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Hello! Recently I entered a contest to win a trip to London with all my classmates. I've only travel in a plane twice. To Madeira, a Portuguese island (The 2 trips were to go and to return xd) and in truth I've only been to Spain, which is right next door. I really like to travel and it's my dream to visit all the world. Please help me fullfill my gold.

I wrote an essay and I published it on the site. Now I need to acquire votes, stars. Please go there and read my Essay. Vote and comment.

I'd really like that you all vote 5 stars, but I know you'll vote as you see fit. But please vote.



Enjoy, and thank you very much for helping me achieve my dream.
 

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That was great dude. .-. Five stars, not only for me wishing you to win, partially due to one of my dreams being that of travelling the world as well, but the way you wrote it was great. It was a little short though. Basically, your school, in truth, is just a grassy plain, and while the way you explained it made it so much more than that, for something like that, I would think that more elaboration would be necessary. Just because I can already see a few people, likely more close-minded, looking at it and going: Wth? :| Just people who would take the contest more literally, while you chose a more figurative approach. The way you wrote it would be greatly appealing to some people, but to more literal people, it may not pass off as well. And since this is basing itself on public votes and not like votes from official writers, then that could be a detriment. =/

Anywho, to me, it was phenomonal. You should be very, very proud of that essay. ^_^
 

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That was great dude. .-. Five stars, not only for me wishing you to win, partially due to one of my dreams being that of travelling the world as well, but the way you wrote it was great. It was a little short though. Basically, your school, in truth, is just a grassy plain, and while the way you explained it made it so much more than that, for something like that, I would think that more elaboration would be necessary. Just because I can already see a few people, likely more close-minded, looking at it and going: Wth? :| Just people who would take the contest more literally, while you chose a more figurative approach. The way you wrote it would be greatly appealing to some people, but to more literal people, it may not pass off as well. And since this is basing itself on public votes and not like votes from official writers, then that could be a detriment. =/

Anywho, to me, it was phenomonal. You should be very, very proud of that essay. ^_^
Thank you! You had kinda the same reaction of my teacher xd

Did you vote? Were you able to vote?
 

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@Riku: My teacher read it in our classroom. And that made me think that I should've wrote a bit more... But the essay was already published...

Btw, comment there aswell. ^^
 
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@Riku: My teacher read it in our classroom. And that made me think that I should've wrote a bit more... But the essay was already published...
Meh, just said it because something like this in which it's basing itself on votes from people on around the world and not just three or four judges, you'd likely need more to convey your vision to others.

But don't worry about it, from what I saw, you already have a bunch of five star votes. It's just something to keep in mind for the next time you try something like it. ^_^ Just try to find a mid-point of length and briefness. Although, I think you really found the right words to explain it in general.
 

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Meh, just said it because something like this in which it's basing itself on votes from people on around the world and not just three or four judges, you'd likely need more to convey your vision to others.

But don't worry about it, from what I saw, you already have a bunch of five star votes. It's just something to keep in mind for the next time you try something like it. ^_^ Just try to find a mid-point of length and briefness. Although, I think you really found the right words to explain it in general.
:rolleyes: Yeah... some of those I'm not really proud...

Btw, If I get on the top my essay will go to a commitee to be judged
 

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Nice work Kiwii. I read it and loved it. Iunno why, but I thought it would be different from what the title was. I'm not really sure why still... Not kidding I just read it again. Eh might be because i'm tired. Either way it was worth the read, tired or not, so 5 stars!

I also lol'd at the comment. >.>
 

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I got you another 5 starts, and I really hope you'll be able to visit London. Btw, when is the trip set? Coz I'm going to London I June too, so we might meet ^^

Aynway, I wish you a lot of good luck ^^
 

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Taking that line and writing it down in your essay was pretty creative. xD
5/5 for Narutarded Essay !
 

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Thank you guys so much. Your vote means alot to me and your coments aswell. Btw, don't be afraid to comment there aswell... The only comment i got (as you already saw) was that annoying guy xd
 
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