon, compressing it inside the arm causing high pressure. With this, the user is able to increase the destructive power of a single wind jutsu, a rank higher than it originally was.​

Same as above.


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