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The Legendary Sage of Konoha Series, All Previous Chapters [In Chronological Reading Order]:

The Legendary Sage of Konoha;

[1]

[2]

[3]

[4]

[5]

[6]

--->
Sasuke Chronicles;

[7]

--->
[8]

[9]

[10]

[11]

[12]

[13]

--->
Kakashi Chronicles;

[14]

[15]

--->
[16]

--->
[17]

[18]

[19]

[20]

--->
[21]

The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns;

[22]

[23]

[24]

[25]

[26]

[27]

[28]

[29]

[30]

[31]

The Legendary Sage of Konoha Returns, Chapter 11;
Friends, now Enemies:​

Suigetsu: You'll have to do whatever you feel is right... Me on the other hand, have to do what I need to do, even if that means destroying you!!

Sasuke: Suigetsu... You've been poisoned by Kabuto and his foul tongue... This is my final warning, put down your sword and come peacefully, and I might be able to convince the other to go easy on you, as I was spared in the pa-...

Suigetsu: You don't get it do you...

Sasuke: ??

Suigetsu: Nothing you say or do can stray me from this path... I've already made up my mind, and I'm suggesting you do the same!

Pulling his sword backwards, dragging it along the ground at rapid speed, Suigetsu, who headed straight towards Sasuke, then jumped up in the air and sliced at him. Sasuke brought up his Susanoo sword to parry, as a large shockwave appeared between them, slowly breaking into Sasuke's Susanoo.

Sasuke: !!

*Crash*

Forcing Sasuke to jump back, Suigetsu then followed up as the tip of his sword cracked open and a energy-like ball came out of it, firing at Sasuke at great speed.

Suigetsu: Take this!

Sasuke: Shit!!

A large explosion occurred as a thick smokescreen appeared between them.

Suigetsu: Haha, you see?! This is what you get for underestimating me! There is no room for sympathy... no room for feelings in this war! You'll have to under-... !!

As the smokescreen slowly lifted, an unexpected view met Suigetsu as Sasuke was holding two legendary weapons... two weapons that Suigetsu had no idea were in his possession.

Suigetsu: It can't be?!

Sasuke: I already told you... Go down the path you are going now, and there will and shall not be any return! Give up on your foolish dream Suigetsu, you can't win this battle!

Standing in front of him, Suigetsu witnessed as Sasuke got back in battle position, but this time, his Susanoo was a lot bigger, and it held the Yata Mirror and the Sword of Totsuka...

Suigetsu: Impossible, how did you get-...?!

Sasuke: A gift Itachi left me during our last encounter, though I didn't realize it at first, *Smirk.*

Suigetsu: Well this certainly gives me a challenge, huh... But it won't change a thing, I will defeat you for sure, Sasuke-Kun! You see, this sword holds the power of all of the seven legendary swords of the Mist!

Sasuke: ...

Suigetsu: It has the regeneration skill of the Kubikiribōchō (Executioner's Blade), the chakra eating ability of the Samehada (Shark Skin), the sharpness and the piercing ability of the Nuibari (Sewing Needle), the power to break through any and all defenses of the Kabutowari (Helmet Splitter), the explosion ability of the Shibuki (Splash), the lightning element, the sharpness and the cutting ability of the Kiba (Fangs), and finally... the Hiramekarei (Twinsword), with the ability to store and emit the chakra of the wielder, and also being able to take upon and shape into any and all form the user so desires... In other words, the ultimate weapon; the Wrath Sword, Hellraiser!

Charging in at Sasuke once more, refusing to give up so easily, Suigetsu went straight for him at rapid speed, as Sasuke swung his Sword of Totsuka at him, attempting to seal him away.

Sasuke: !!

But to his surprise, Suigetsu didn't dodge, but parried instead, something which in theory shouldn't be possible.

Suigetsu: I already told you, this is not an ordinary weapon!

Breaking through Sasuke's attack, Suigetsu jumped up in the air and slashed his sword at him. Sasuke managed to put up his Yata Mirror just in time to defend, as a large explosion occurred between them, sending them both flying on their backs.

Suigetsu: Ugh!

Sasuke: Damn...

Standing back on their feet, the two of them stared intensely at each other, as Suigetsu continued.

Suigetsu: Not bad Sasuke, but with the sharingan of yours, you should have been able to spot this!

Suigetsu then quickly performed a hand-seal as he shouted out;

Suigetsu: Explode!

Sasuke: ?!

As he said, an explosion tag, stuck to Sasuke's Susanoo, suddenly went off as a large explosion occurred.

Suigetsu: Got you...

Sasuke: Not at all!

Suigetsu: What?!

Appearing right beside him, Sasuke slashed his Sword of Totsuka at him as Suigetsu managed to put up a guard just in time, but due to the force of Sasuke's attack, Suigetsu went blasting away, hitting the wall closest to him and landing with his face first to the ground.

Suigetsu: Ugh!!!

Sasuke: *Pant* You didn't see that coming, did you...

Suigetsu: Ahh... *Pant* Damn you, you and your arrogance... How did you?

Pointing at his eyes, Sasuke went on to explain.

Sasuke: The ability to slow down time... That is the power of the Eternal Mangekyo Sharingan.

Suigetsu: !!

Sasuke: The second I saw the explosion tag, I managed to pull it off and plant it on the ground instead, enabling me to get some space before the explosion went off.

Suigetsu: Such a technique does not exist! Impossible...

Sasuke: Huh, it does now, *Smirk.*

Suigetsu: Heh, even so, such a technique surly comes with a high risk or a drawback... Doesn't matter, I will still win this fig-...?! Shit!!

Before he managed to finish his sentence, Suigetsu was suddenly lit on fire as Sasuke had fired up an Amaterasu at him.

Suigetsu (In Thoughts): 'The Samehada's absorbing ability, I'm not able to absorb Amaterasu in this form??... Very well...'

Quickly jumping backwards, away from the wall, Suigetsu proceeded to rip his black cloak off and tossed it on the ground as it continued to burn.

Suigetsu: You're really serious this time, aren't you. Very well, no more chit-chat then...

Sasuke: ...

Smashing his hand towards the ground, Suigetsu began to poor massive sources of water into it, as the water began to fill the area. He then pulled the arm out of the hole he created, causing some rocks to fly in different directions, before forming some hand-seals.

Suigetsu: Water Release: Demon Fish!

Covering himself in a giant wave of water, in the shape of a demon-like fish, Suigetsu then launched himself at Sasuke with his sword in hand.

Suigetsu: Sasuke!!

Moving faster than before, Suigetsu crashed right into him as Sasuke tried to jump away, but to no vain, as he was caught in the wave, cutting off his air supply in the progress. A vicious fight with several sword clashes exchanged between them, as Suigetsu began to get the upper-hand while Sasuke began to run out of air. Trying to move away from Suigetsu to get out of the wave, Sasuke pushed backwards, but Suigetsu quickly followed as the wave moved with him.

Suigetsu: Not getting away this time, it's over!

Swinging his sword several times at Sasuke, Suigetsu managed to break through his guard as his sword sent off a fierce explosion the moment it touched Sasuke's Susanoo, sending him flying into the wall, still trapped in the wave. Suigetsu then moved in as he grabbed Sasuke by the throat and smashed his head into the wall.

Sasuke: *Blub... Blub... Blub.*

Suigetsu: This is my dream, my win, and you can't stop it from happening, you hear me Sasuke!

Smashing his head another time into the wall, Sasuke's Susanoo turned off as he began to fall unconscious. In response to this, Suigetsu canceled his technique, as Sasuke fell to the ground, landing on his back. Suigetsu quickly seated himself on top of him and grabbed a hold of his jacket, dragging him close to him.

Suigetsu: You always were an arrogant bastard, look what happens when you mess with me?! Huh?!

Shaking him back and forth to get a response, Sasuke suddenly coughed up some water as Suigetsu let go off him and rose to his feet in the progress. As Sasuke finally regained consciousness of were he was, he looked up, only to find Suigetsu pointing his sword at him. His eyes, were back to normal...

Sasuke: ...

Suigetsu: Any last words??

Sasuke: ...

Suigetsu: Very well then!

Sasuke: !!

The tip of the sword opened up as it fired a projectile right at Sasuke, and piercing through his chest in the process.

Sasuke: Ugh!!

Suigetsu: It's over... I won! I beat you Sasuke, victory is mi-...??

As he looked down upon Sasuke's dead body, it suddenly stared vaporizing, as if melting, as all that was left was black goo. It was then that Suigetsu realized, that he had not won after all.

Suigetsu: !!

As behind him, two large sharingan appeared, as the whole room started to change into pitch black environment, with a hint of red light, created by the sharingan. The water on the floor turned to blood, as Suigetsu realized that he had got himself trapped in a-...

Suigetsu: Genjutsu?!

A sign of un-comfort appeared on his face, as he slowly turned around, only to get a long katana pierced right through him.

Suigetsu: Ugh!!

Starting to cough up blood, another long katana then pierced through him from the side, as several other katanas followed up from all directions, restraining him to the ground. A foul cry of pain was heard through him as Sasuke appeared in front of him.

Suigetsu: If this... ugh... was real, I would have been dead by now... Ugh, you bastard!

Sasuke: Oh, but I never wanted you dead in the first place... And this is as real as it gets..

Reaching his hand out to Suigetsu's jaw, Sasuke lifted his head up as their eyes met.

Sasuke: You always were too over-confident...

Suigetsu: Ugh... How... When??

Sasuke: The moment Naruto left...

Suigetsu: What?!

Sasuke: After Naruto passed by you and into the next chamber, you looked him straight into his eyes, before you turned your attention back to me.

Suigetsu: Naruto... But... I never saw you directly into your eyes to begin with, ugh... What has Naruto to do with it?!

Sasuke: As he leaped off, I emitted the projection of my Sharingan into his eyes to trap you, by transferring some chakra over to him by touching his forehead right before he left. In other words, my sharingan was reflected in his eyes as we were briefly linked up. So yeah, from the moment your eyes met, you were caught in my genjutsu...

Suigetsu: Is that even possible, ugh!

Sasuke: Heh, there are lot of things in this world, that the likes of you and Kabuto don't know of, Suigetsu.

Suigetsu: ...

Sasuke: This fight is over...

Suigetsu: No, I refuse to let you win like this, fight me fair you bas-... Ughaaaaaaaaaah, stooooop!

The several katanas pierced through Suigetsu's body, then started to slice and cut through him in all direction as Suigetsu screamed out in agony.

Sasuke: Your Hydration technique can't help you here... Just surrender already...

Suigetsu: Ughaaaaaaa.... NEVER!! Ughaaaaaahh...

Sasuke: Sigh, I'm not really the type to do torture, but if you won't accept the terms of surrender, you don't really give me much choice. This is my Tsukuyomi, and in here, we got all the time in the world.

Suigetsu: Damn you bastard, this is Itachi's technique! Since when did you become an expe-... Ughaaaaaaah!

Sasuke: Do you surrender?

Suigetsu: No!

Sasuke continued to twist, turn, slice and cut the katanas through Suigetsu's body; Suigetsu only managed to hold on due to share willpower.

Sasuke: I said, do you surrender?!

Suigetsu: No!! Stop it, ughaaaah!

As time went on in this timeless dimension, Suigetsu almost passed out due to the extensive pain brought upon him after what seemed like days of pain. As his head slowly fell towards his chest, as if falling unconscious, Sasuke stretched his hand out once more and lifted Suigetsu's head up and looked upon him.

Sasuke: I ask again, do you surrender??

Suigetsu: I... I-... Fine... You win, please stop, I can't take it anymore, please no more, I'm begging you.

Sasuke: ...

Suigetsu: I'm begging you, stooooop! Ughaaaaaah!!!!!

Sasuke: ...

Suigetsu: Sasuke!!!!

Sasuke: Very well...

As he said, the genjutsu ended and dark became light again. Sasuke and Suigetsu had stood completely still since Naruto left, and the moment Suigetsu came back to reality, he fell to the ground in pain as he barely managed to hold himself together.

Sasuke: Hmm... I still need some training. I wasn't able to pull it off within seconds; it seems like the genjutsu actually lasted for a couple of minutes, if not hours... No wonder why I feel so drained of Chakra. Brother Itachi, you truly were a genius after all, *Smirk.*

Sasuke began to approach Suigetsu, who was laying on the ground in front of him, when the barrier behind him suddenly collapsed and several shinobi came rushing in towards them. One of them leaped ahead of the others, whom stopped about ten or so yards away from him.

Kurotsuchi: Sasuke!

Sasuke: ... You guys huh...

Running in at him and throwing herself into his arms, the two began to make out as Shikamaru interrupted them.

Shikamaru: ... *Kremt* This means that it's only Kabuto left then...

Killerbee: Oh yeah! The alliance is kicking ass, we surely won with a lot of class!

Gaara: The war is not over yet Bee... And this must be-...

Jugo: Suigetsu?! So it was you after all, how could you do this, after all we've been through together?!

Suigetsu: *Smirk.*

Still unable to stand on his feet, Suigetsu bluntly laughed off Jugo's attempt to reason with his action as he forced himself up on his feet again.

Suigetsu: Sasuke... This fight... is still... not over!!

Charging in at him with the last strength he had, Suigetsu screamed out vigorously as he dragged his sword along the ground, causing tons of rocks and stones to fly in all directions as a large shockwave erupted from it.

Suigetsu: You will not destroy my dream!!!

Slashing at Sasuke with all of his remaining might, Sasuke then quickly pushed Kurotsuchi away from him, towards Shikamaru whom caught her from falling, as he turned on his Susanoo and blocked the attack with the Yata Mirror. As he did, Suigetsu's attack back-flashed, as he was sent off at a mighty force towards the wall, crashing into it, before landing with his face into the ground.

Sasuke: Stay back, I will finish this once and for all.

Konohamaru: Sasuke wait, let us do it together!

As Suigetsu turned around on his back, he saw Sasuke jumping in from above with his Susanoo deactivate and his katana charged with chidori in hand, just about to strike at him to finish the fight once and for all.

Suigetsu: !!

Kurotsuchi: Sasuke, don't do it! You're better than this! He's not worth it!

Sasuke: Ahhhhhhh!!!

As Sasuke was still lingering in the air, inches away from piercing his katana through Suigetsu, their eyes met as thoughts were exchanged between the two of them in the moment between life and death.

Suigetsu (In thoughts towards Sasuke): It was a great fight, for as long as it lasted, Sasuke-Kun, ugh... Thank you..

Sasuke: Nooooooo, damn you!

Suigetsu: ?!

Kurotsuchi: Sasuke?!

Sasuke: ...

Suigetsu: Why couldn't you do it?! Do it now you coward, give me the dignity to at least die in battle!

Instead of finishing Suigetsu off, Sasuke pierced his katana right into the ground beside Suigetsu's head, as Suigetsu started yelling at him for not having the guts to do it. Sasuke then got up to his feet as lightning charges still went through the katana in the ground.

Sasuke: Take him away.

Turning around, Sasuke started walking towards the rest, as two ally shinobi ran in from the sides behind him as they went to captivate Suigetsu. Just as they helped him up and were ready to put a Chakra-absorbing seal on his hands, Suigetsu quickly outmaneuvered both of them with his sword as he leaped off straight at Sasuke, aiming to catch him off guard from behind.

Suigetsu: Sasuuuuuuuke!!!!!

Sasuke: Humph...

His sword started flashing again and lit up with dark blue chakra, as he aimed to swing it right at Sasuke. As he did, Sasuke flicked his right index finger as a barely visible wire string, attached to his sword, dragged it towards him and right into his grip. Swinging around to the left in a blink of an eye, with the katana still infused with chidori in his hand, Sasuke swung his Katana upwards as he knocked the sword out of Suigetsu's hand, before swinging the katana around to the left again as he pierced it through Suigetsu's chest in a backward-stabbing motion.

Suigetsu: Ugh!... So you-... Had the guts after all... *Smirk.*

Landing with his jaw on Sasuke's left shoulder, Suigetsu then started to cough up blood as he slowly began to fall towards the ground, as Sasuke turned around and pulled the katana out of him. It was still lightning up due to the chidori release, as he went on and holstered it. Suigetsu fell to his knees as he his hands slid down Sasuke's chest, before he landed on the ground and succumbed to his wounds.

Sasuke: ...

Jugo: Damn... Suigetsu, you really...

Shikamaru: He had to try and kill you, Sasuke, it was the only way he knew you would finish him off... He didn't want to get captured alive it seems, how troublesome.

Jiraiya: Hey look, the corridor to the next chamber isn't that long, we can actually see my dad up ahead!

Hinata: ?!

Running over to the barrier blocking their path, Jiraiya spotted Naruto in the far distance, facing off against Kabuto and some Edo Tensei.

Sasuke: He's too far out of reach for him to hear you...

Jiraiya: But still, he's right there...

Hinata: Jiraiya...

Sasuke: So why isn't this barrier broken yet? Suigetsu is defeated, that should have-...

Shikamaru: It doesn't work that way... Defeating the opponent you faced off with actually destroyed the barrier behind you. It has done the same previously when Gaara and Killerbee also stood victorious.

Sasuke: What does that mean?

Konohamaru: It means that in order for us to reach Naruto, he will have to find a way to either take this barrier down, or defeat Kabuto.

Sasuke: Damn...

Hinata: We're so close too, if anything were to happen to him now, I'd-...

Sakura: Calm down Hinata, I'm sure he'll overcome this challenge.

As more and more people walked over to the barrier, they soon realized that Naruto wasn't just fighting any Edo Tensei, but the previous Hokages themselves, as well as other fierce opponents. A short discussion broke out among them as Shikamaru tried reasoning with Jiraiya.

Jiraiya: Damn it all, there must be a way we can help him out, right Shikamaru?!

Shikamaru: All we can do for now is to give our latest report to the head-quarter... Ino, if you would be so kind?

Ino: Right.

Gaara: Come on Naruto, if you're able to defeat Kabuto now, we can finally bring on true peace like you've talked about..

Ino: This is... It can't be?!

Shikamaru: !! Ino, what is it??

Ino: Just as I was about to make contact, my father contacted me. The head-quarter... It has been attacked!

Everybody: What?!

Gaara: What do you mean by attacked?!

Ino: I-... it was very brief, but they request assistance at once. A clone of Kabuto has summoned eight of the previous kages, and things look very bad!

Sasuke: Then we need to act fast! We need to assist them at once!

Killerbee: How dare that scum attack us like that, that tricky little bat!

Gaara: Are you sure you'll be able to put up another fight Sasuke, if not, it might be best if we-...

Sasuke: No I'm fine, but we need to go now. Time is of the essence.

Gaara: Right. Okay, Killerbee, Sasuke; the three of us will take a larger part of the shinobi forces stationed here, and go help them out, but we need someone in charge here... Shikamaru, Konohamaru and Kankuro; can you take charge of things here??

Shikamaru: Right.

Kankuro: Yeah sure, no problem brother.

Konohamaru: Yep, you can count on us.

Sasuke: Alright, then let's go!

After dividing their forces, Sasuke, Gaara and Killerbee were ready to move out as they ran off in the direction they previously came from. Neji, Shino, Kiba, Tenten, Ao, Baki, Darui, Shee, Gai, Sakura, Jiraiya, Temari, Karui, Omoi and Jugo, were only a few of the people accompanying them. Those who stayed behind to act as reinforcement, in case Naruto managed to find a way to get the barrier that stood in between them down, were Shikamaru, Konohamaru, Kankuro, Ino, Choji, Sai, Hinata, Rock Lee, Kurotsuchi, Akatsuchi, and many more.

*Sasuke's fight comes to a surprisingly quick end, but more problems arises!!*​

~ End Chapter 11.​

* With Suigetsu out of the way, another battle comes to an end. But more battles still remains... Naruto vs the Eight Edo Tensei, Next Time! *


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Fun Fact and Author's Note:

1: Going from my biggest chapter in chapter 10, to my shortest chapter since chapter 3 (of this sequel), with chapter 11, actually feels good to say the least. I think I could have made this fight so much longer, but at the same time, producing several gigantic chapters after each other often becomes tiring, both for myself and for the reader (I presume). And I think I managed to cover what I wanted to have in this battle, even if it was a bit shorter than usual for my standards. I personally like the "short and epic" feel for some battles, rather than having major battles all over the place (trust me, Naruto's fight is going to last for a long time indeed). Good news is, Chapter 12-16 are already done (at least at the rough stage - excluding polishing and finalization)!

2: Two chapters in row without Naruto appearing... I guess that just show how much I have going on at the same time in my story xD But fear not, the next one will be all about his fight.

3: Expect shorter chapters from me from now on, at least until chapter 17 arrives. Regarding chapter 15 and 16, I don't think I've written such short chapters since I first started out as a FF writer. On the bright side though, I might do quick releases for awhile now. And chapter 12-14 is a bit bigger than this chapter too. Something new that you should keep your eyes on, is the "status bar" on the left among my statistic, post count, avatar and other things. Here I will post updates from now on regarding current statuses on next chapters, as well as future releases. It will be a short, simple and quick way to get out the message, so be sure to keep an eye on it. My status will be on every post I post, as well as on my profile, in case you wonder.

4: I did not realize this when I released Chapter 10, but at the time I did, it had already been a year since I started out on this sequel, and almost three years since I began this series... Time really flies by fast indeed ^_^
I don't really have much more else to say, other than the fact that I hope you enjoyed this one as well, even if it was shorter than my latest releases.
Regarding Chapter 12, I'm not sure when I'll release it yet, but some time soon! Thumbs up if you enjoyed this chapter, any comments will be appreciated, and until next time people, have an awesome day ;)
 
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Well done. Another fantastic chapter from the great Michael92. Speaking of which, are you entering next contest?
Thanks ^_^ Coming from a reader I did not know I had means a lot =)
Regarding your question, I still need to release Chapter 12 to have enough new chapters to participate again. So no, I doubt it (even if I release chapter 12 in time). I'm aiming for May's contest though ;)
 

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Heh, heh, finally Sasuke's battle is finished, as well! I think I like the fact that this chapter focused solely on that rather than going all around the place and giving us updates on the other fights, as well :p Next chapter is all about Naruto? YES, PLEASE! :D I can't wait for that now xd
 

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Heh, heh, finally Sasuke's battle is finished, as well! I think I like the fact that this chapter focused solely on that rather than going all around the place and giving us updates on the other fights, as well :p Next chapter is all about Naruto? YES, PLEASE! :D I can't wait for that now xd
Yeah, I figured it would be a nice touch to focus on one battle at a time for a time to come ;)
Yep, Naruto is next up! =) Thanks for reading my friend, means a lot :D
 

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Thanks ^_^ Coming from a reader I did not know I had means a lot =)
Regarding your question, I still need to release Chapter 12 to have enough new chapters to participate again. So no, I doubt it (even if I release chapter 12 in time). I'm aiming for May's contest though ;)
No problem, your series was one of the first I read. Okay, so I know when not to enter. Do we need new chapters, or can I add two previous with one new? I have several parts to each chapter, so I was just wondering.
 

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No problem, your series was one of the first I read. Okay, so I know when not to enter. Do we need new chapters, or can I add two previous with one new? I have several parts to each chapter, so I was just wondering.
Haha, you can still beat me though ;) And yes you can join with three same chapters, granted that it's been three months since last time you joined with them, and that you have not placed top three with them before.
 

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Haha, you can still beat me though ;) And yes you can join with three same chapters, granted that it's been three months since last time you joined with them, and that you have not placed top three with them before.
I don't know, you won the last one you entered by what, 10 votes? I meant I have a new chapter, so could I add it to two others this month that I entered last month and didn't win.
 

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Shortest chapter ever from you :p
There is nothing much in this chapter,just one fight and that's all.....so dont know what to write in review....
Fight scene is nice as usual but it could be more complex. Didnt expect that suigetsu was in genjutsu from start. I thought sasuke use genjutsu here "The tip of the sword opened up as it fired a projectile right at Sasuke, and piercing through his chest in the process." but still fight was nice,time control power,itachi's gifts and suigetsu's death all part are nice. I hope you will make sasuke using these power in reality too(not in genjutsu only).
Rest talking part is like "making plot/stage for next chapter". Nice work once again,keep it up bro;)
Cant wait 2 see naruto vs Team Edo Konoha:p so release it asap ;)
 

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Shortest chapter ever from you :p
There is nothing much in this chapter,just one fight and that's all.....so dont know what to write in review....
Fight scene is nice as usual but it could be more complex. Didnt expect that suigetsu was in genjutsu from start. I thought sasuke use genjutsu here "The tip of the sword opened up as it fired a projectile right at Sasuke, and piercing through his chest in the process." but still fight was nice,time control power,itachi's gifts and suigetsu's death all part are nice. I hope you will make sasuke using these power in reality too(not in genjutsu only).
Rest talking part is like "making plot/stage for next chapter". Nice work once again,keep it up bro;)
Cant wait 2 see naruto vs Team Edo Konoha:p so release it asap ;)
I had that impression too, but looking back on my original story, this is actually a normal length chapter :p Yeah, I guess I really kicked it a notch regarding length on chapters from Chapter 14 of the original, and onwards. I wrote like half this when I first began, but it still felt long even back then xD

Yeah, I thought that it would really be a surprise moment for the readers, I even surprised myself with that xD I didn't want to make Suigetsu look weak, but at the same time, I had to make Sasuke look strong, and that he has become much wiser throughout the years, so in the end, I felt that it was the right way to go, and I hope my readers think so as well ^_^

Yep, they surely are part of his real powers ;) But I'm not sure if I'll get the chance to display them much for the remaining part of my FF...

Hehe, glad to hear that you liked it, knowing how you practically demand long chapters from me :p And no worries, like I said earlier, I'll try to focus on faster releases for a while now, and Chapter 12 should be up very soon. If everything goes as planned, I might release it by tomorrow or the day after. You'll be the first to know my friend ;)

Edit: New Chapter Up!!
 
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Sorry for the delay :p

So, a short chapter eh? Loved it xd
Though I prefer long chapters from you, this one was very good. You did justice to Sasuke by making him defeat Suigetsu with genjutsu. Believe me, it wouldn't have been that good, if he were defeated by some shi*ty susanoo or the totsuka sword. Could feel more closer to Itachi's style where, at the end of the show you realise it was all genjutsu from the start lol. Awesome.

You did include narration in here. And I felt the balance with dialogues and details were near perfect.
Also, the dialogues were very good. It totally described the character and the situation. Great job.

In the end, the thing that you did with the wires....too sasukeish. I can't think of a person who uses wires better than Sasuke. Excellent.

Totally, a very good chapter. Kudos.
 

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Sorry for the delay :p

So, a short chapter eh? Loved it xd
Though I prefer long chapters from you, this one was very good. You did justice to Sasuke by making him defeat Suigetsu with genjutsu. Believe me, it wouldn't have been that good, if he were defeated by some shi*ty susanoo or the totsuka sword. Could feel more closer to Itachi's style where, at the end of the show you realise it was all genjutsu from the start lol. Awesome.

You did include narration in here. And I felt the balance with dialogues and details were near perfect.
Also, the dialogues were very good. It totally described the character and the situation. Great job.

In the end, the thing that you did with the wires....too sasukeish. I can't think of a person who uses wires better than Sasuke. Excellent.

Totally, a very good chapter. Kudos.
Thanks mate, awesome review ^_^ Late is better than never ;)
I'll be seeing you on the next chapter then =P
 

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This chapter was perfect.
I mean in terms of coming from such a long chapter to a short one.
Suigetsu being in a genjutsu was a surprise for me as well and how Sasuke caught him in the genjutsu was the biggest of the surprises.

As +Kyon+ said, the battle was simple. I didn't expect much from Suigetsu after all. All he really has going for him is his ego.

On to chapter 12. :)
 
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This chapter was perfect.
I mean in terms of coming from such a long chapter to a short one.
Suigetsu being in a genjutsu was a surprise for me as well and how Sasuke caught him in the genjutsu was the biggest of the surprises.

As +Kyon+ said, the battle was simple. I didn't expect much from Suigetsu after all. All he really has going for him is his ego.

On to chapter 12. :)
You think? O__o I mean, I liked it myself, but I think it could have been better if I extended it. I must say that even though I do like this one, I'm more excited about the chapters to come really, but thank you so much, means a lot ^^

Yeah, I kind of had to think of a way to make it short, surprising and epic at the same time, without powering down Suigetsu. This was the only way I saw it fitting to end this fast, by using Sasuke's brilliance to win the battle.

I'll check ;)
 
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