"The Past creates the Future" -*Chapter 1*."A Broken Home"

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"The Past creates the Future"

Rated-R - Not recommended to readers who are under the age of 17.
Contains explicit descriptions and offensive language.
You are at your own risk by entering and reading my FanFiction.
I cannot be held responsible.


Chapter 1 " A Broken Home "

A depressing rundown two story house located on a small lot of dirt and crab grass. Chained to a single leafless tree a mutt howls of attention.

Tommy's house - Tommy's Room - Morning

A small messy teen's bedroom. Scanning across the cheap imitation wood paneled room we see various iconic posters of a dreamer boy taped to the walls.
Evil Knievel, Muhammad Ali, Rocky (Stallone) and the dragon himself Bruce Lee.

Moving off the walls we find: a FORT, made of old BED SHEETS and BLANKETS draped over several chairs.
Inside the fort we find Tommy Kuchi (15), a blonde stringy haired AWKWARD Kid aboyt 5'9 and 148 Pounds, Skinny as f*ck dressed in dirty jeans and a faded Cradle Of Filth Concert T-Shirt. In the back of the shirt it says the
following "Your mother sucks c*cks in hell".


Reaching in his scrapbook, a dilapidated SCRAPBOOK held together with electrical tape.
Tommy begins to flipping through the pages.

Close up pages --

Taped crudely inside the scrapbook are various pages torn from HARDCORE PORN MAGAZINES, INCLUDING SCAT TYPE OF PORN PICTURES.
The words "Mother", "Wh*re", "Die" and "C*nt" are scribbled across the pictures.

The page turns and see an even more disturbing sight.. a series of polaroid photos showing various DEAD HOUSEHOLD PETS.
Each animal has been strung up by the neck.

In the Interior of Tommy's House - Kitchen - Morning - Same Day - Continues

A cramped cluttered MESS of DIRTY DISHES, overflowing GARBAGE CANS and JUNK cluttered counters.
In the background an AM RADIO blares "Utopic Monkeys - Today at 6.00PM"

Nexus - (Nexus is Tommy's Stepfather) Well, why don't you tell it to me again.

Standing over the stove scrambling some eggs is Lawliet KUCHI (41), an ATTRACTIVE BLONDED-HAIRED HUGELY BOOBED
WOMAN who looks far to young to be the mother of three children.

Lawliet - Again with this. Jesus, you know i can't go. I have to dance the late shift. We need money or haven't you noticed.
What part of that can't you get throught your f*cking skull?


Sitting at the kitchen table waiting for breakfast we find Lawliet's current abusive LOSER boyfriend: Nexus, WHITE
(47) A LONG HAIRED GREASE SPACE MONKEY with a broken left arm and a heavily bandaged right hand.

Nexus - Hey, don't disrespect me.

Lawliet - Oh, F*ck off.

Nexus - Oh really, F*ck off? (Tone get serious)
How's this? Did i mention that... That new waitress over Shura's Lounge keeps giving me the look?
I guess i'll just have to make my own fun tonight.


Lawliet (Chuckling) - What the wh*re with the big saggy Space monkey tits hanging down to her knees?
Hey, be my guess. Jump on'em and slapp'em around.


Next to Nexus sitting in a high chair is a BABY nicknamed KAITO.

Nexus - Maybe i will. Maybe i'll f*ck the shit out of her.

Lawliet - Well, have a good f*cking time.

Nexus (Shouting) - I will!

The BABY KAITO starts to cry

Lawliet - Oh nice, see what you did? F*cking loud mouth.

Lawliet picks up the baby.

Lawliet continues.

Lawliet - Come on now, Kaito.

Nexus - Waaaa waaaa, all that kid does is cry. (To Kaito) Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!

Lawliet - Hey, News flash... That's what baby's f*cking do! Shit and cry!

A teenage girls enters. Izure Kuchi (17) .. She is dressed inappropriately for School in denin super short
shorts and a tube top. Nexus checks her up and down.

Izure - I don't want eggs.

Izure begins pouring herself a bowl of cereal.

Lawliet - Since when?

Izure - Since now. They're chicken abortions.

Lawliet - No they're not.

Izure - What they are then?

Lawliet - I don't know.... They're eggs. Can you please get your brother?

Izure (Screams) - TOMMY!!!!

Lawliet (exasperated) - Jesus, i could do that! (Trying to be calm)
Don't scream go upstairs and get him.


Izure walks out of the room careful to flash her ass at Nexus.

Nexus - That bitch's got a nice little dumper.

Lawliet (Very mad) - What did you say?

Nexus - Aw, look who's jealous. Affraid of your daughter's ass.

Lawliet throws a spatula of eggs at Nexus.
Lawliet - F*cking pig.

Nexus pauses, look at the eggs on his shirt, smiles..
then SWINGS HIS ARM KNOCKING EVERYTHING OFF THE TABLE.
Nexus - Now, clean it up!

Interior of Tommy's house - Hallway - Morning - Continuous

Izure approaches the door to Tommy's room. A hand written sign proclaiming "STAY OUT OR DIE" is taped to the
door.

Izure stops at the door and listens.. Then slowly pushes open the door.
Interior Tommy's House - Tommy's Room - Morning - Continuous

Izure tip-toes into the room. The sound of Tommy pleasuring himself can be heard coming from inside his fort.
Izure creeps up on the fort and.. RIPS the top blanket off to find.. Tommy furiously MASTURBATING to the pictures
in his scrapbook.

Izure - Oh my god! You little f*ucking pervert!

Tommy quickly covers himself and turns off the scrapbook..then looks up at Izure and screams.
Interior of Tommy's House - Kitchen - Morning - Continuous

Lawliet is picking up breakfast off the floor. The sound of the upstairs commotion filters down to the kitchen.

Lawliet - Jesus Christ! What the f*ck is going on up there? (Shouting Upstairs)
Tommy! What are you screaming about?


Nexus - That little freak needs some serious discipline. He's like a little bitch.

Lawliet - You keep your hands off him. He's a sensitive kid.

Nexus - Give me a f*cking break. He's probably a queer... Watch i bet when he grows up, he'll cut off his balls
and change his name to Michelle.


Lawliet - You know he's still upset about another one of his cats running away.

Izure saunters into the Kitchen with a SHITING EATING GRIN on her face and takes her place at the table.
Tommy follows behind, wearing a mask .. before sitting down at the table Tommy kisses the baby on the head.
Tommy (quietly) - Hey, Kaito.

Nexus GRABS the mask off Tommy's face.
Nexus - Take that stupid thing off. Jesus, you annoy me.

Tommy shoots Nexus a dirty look.
Tommy - I hate you.

Nexus (Holds up his arm) - See this?

Tommy - Yes.

Nexus - When this heals. I'm gonna break it again on your face.

Lawliet (exhausted) - can we all just eat in peace?

Izure starts stroking the bottle of milk in masturbatory fashion.
Izure (taiting Tommy) - Oh, it feels so good. Oh, yeah milk it.


Lawliet - What the hell are you doing?

Tommy looks at Izure with an EVIL look in his eyes.
Izure (responding to her mother) - Nothing.

External Elementary School - Day - Later

The first bell rings as STUDENTS begin filling into school.

Int. Elementary School - Class Room - Day - Continuous

Mr. Green (Known by the Students as Nero-Sama), a chubby teacher with flabby arms scribbles the words
"UTOPIC FUTURE" across the black board. He sets down his chalk and turns to the class wiping dust from his hands.
Nero-Sama (Forced cheeriness) - Well, since today is my personal favorite holiday I've convinced Principle Versuvio to let us have a special halloween treat.

The class cheers

Nero-Sama - Alright settle down people. Everybody stand up and form a line because we are all heading down to the cafeteria to watch a movie called...

Nero-Sama (Cont'd taps on the Chalkboard) - Utopic Monkeys - The Movie

Int. Elementary School - Cafeteria - Day

Close up Movie screen - on scene we watch a fight between a scarred armless warrior and a bunch of Zombies.

The entire school in attendance. Children ranging from ages TEN to SIXTEEN sit unconfortably on long wooden mess hall style benches watching the film.

Tommy stares up at the screen enthralled by the film until...SMACK.. Something hits him IN THE BACK OF THE HEAD.

Tommy - OUCH!!!!!!!!!!

Sitting directly behind Tommy are the SCHOOL BULLIES .. a guy known as CALIBURN (16) an ugly, acne scarred bully and KENSHIN (16) Caliburn's over weight, red-headed sidekick.

KENSHIN is a muscular, green-eyed popular rich kid, that loves to abuse the weaker and is known by his cockyness and rudness towards everyone.

CALIBURN (Whispering) - What's up, shit pants? I heard your sister was caught selling bl*wjobs in the bathroom.
I heard they had to pump the sperm out of her stomach.


Nero-Sama - Shhhhhhhhhhhh.

Caliburn sits back and waits for Nero-Sama to look away.
Caliburn (Whispering) - Hey, F*ggot how's your mommy?

Kenshin (Whispering) - My old man said for a buck she rubbed her t*ts on his face.

Tommy (Quietly) - Shut up.

Kenshin - What'd you say f*ggot?

Caliburn - Aw, Tommy is upset. Hey, ball licker check it out.

Caliburn unfolds a newspaper ad for the STRIPPER OF THE MONTH. the ad features Lawliet Kuchi posing nude.
Caliburn (Continuous) - I was thinking of making copies for the whole school.

Kenshin SLAPS Tommy in the back of the head.

Kenshin - Hey, Think she'd play with me for a quarter and let me suck her T*ts?

Both boys burst out laughing. Tommy JUMPS UP and LASHES OUT at the boys screaming.

Tommy - SHUT UP...SHUT UP...SHUT UP...SHUT UP!

Nero-sama RUSHES over to break up the commotion.. He struggles to pull a screaming and flailing Tommy off of
Kenshin. In the commotion Tommy's Scrapbook falls out of his book bag.


What reaction Mr.Nero-Sama will have to Tommy's perverted and disturbing Scrapbook?
What will be the punishment for both Kenshin and Caliburn?
Stay tuned for the next Chapter of "The Past creates the Future"


Enjoy!!!​
 
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OHHH My god!! Try to give a contract to this man.
This is so good and must be read slowly and with attention, this is professional writing.
This is even better than your other work and i can really relate as i was an un-popular kid in high-school.
Thanks so much Kenshin for deliver once again, Thanks.

For the other user, no the duo is not badass they are actually very rude and people like that exist in every school.

This is very,very realistic.
 

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I have to thank you the guys who commented so far because this one was freaking hard to write.
I consider this on an whole entire different level than "Utopic Monkeys" and much harder to write.
 

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I`ve read through the whole thing and I must say that its very good. In fact almost better than UM:eek:

It has enormous potential, and its length was extream. Love the referrences to Utopic Monkeys, kinda show us that you became a Manga writer and UM became an anime:p

Hopefully as i said before it didn`t break any rules, and that you re-read carefully so that you didn`t forgot to censor some of the words.

It reminds me alot of chapter 9 of UM when we look at the language and words used, and i don`t think that this one has more offensive/matured language than UM, so you should be fine by that fact.

It kinda reminds me of a film I`ve seen a long time ago, but can`t really remember what it was about. Any inspiration for this FF?

Also the way you include yourselfxd It almost fits you perfectly:p

I just hope that it doesn`t get closed/trashed because you portrated a mod/admin in a way they didn`t like:-/

Anyway, looking forward to the next one:D
 

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I`ve read through the whole thing and I must say that its very good. In fact almost better than UM:eek:

It has enormous potential, and its length was extream. Love the referrences to Utopic Monkeys, kinda show us that you became a Manga writer and UM became an anime:p

Hopefully as i said before it didn`t break any rules, and that you re-read carefully so that you didn`t forgot to censor some of the words.

It reminds me alot of chapter 9 of UM when we look at the language and words used, and i don`t think that this one has more offensive/matured language than UM, so you should be fine by that fact.

It kinda reminds me of a film I`ve seen a long time ago, but can`t really remember what it was about. Any inspiration for this FF?

Also the way you include yourselfxd It almost fits you perfectly:p

I just hope that it doesn`t get closed/trashed because you portrated a mod/admin in a way they didn`t like:-/

Anyway, looking forward to the next one:D
Mods/Administrators should not feel bad or disrespected about it. I'm only using their names because it seems like a funny thing to do in this section and off course draws more attention.
I don't mean to disrespect anyone, neither nexus, neither Lawliet, neither anyone mentioned. I even included myself in for fun.
Nexus know that we have a good relation going on and i merely used his username on a character, i'm actually not portraying them but just using their nicknames.
I described Caliburn as a fatty but i don't even know how he looks like so it just shows i'm not portraying them but only giving him kind of an homage and a thank you for the comprehension in the other issue.
Also i know that Lawliet is not 41 as well,so i could never be portraying her either, merely using her name and if she has sense of humor she will appreciate it.
No i did not based this on a movie, this is actually based on everyday life.
 

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its good....
like the story plot
and where's its heading..
bad idea that u used the mods as characters
you probably pissed them off even more now....:)
and btw
how the f*ck did u get banned again?
what u do this time u rebel...
 
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OHHH My god!! Try to give a contract to this man.
This is so good and must be read slowly and with attention, this is professional writing.
This is even better than your other work and i can really relate as i was an un-popular kid in high-school.
Thanks so much Kenshin for deliver once again, Thanks.

For the other user, no the duo is not badass they are actually very rude and people like that exist in every school.

This is very,very realistic.
Agree, i have read yesterday but only today i had the time to post about it.
Once again Kenshin delivers the best work.
 

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Nexus doesn't know that Lawliet and me
Do it in my van every Sunday.
She tells him she's in club but she doesn't go
Still she's on her knees and Nexus doesn't know!

Oh Nexus doesn't know!
So Don't Tell Nexus!
Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus doesn't know!
So Don't Tell Nexus!

Lawliet says she's out shopping,
But she's under me and I'm not stopping...

Because Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus doesn't know! (X3)
So don't tell Nexus!
Nexus doesn't know!

Don't tell Nexus!

I can't believe he's so trusting,
While I'm right behind you thrusting.
Lawliet's got him on the phone,
And she's trying not to moan.
It's a three-way call and he knows nothing!

Nexus doesn't know!(X3)
So don't tell Nexus!
Nexus doesn't know!(X3)

We'll put on a show!
Everyone will go!
Nexus doesn't know!(x3)

The parkin lot
Why not? It's so cool when you're on top!
His front lawn in the snow
Life is so hard because Nexus doesn't know!

We did it on his birthday...

Nexus doesn't know!(X4)

Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus won't know!
Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus's gotta know!
Gotta tell Nexus!
Gotta tell him myself!
Nexus doesn't know! (X10)


[Chant] Nexus doesn't know! (x7)
[Chant] Nexus's gotta go

well, its unusual fanfic, to much american highschool humor
i say american becouse in our schools, rich kids get kicked
:D

i think adding Admins/Mods names was a bit too much, since whole plot was quite insulting, and whos Izure? first i thought it could be me couse of color, but who knows xd sluts are people tho
I heard your sister was caught selling bl*wjobs in the bathroom
xd
 
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Mods/Administrators should not feel bad or disrespected about it. I'm only using their names because it seems like a funny thing to do in this section and off course draws more attention.
I don't mean to disrespect anyone, neither nexus, neither Lawliet, neither anyone mentioned. I even included myself in for fun.
Nexus know that we have a good relation going on and i merely used his username on a character, i'm actually not portraying them but just using their nicknames.
I described Caliburn as a fatty but i don't even know how he looks like so it just shows i'm not portraying them but only giving him kind of an homage and a thank you for the comprehension in the other issue.
Also i know that Lawliet is not 41 as well,so i could never be portraying her either, merely using her name and if she has sense of humor she will appreciate it.
No i did not based this on a movie, this is actually based on everyday life.
and soundtrack for this chapterU_U

Nexus doesn't know that Lawliet and me
Do it in my van every Sunday.
She tells him she's in club but she doesn't go
Still she's on her knees and Nexus doesn't know!

Oh Nexus doesn't know!
So Don't Tell Nexus!
Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus doesn't know!
So Don't Tell Nexus!

Lawliet says she's out shopping,
But she's under me and I'm not stopping...

Because Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus doesn't know! (X3)
So don't tell Nexus!
Nexus doesn't know!

Don't tell Nexus!

I can't believe he's so trusting,
While I'm right behind you thrusting.
Lawliet's got him on the phone,
And she's trying not to moan.
It's a three-way call and he knows nothing!

Nexus doesn't know!(X3)
So don't tell Nexus!
Nexus doesn't know!(X3)

We'll put on a show!
Everyone will go!
Nexus doesn't know!(x3)

The parkin lot
Why not? It's so cool when you're on top!
His front lawn in the snow
Life is so hard because Nexus doesn't know!

We did it on his birthday...

Nexus doesn't know!(X4)

Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus won't know!
Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus's gotta know!
Gotta tell Nexus!
Gotta tell him myself!
Nexus doesn't know! (X10)


[Chant] Nexus doesn't know! (x7)
[Chant] Nexus's gotta go

well, its unusual fanfic, to much american highschool humor
i say american becouse in our schools, rich kids get kicked
:D

i think adding Admins/Mods names was a bit too much, since whole plot was quite insulting, and whos Izure? first i thought it could be me couse of color, but who knows xd sluts are people tho


xd
He explained that it was not offensive towards them but only using their nicknames not portraying them. He still got banned :D
Himura is the best lol
 

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He explained that it was not offensive towards them but only using their nicknames not portraying them. He still got banned :D
Himura is the best lol
did u read my sound track song? xd

and its still offensive no matter what you say

some ppl ignor it, some people get offended its not smth u can control
 

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Nexus doesn't know that Lawliet and me
Do it in my van every Sunday.
She tells him she's in club but she doesn't go
Still she's on her knees and Nexus doesn't know!

Oh Nexus doesn't know!
So Don't Tell Nexus!
Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus doesn't know!
So Don't Tell Nexus!

Lawliet says she's out shopping,
But she's under me and I'm not stopping...

Because Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus doesn't know! (X3)
So don't tell Nexus!
Nexus doesn't know!

Don't tell Nexus!

I can't believe he's so trusting,
While I'm right behind you thrusting.
Lawliet's got him on the phone,
And she's trying not to moan.
It's a three-way call and he knows nothing!

Nexus doesn't know!(X3)
So don't tell Nexus!
Nexus doesn't know!(X3)

We'll put on a show!
Everyone will go!
Nexus doesn't know!(x3)

The parkin lot
Why not? It's so cool when you're on top!
His front lawn in the snow
Life is so hard because Nexus doesn't know!

We did it on his birthday...

Nexus doesn't know!(X4)

Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus won't know!
Nexus doesn't know!
Nexus's gotta know!
Gotta tell Nexus!
Gotta tell him myself!
Nexus doesn't know! (X10)


[Chant] Nexus doesn't know! (x7)
[Chant] Nexus's gotta go

well, its unusual fanfic, to much american highschool humor
i say american becouse in our schools, rich kids get kicked
:D

i think adding Admins/Mods names was a bit too much, since whole plot was quite insulting, and whos Izure? first i thought it could be me couse of color, but who knows xd sluts are people tho


xd
I'm Izure, well that was my old username, and I didn't quite enjoy that bit, the rest was good though..
 
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The chapter was amazing. So well written and realistic as others said. This do happen in poorly-organized families and to kids who are loners in school.
Kids can be very harsh to others in school, that's why bullying is serious business nowadays.
But i have to lol because Kenshin + Caliburn part is priceless. "I heard they had to pump out the sperm out of her stomach" xd. the guy is a genius writer.
 
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The chapter was amazing. So well written and realistic as others said. This do happen in poorly-organized families and to kids who are loners in school.
Kids can be very harsh to others in school, that's why bullying is serious business nowadays.
But i have to lol because Kenshin + Caliburn part is priceless. "I heard they had to pump out the sperm out of her stomach" xd. the guy is a genius writer.
x2 and also burst out laughing at that quote. The guy is the golden boy of this place for sure. It's a shame that he's always banned.
 
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