My First Poem O_O

[Lara]

ok don't laugh....i just got bored and wrote it O_O


A Lost Love Story

Between silver stars
I'm waiting for you to come
On a moon's ray
To run down
From the secretly dream of the vague love
In which game I wait for you to draw me in.
So, I'm waiting pointlessly
The moment when your head will fall on my chest
And your lips will whisper me
"I love you".
Pointlessly I'm deceiving myself
And telling myself "I only want you"
You are far away,
You absorb with love
The smell of another flower...

 

[Mizutoki]

Lara you could have just sent it to me on Pm

Lol xD nice poem i like it

 

[Lara]

lol thx :hug:

 

[squiremarcus]

nice

 

[-Andy-]

ok don't laugh....i just got bored and wrote it O_O


A Lost Love Story

Between silver stars
I'm waiting for you to come
On a moon's ray
To run down
From the secretly dream of the vague love
In which game I wait for you to draw me in.
So, I'm waiting pointlessly
The moment when your head will fall on my chest
And your lips will whisper me
"I love you".
Pointlessly I'm deceiving myself
And telling myself "I only want you"
You are far away,
You absorb with love
The smell of another flower...

great job i really like it a lot lara and dont say its not good its really great^^

 

[-Damon-]

ok don't laugh....i just got bored and wrote it O_O


A Lost Love Story

Between silver stars
I'm waiting for you to come
On a moon's ray
To run down
From the secretly dream of the vague love
In which game I wait for you to draw me in.
So, I'm waiting pointlessly
The moment when your head will fall on my chest
And your lips will whisper me
"I love you".
Pointlessly I'm deceiving myself
And telling myself "I only want you"
You are far away,
You absorb with love
The smell of another flower...

this is actually not funny at all is really good good job lara.^^

 

[Lara]

great job i really like it a lot lara and dont say its not good its really great^^

this is actually not funny at all is really good good job lara.^^

thx guyz :hug:

 

[Riku..]

ok don't laugh....i just got bored and wrote it O_O


A Lost Love Story

Between silver stars
I'm waiting for you to come
On a moon's ray
To run down
From the secretly dream of the vague love
In which game I wait for you to draw me in.
So, I'm waiting pointlessly
The moment when your head will fall on my chest
And your lips will whisper me
"I love you".
Pointlessly I'm deceiving myself
And telling myself "I only want you"
You are far away,
You absorb with love
The smell of another flower...

very nice... excellent job indeed...

 

[Rei]

There's nothing to laugh about, this is a great poem girl.
I loved this part the most:

"So, I'm waiting pointlessly
The moment when your head will fall on my chest
And your lips will whisper me
"I love you". "

awww

 

[Lara]

There's nothing to laugh about, this is a great poem girl.
I loved this part the most:

"So, I'm waiting pointlessly
The moment when your head will fall on my chest
And your lips will whisper me
"I love you". "

awww

thx :hug:

 

[BishamonSama]

Not bad, but a bit generic >>

All teenage poetry is either emo and dark, about sadness and despair, or a combination of both. o_o

 

[Kagutsuchi]

nice 1 sensei !!

 

[Lara]

Not bad, but a bit generic >>

All teenage poetry is either emo and dark, about sadness and despair, or a combination of both. o_o

as i sead....it's my first poem =/

nice 1 sensei !!

thx ^^