[Predictions] NARUTO MANGA 633 PREDICTION [by ahhimane]

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MANGA 633 : CHECKMATE!

SAKURA : This time.... we're doing this together!! [ Lady Tsunade...It seems that finally I could catch up with them ]
SASUKE : You still talk too much...Sakura(dashes on the right)
NARUTO : Sakura, I'm listening to you! (dashes to the left)
(Sakura grins and dashes forward)
(Minions attacking from the front)
MINIONS : Guohhhh!!!
(axe like weapons grows on their arms)
(Sakura leaps forward and kicks on one of the minion's face)
(Minion falls and slides on the ground in Juubi's direction while Sakura's leg is still intact)
(some of the approaching minions turns back to attack Sakura)
(Some of the incoming minion attack Sakura from the front)
(Still holding the minion on the ground, Sakura punches hard in minion's gut attacking from the front)
(Simultaneously, some of the minions jumps in air to attack Sakura from above while she's smashing the minion which was on the ground)
ROCK LEE : Leaf Hurricane!!!
SAKURA : ?!!
(Lee saves Sakura from the minion attacking from above)
ROCK LEE : (lands near Sakura) Are you alright? Sakura?
SAKURA : Thank you, (smiles) Lee.
ROCK LEE : [ She looks beautiful with that mark on her forehead. ]
SAKURA : You said something?
ROCK LEE : (turns red) N...No nothing. Take...take care, Sakura (heads ahead)
SAKURA : Yes! (tightens her fist) Shanaaarro!!(dashes ahead)
(as Sakura and Lee moves Ino comes into picture)
INO : (sits on knees and makes a handsign) Choji!! Shikamaru!!
CHOJI : Ready!! (defending her from back)
SHIKAMARU : Got you!! (runs ahead and makes handsigns) (stops)
SHIKAMARU : Shadow Possession Jutsu!!
SFX : ZOOOOOP!!
SFX : GRAB!!

(shadow stretches out and grabs three minions)
SHIKAMARU : Now Ino!!
INO : Mind Transfer Jutsu!!
(transfers her mind into those three captured)
(Ino falls and is handled by Choji)
(the three pawns turns to other minions and attacks them)
(some of the minions pass through the pawns and approaches Ino-Shika-Cho)
MINIONS : Grahhhhh!!!
SHIKAMARU : ?!! (makes handsigns) Shadow Stitching Jutsu!! (pierces two of the minions) There are too many of them!
CHOJI : (holding Ino in one arm) Partial Expansion Jutsu!! (expands his other arm) Haaaaaaa!!
(punches and clears one full row of the attacking minions)
MINIONS : Grahhhh!!! (still charging forward)
KIBA : Fang Over Fang!!
(Kiba and Akamaru comes from behind and then separates thus Ino-Shika-Cho and destroys the minions ahead of them)
KIBA : (rolling in mid air in slow motion) Hey Choji!! Hold your horses!! Lets go Akamaru!! (starts rolling fast again and infiltrates into the minions' crowd)
HINATA : Byakugan!!
SFX : GROW..

HINATA : (positions her both arms near her waist and gathers chakra) TWIN LION FIST!! (two lion faced chakra forms on her fists) [ Everyone is doing well... ] Haaahhhh!! (dashes into the crowd)
(kills whoever comes into her range mercilessly with an image of dying Neji in the background)
(some of the minions dodges her fist and attacks her from the blindspot)
MINIONS : GRAAAAAGGGGHHH!!!! (posed in attack position)
HINATA : ?!! (readily changes the attack into....)
(crosses her hands overlapping each other in opposite directions)
(wind blows heavily on the minions)
HINATA : Air Barrier Palm!!!
(hair flowing in the air because of heavy wind velocity)
(throws away the surrounding minions and takes an offensive position once again)
HINATA : (looking at Naruto fighting) [ Thank You...Neji Nii san ] (a smile on her face)
SHINO : (engages in a physical combat while covering his opponent with his bugs) Insect Sphere!!
(The bugs covers the minions in Shino's way and restricts their movement by absorbing their charka)
SHINO : [ I cannot wait for one to get completely annihilated. I must move ahead. ]
(holds a kunai in hand)
(his jacket is floating in the air with his fast movements)
(as he moves ahead, some of the minions in the backgorund are shown taken over by Shino's bugs)

(Naruto runs into the crowd while waving his arms in air at the back)
(Chakra hands emerges and are extended surrounding the minions' crowd left behind)
(Several branching hands emerges out from the extended hands grabbing the minions intact with the main chakra arms)
(Naruto then moves his arms from back to the sides holding the bunch of minions intact)
(Another chakra arm emerges out from Naruto's chest in front extending about six to seven feets ahead)
SFX : SPIRALLING!!!
(A huge Rasengan are formed on the extended arm in the front)
NARUTO : Taste this!!
(With all his might he pulls his both arms from side to the front and smashes the minions grabbed by his chakra arms onto the huge rasengan)
NARUTO : RasenKyuugan!!!
(The victims of the spiraling attack gets absorbed since they are made out of chakra)
SFX : ABSORB!!
SASUKE : (EMS active) (makes handsigns) (jumps in the air and is above in the middle of the attacking minions and rotates his body) Fire Style : Phoenix Flower Jutsu!!
(Several phoenix flowers spreads in the area as Sasuke rotates his body in the air)
(Before the attack hits anyone, Sasuke lits most of them with Amaterasu flames)
(Lands on the ground ahead of the location and cuts the other minions with his lightning blade by extending and swinging it from left to right)
GAI : (in sixth gate) Morning Peacock!!
DARUI : Black Panther!!
SFX : ROAR!!!

AKATSUCHI : EARTH STYLE : GIANT GOLEM!!
(As the jutsu gets activated, two rocky palm of the golem's hands emerges out from the ground and grabs the minions, then forms completely and smashes them like insects)
SARUTOBI CLAN SHINOBIS : Fire Style : Burning Ash!!
(Several other shinobis are shown attacking the minions while some gets killed by the hands of minions)
SFX : CUT!! PIERCE!!! PIERCE!!
SHINOBIS : (dying by piercing) Gyahhh!!
SHINOBIS : Ahhhh!! (gets cut by the minion) ..... (his upper body falls apart)

???? : (puts the bishop against the king) Check and Mate!
HASHIRAMA CLONE : Damn!! you always win against me!!
(Madara and Hashirama's clone is shown playing Shogi on the cliff)
MADARA : You still don't know how to strategize a battle to win it.
(Suddenly the dust from the chaos disturbs their game and the wooden made shogi pieces are thrown away)
MADARA : This battle is also near to check and mate.(smirk)
HASHIRAMA CLONE : .....(then smirks)
(The three huge pawns manipulated by Ino's Mind transfer starts smashing the minions in their way)
(One of the enemy pinion cuts through one of the pawn's arm)
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INO : Arghhh!!
]
SHIKAMARU : (looking at Ino's bleeding arm) Ino! She's going all out. (looking in the crowd of minions and then again at Ino)
CHOJI : (looking at the crowd)?!! That's ?!
SHIKAMARU : (looks at Choji) Hmm? (turns) ?!!
SHINOBIS : Thats?!! That's just like...
HASHIRAMA CLONES : (standing at the four sides of the barrier) They are using Bijuudama?!! Everyone get the hell out from there. Hurry up!!
(All the incoming minions starts preparing Bijuudamas by opening their mouth wide open)
NARUTO/SASUKE/SAKURA : ?!!
KIBA/HINATA/SHINO : ?!!
MINATO/HIRUZEN/TOBIRAMA : ?!!
(Shinobis are shown running out from the barrier creating a chaos)
HASHIRAMA CLONES : (standing at the four sides of the barrier) Hurry up!!
HASHIRAMA CLONE : That damn Juubi pulled a big one to lure everyone of us.
MADARA : I told you. (smirks) Check and..... Mate
SFX : ZOOOOOOOOOM!!
(Suddenly three attacks of Bijuudama in the form of beams emerges out from the vicinity of the minions' crowd's centre)
SFX : TURN.
(The beams rotate about their origin destroying all the minions)
(The Bijuudamas formed by the minions explodes at their respective positions)
HASHIRAMA : (makes handsigns) Great Wooden Dome!!
(A huge dome covers the opening of the seal thus protecting the shinobis)
CHOJI : ?!! (holding Ino in his arms) Shikamaru?
SHIKAMARU : (turns to Choji) ?!!
(kneels down)
(moves his hand over the skin)
SHIKAMARU : [ That's...cold ] (moves his hand over Ino's face)... No..(his eye pupil starts shaking)...Its..cold..Why is she cold?(tears rolls down his eyes) Why the hell is so cold?!!!
CHOJI : C..cold?!! (looks at Ino) (eyes full of tears)
SFX : BOOOOOOOOOOOOM!!!
SHIKAMARU : (remembers the three way beam)That...That wasn't in our plan. (turns to the blast prevented by the wooden wall) (screams with a crying face)Ino!!!!!!!!!!
(His scream falls on deaf ears because of the blast)
HASHIRAMA CLONE : (wind brushes through his hair) (to Madara) No matter what....The King will always win.

(A flower of hope withers once again to save the King!!)
 

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couldn't understand the end,but it was good..
btw it should have been sasuke protecting them all with susano,to earn some trust,instead of hashirama.
 

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MANGA 633 : CHECKMATE!

SAKURA : This time.... we're doing this together!! [ Lady Tsunade...It seems that finally I could catch up with them ]
SASUKE : You still talk too much...Sakura(dashes on the right)
NARUTO : Sakura, I'm listening to you! (dashes to the left)
(Sakura grins and dashes forward)
(Minions attacking from the front)
MINIONS : Guohhhh!!!
(axe like weapons grows on their arms)
(Sakura leaps forward and kicks on one of the minion's face)
(Minion falls and slides on the ground in Juubi's direction while Sakura's leg is still intact)
(some of the approaching minions turns back to attack Sakura)
(Some of the incoming minion attack Sakura from the front)
(Still holding the minion on the ground, Sakura punches hard in minion's gut attacking from the front)
(Simultaneously, some of the minions jumps in air to attack Sakura from above while she's smashing the minion which was on the ground)
ROCK LEE : Leaf Hurricane!!!
SAKURA : ?!!
(Lee saves Sakura from the minion attacking from above)
ROCK LEE : (lands near Sakura) Are you alright? Sakura?
SAKURA : Thank you, (smiles) Lee.
ROCK LEE : [ She looks beautiful with that mark on her forehead. ]
SAKURA : You said something?
ROCK LEE : (turns red) N...No nothing. Take...take care, Sakura (heads ahead)
SAKURA : Yes! (tightens her fist) Shanaaarro!!(dashes ahead)
(as Sakura and Lee moves Ino comes into picture)
INO : (sits on knees and makes a handsign) Choji!! Shikamaru!!
CHOJI : Ready!! (defending her from back)
SHIKAMARU : Got you!! (runs ahead and makes handsigns) (stops)
SHIKAMARU : Shadow Possession Jutsu!!
SFX : ZOOOOOP!!
SFX : GRAB!!

(shadow stretches out and grabs three minions)
SHIKAMARU : Now Ino!!
INO : Mind Transfer Jutsu!!
(transfers her mind into those three captured)
(Ino falls and is handled by Choji)
(the three pawns turns to other minions and attacks them)
(some of the minions pass through the pawns and approaches Ino-Shika-Cho)
MINIONS : Grahhhhh!!!
SHIKAMARU : ?!! (makes handsigns) Shadow Stitching Jutsu!! (pierces two of the minions) There are too many of them!
CHOJI : (holding Ino in one arm) Partial Expansion Jutsu!! (expands his other arm) Haaaaaaa!!
(punches and clears one full row of the attacking minions)
MINIONS : Grahhhh!!! (still charging forward)
KIBA : Fang Over Fang!!
(Kiba and Akamaru comes from behind and then separates thus Ino-Shika-Cho and destroys the minions ahead of them)
KIBA : (rolling in mid air in slow motion) Hey Choji!! Hold your horses!! Lets go Akamaru!! (starts rolling fast again and infiltrates into the minions' crowd)
HINATA : Byakugan!!
SFX : GROW..

HINATA : (positions her both arms near her waist and gathers chakra) TWIN LION FIST!! (two lion faced chakra forms on her fists) [ Everyone is doing well... ] Haaahhhh!! (dashes into the crowd)
(kills whoever comes into her range mercilessly with an image of dying Neji in the background)
(some of the minions dodges her fist and attacks her from the blindspot)
MINIONS : GRAAAAAGGGGHHH!!!! (posed in attack position)
HINATA : ?!! (readily changes the attack into....)
(crosses her hands overlapping each other in opposite directions)
(wind blows heavily on the minions)
HINATA : Air Barrier Palm!!!
(hair flowing in the air because of heavy wind velocity)
(throws away the surrounding minions and takes an offensive position once again)
HINATA : (looking at Naruto fighting) [ Thank You...Neji Nii san ] (a smile on her face)
SHINO : (engages in a physical combat while covering his opponent with his bugs) Insect Sphere!!
(The bugs covers the minions in Shino's way and restricts their movement by absorbing their charka)
SHINO : [ I cannot wait for one to get completely annihilated. I must move ahead. ]
(holds a kunai in hand)
(his jacket is floating in the air with his fast movements)
(as he moves ahead, some of the minions in the backgorund are shown taken over by Shino's bugs)

(Naruto runs into the crowd while waving his arms in air at the back)
(Chakra hands emerges and are extended surrounding the minions' crowd left behind)
(Several branching hands emerges out from the extended hands grabbing the minions intact with the main chakra arms)
(Naruto then moves his arms from back to the sides holding the bunch of minions intact)
(Another chakra arm emerges out from Naruto's chest in front extending about six to seven feets ahead)
SFX : SPIRALLING!!!
(A huge Rasengan are formed on the extended arm in the front)
NARUTO : Taste this!!
(With all his might he pulls his both arms from side to the front and smashes the minions grabbed by his chakra arms onto the huge rasengan)
NARUTO : RasenKyuugan!!!
(The victims of the spiraling attack gets absorbed since they are made out of chakra)
SFX : ABSORB!!
SASUKE : (EMS active) (makes handsigns) (jumps in the air and is above in the middle of the attacking minions and rotates his body) Fire Style : Phoenix Flower Jutsu!!
(Several phoenix flowers spreads in the area as Sasuke rotates his body in the air)
(Before the attack hits anyone, Sasuke lits most of them with Amaterasu flames)
(Lands on the ground ahead of the location and cuts the other minions with his lightning blade by extending and swinging it from left to right)
GAI : (in sixth gate) Morning Peacock!!
DARUI : Black Panther!!
SFX : ROAR!!!

AKATSUCHI : EARTH STYLE : GIANT GOLEM!!
(As the jutsu gets activated, two rocky palm of the golem's hands emerges out from the ground and grabs the minions, then forms completely and smashes them like insects)
SARUTOBI CLAN SHINOBIS : Fire Style : Burning Ash!!
(Several other shinobis are shown attacking the minions while some gets killed by the hands of minions)
SFX : CUT!! PIERCE!!! PIERCE!!
SHINOBIS : (dying by piercing) Gyahhh!!
SHINOBIS : Ahhhh!! (gets cut by the minion) ..... (his upper body falls apart)

???? : (puts the bishop against the king) Check and Mate!
HASHIRAMA CLONE : Damn!! you always win against me!!
(Madara and Hashirama's clone is shown playing Shogi on the cliff)
MADARA : You still don't know how to strategize a battle to win it.
(Suddenly the dust from the chaos disturbs their game and the wooden made shogi pieces are thrown away)
MADARA : This battle is also near to check and mate.(smirk)
HASHIRAMA CLONE : .....(then smirks)
(The three huge pawns manipulated by Ino's Mind transfer starts smashing the minions in their way)
(One of the enemy pinion cuts through one of the pawn's arm)
[
INO : Arghhh!!
]
SHIKAMARU : (looking at Ino's bleeding arm) Ino! She's going all out. (looking in the crowd of minions and then again at Ino)
CHOJI : (looking at the crowd)?!! That's ?!
SHIKAMARU : (looks at Choji) Hmm? (turns) ?!!
SHINOBIS : Thats?!! That's just like...
HASHIRAMA CLONES : (standing at the four sides of the barrier) They are using Bijuudama?!! Everyone get the hell out from there. Hurry up!!
(All the incoming minions starts preparing Bijuudamas by opening their mouth wide open)
NARUTO/SASUKE/SAKURA : ?!!
KIBA/HINATA/SHINO : ?!!
MINATO/HIRUZEN/TOBIRAMA : ?!!
(Shinobis are shown running out from the barrier creating a chaos)
HASHIRAMA CLONES : (standing at the four sides of the barrier) Hurry up!!
HASHIRAMA CLONE : That damn Juubi pulled a big one to lure everyone of us.
MADARA : I told you. (smirks) Check and..... Mate
SFX : ZOOOOOOOOOM!!
(Suddenly three attacks of Bijuudama in the form of beams emerges out from the vicinity of the minions' crowd's centre)
SFX : TURN.
(The beams rotate about their origin destroying all the minions)
(The Bijuudamas formed by the minions explodes at their respective positions)
HASHIRAMA : (makes handsigns) Great Wooden Dome!!
(A huge dome covers the opening of the seal thus protecting the shinobis)
CHOJI : ?!! (holding Ino in his arms) Shikamaru?
SHIKAMARU : (turns to Choji) ?!!
(kneels down)
(moves his hand over the skin)
SHIKAMARU : [ That's...cold ] (moves his hand over Ino's face)... No..(his eye pupil starts shaking)...Its..cold..Why is she cold?(tears rolls down his eyes) Why the hell is so cold?!!!
CHOJI : C..cold?!! (looks at Ino) (eyes full of tears)
SFX : BOOOOOOOOOOOOM!!!
SHIKAMARU : (remembers the three way beam)That...That wasn't in our plan. (turns to the blast prevented by the wooden wall) (screams with a crying face)Ino!!!!!!!!!!
(His scream falls on deaf ears because of the blast)
HASHIRAMA CLONE : (wind brushes through his hair) (to Madara) No matter what....The King will always win.

(A flower of hope withers once again to save the King!!)


So you made Ino to force these minions to do some lazer attack against the other minions? One of them was cut at the arm so she felt the cut too... Should I assume then she died for the intense pain, or in the other hand, for the excess of chakra used to control three mini-bijuu-damas? Well planned, the alliance should be pretty exhausted at this rate.

And then, Madara and Hashirama Clone... playing Shogi? Dude, that was sick... I vow before you.

Damn good, overall. Man, you even killed Ino in the process... 5/5 + rep.
 

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awesome
ppl arw startin to wait for ur prediction almost as they are waitin for manga and d timing in wc urelease ur prediction is great

I like dt u show many shinobi making juysue wc I kinda miss I dnt even knw whr gai and darui are.
if you r to release anida one before d manga comes out, ledont make ino die bt rada make sakura heal her with her new medical ninjutsu prowess atleast we get to see sometin new rada than punching and not dying

anyways cool 5/5 prediction
 

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DJKS said:
Nice but it'd be better if you removed all that pairing nonsense.
I would suggest you to read it again because nowhere in the prediction pairing is done. There's another word called friendship if you understand it.
 

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vasu32 said:
couldn't understand the end,but it was good..
btw it should have been sasuke protecting them all with susano,to earn some trust,instead of hashirama.
My bad you couldn't understood the ending :(
Sasuke can't protect everyone alone. Hashirama was the best choice. But someone else protected everyone. Read it again if you're interested =D
 

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Great prediction, as always! Congrats!
And yeah, as someone said, people are waiting for your prediction like they are waiting for the real manga! Plus you did that "ino dies thing", something i have never seen in a 633 prediction until now. You have a great imagination! That's a worthy thing, because you are very good in writing! Keep it up! :bouncy:
 

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That was awesome.
Good job :)
Thanks =D
Great Prediction

I've been waiting
Thanks =D
Waited for this. Very well done! :hooray:
THANK YOU VERY MUCH
Good one 4/5 :)
=D
Awesome dude=D
cant stop laughing by seeing madara playing shougi with hashirama clone in midst of all fighting lmao=D
I had no other choice to pass their boring time.
Really awesome, I love how Madara and Hashirama are just chillen playing,
THANKS =D
Great prediction.
=D
awesome
ppl arw startin to wait for ur prediction almost as they are waitin for manga and d timing in wc urelease ur prediction is great

I like dt u show many shinobi making juysue wc I kinda miss I dnt even knw whr gai and darui are.
if you r to release anida one before d manga comes out, ledont make ino die bt rada make sakura heal her with her new medical ninjutsu prowess atleast we get to see sometin new rada than punching and not dying

anyways cool 5/5 prediction
Making another one literally is too much for me. But as per your request, I would rather keep Ino dead which can make Sakura a little bit stronger because Ino was her close friend and the pain of losing a close one is really painful.
Great prediction, as always! Congrats!
And yeah, as someone said, people are waiting for your prediction like they are waiting for the real manga! Plus you did that "ino dies thing", something i have never seen in a 633 prediction until now. You have a great imagination! That's a worthy thing, because you are very good in writing! Keep it up! :bouncy:
THANKS =D
To all,
THANK YOU ALL FOR ENJOYING THE PREDICTION. =D
 

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Excellent prediction as always ahhimane =D

Now let's go into your detailed feedback on your prediction:

The most impressive thing in your prediction was natural flow of plot, I mean you gave great character development to each character, similliar to mine but in my case it feels like forced sometimes in opposite to you where it well fits into plot.
Obviously as always great format style of writting prediction with well described legend in begining to make prediction easier to read as well as reader is able to differ where character is speaking, where actions happen and where thoughts of charatecter happen.
Logical and interesting development of new techniques or showcase of already known technique made by characters as well as fact that you didn't forget about almost any character which give everyone chance to be important and show something.
Very well described action, which is easy to follow and let us, readers expierience what characters are feeling, doing as well as we can visualize/make picture in reader's mind exactly how manga panel would look like with many details which make it even more entertaining.
You didn't forget about element of humor, Great characterization, pace of plot. You very well wrote each character to act and speak as he/she is doing in real manga, genius skills indeed.
Amount of content you placed in your prediction wasn't too much and too less but around original manga could have =D

Your prediciton was tense, entertaining and didn't feel rushed, that what keep me always to read your all prediction ;)

My rate: 5/5

Summary: I really enjoyed reading it, none second of my life was lost when I was reading your prediction :hooray:

Just keep it up my friend :win:

EDIT: Thanks for catching thief of my prediction and protect me(author ) while I wasn't aware of this fact, hats off for you for that:happy:
 
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Excellent prediction as always ahhimane =D

Now let's go into your detailed feedback on you prediction:

The most impressive thing in your prediction was natural flow of plot, I mean you gave great character development, similliar to mine but in my case it feels like forced sometimes in opposite to you where it well fits into plot.
Obviously as always great format style of writting prediction with well described legend in begining to make prediction easier to read as well as reader is able to differ where character is speaking, where actions happen and where thoughts of charatecter happen.
Logical and interesting development of new techniques or showcase of already known technique made by characters as well as fact that you didn't forget about almost any character which give everyone chance to be important and show something.
Very well described action, which is easy to follow and let us, readers expierience what characters are feeling, doing as well as we can visualize exactly how manga panel would look like with many details which make it even more entertaining.
You didn't forget about element of humor, Great characterization, pace of plot. You very well wrote each character to act and speak as he/she is doing in real manga, very good skills indeed.
Amount of content you place in your prediction wasn't too much and too less but around original manga could have =D

My rate: 5/5

Summary: I really enjoyed reading it, none second of my life was lost when I was reading your prediction :hooray:

Just keep it up my friend :win:

EDIT: Thanks for catching thief of my prediction and protect me(author ) while I wasn't aware of this fact, hats off for you for that:happy:
THANKS =D
And the truth is... no one can provide a detailed feedback like you. Even I can't think of such points you made here.
 
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